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Comment from Debbie Noland
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Good job with the child's point of view and dialogue in this nonfiction piece about the birth of your little sister. I was almost seven when my brother was born, and the only thing I had noticed different about my mom was that she had to wear her shoes with the buckles open because her feet had swollen. Certainly, it was a more innocent time in which to grow up.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Thank you so much, Debbie. We were so innocent in those days. My grandchildren think my story was, 'cool'?? LOL. They know everything these days. Such a shame. Our mothers covered they bumps, as my generation did. You didn't advertise the fact you were pregnant to the degree they do today. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my story. :) Sandra.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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"Oh, that is what that lady is here for, ("Oh, that is what this lady is here for,)

I love this one. Such great humor, although at the time you probably weren't laughing. What an entry for the non-fiction contest. Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
    Thank you so much, Debbie. We were so innocent in those days. My grandchildren think my story is, 'cool' LOL. I'm glad you enjoyed it, my friend. :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from Treischel
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A very good rendition of how children act and think, especially back in that day and age. At least you didn't get the stork story. Well written. Flows well and realistically. I don't see any errors. Good story. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, Tom. I am writing lots of little stories to give to my grandchildren. It will be an eye-opener for them. The differences in our upbringing is amazing. I still prefer mine to the childhoods children have today. Thank you for the good luck wishes! :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from c_lucas
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Children were not enlightened with the facts of life in the forties. It was in the sixties that the truth was told. This is very well written with a humorous attitude.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, Charlie. It was far nicer, I think, to retain your innocence a bit longer. Children are forced to grow up so quickly these days. Mind you, they probably think their way is far better than the childhood we had. xsx Sandra.
reply by c_lucas on 31-Mar-2015
    You're welcome Sandra. Charlie
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Oh my goodness, being the youngest in our family, I never had the experience you describe, and really never gave it a lot of thought, I guess. This is too adorable, Sandra - I don't think there's a thing I'd change. It's a very clever entry for this contest - I doubt many, if any, will relate a childhood memory. Best of luck with this fine entry. :)

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, Dawn, I am enjoying writing these little stories. I am going to print them and give a copy to all my grandchildren, so they can see what I was like, and later what their dad's were like! LOL. I am sure they will find them funny to the way children are now. It's a different world! I've just reviewed your story, chapter 3, it is really good. Don't stop writing it. :) xsx Sandra.
reply by Dawn Munro on 30-Mar-2015
    Bless you, Sandra - you're so darned encouraging and kind. I see why, now, if you can remember your childhood in such detail. :)
Comment from jmdg1954
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Sandra, a wonderful recollection of the birth of your baby sister (even with a big head). Some of the best stories written are ones just like this one.

Nicely done and thanks for sharing. John

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, John. It's a bit different these days, isn't it? LOL. :) Sandra.
Comment from Louise Michelle
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Hi Sandra,

You are so skillful at writing these non-fiction slices-of-life. You definitely have the ability to capture the child's point of view and you do it with such humor. I particularly loved the line about Mum walking funny, and the kids assuming she doesn't want a baby. Just charming!

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, Lou. I am going to write all my 'memories' down for my grandchildren to read one day. They might find the stories funny as in, strange, compared to the childhoods they are enjoying. LOL. I forgot to say, thank you, for the help you gave me, regarding FANBOYS. Now it makes sense! :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from addhoc
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I enjoyed your story, it took me back to my own youth. I remember my younger sister being born when I was eight. You are right we were all so innocent back then.I think you captured the thoughts of the little brother and sister really well.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, my friend, for this really lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed my bit of childhood memories. :)Sandra.
Comment from Helena Frances
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Another fun story. Children do seem to overlook the obvious changes--they are so busy in their own lives. Funny to think you didn't notice your mom's
body changes, but then again, maternity styles have changed drastically!
A fun read!

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you, Helena, for another great review. When I was a child, and this story was 60 years ago, (that gave my age away!) pregnant mums wore very loose baggy clothes, there was no showing off bumps back in those days, even when I was carrying my sons, 44 and 41 years ago, the fashion was to hide the bump and not show it, heaven forbid! If we did, it was considered quite unseemly! LOL, What my grandmother would think of today's young pregnant ladies, I dread to think! Thank you again, my friend. :) sandra
Comment from MelB
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Wonderfully written Sandra. Don't you just love the innocence of children? I enjoyed reading the questions the siblings asked and that they thought maybe their parents would change their minds about the baby. The putting it back was funny too. An enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much, my lovely friend, for another of your wonderful reviews! I'm glad you enjoyed this one too. :) Sandra xsx