Mars One-All 4PTS TOGETHER
An out-of-this-world love story13 total reviews
Comment from Lylise
What an effort! Sorry for delay. Been out of town. I read this during a layover in Dallas.
This to me is two stories. The first is the psychological onslaught and the second is the alien dynamic. I think this should have been longer, not shorter. I so enjoyed reading it. You covered all the bases and this is executed so well.
Love your work, girl. Very well done. Lynda
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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What an effort! Sorry for delay. Been out of town. I read this during a layover in Dallas.
This to me is two stories. The first is the psychological onslaught and the second is the alien dynamic. I think this should have been longer, not shorter. I so enjoyed reading it. You covered all the bases and this is executed so well.
Love your work, girl. Very well done. Lynda
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for the stars and sharing your lay-over. Spent a fair bit of time in Dallas.
Still considering an extension. maybe picking up the story of the other volunteer astronauts.
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Yes, that would be awesome! Do it!!!
Comment from maggieadams
Ingrid, this is a great four part story...you should submit this to several magazines...the story read like a love story that could be plausible...even though, I know it could not be, you wrote with 'Martian' voice and made me believe. Great job.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Ingrid, this is a great four part story...you should submit this to several magazines...the story read like a love story that could be plausible...even though, I know it could not be, you wrote with 'Martian' voice and made me believe. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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I'm still pondering whether to turn this into a book. Picking up threads of other astronauts lives in multiple chapters then bringing them all together at the end. Thanks so much for the stars,
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Great idea, and very challenging, but you could do it.
Comment from Sasha
I am glad you posted this as one story. I liked reading it all at the same time. Again, I am so impressed with how you put this together. I will have to do some research on this project. Wonderful work with this, superbly written with a perfect ending.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I am glad you posted this as one story. I liked reading it all at the same time. Again, I am so impressed with how you put this together. I will have to do some research on this project. Wonderful work with this, superbly written with a perfect ending.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I'm still waiting to get shit for this 5th post, but /I had people read different segments and ask questions that were answered had readers read the story is sequence. Thanks for the stars for this and the conclusion.
Comment from PatVallesMangan
Wonderful! I do not usually choose this genre to read but this was such a pleasant surprise. It was great that you put all of these together, so I could get, TOTAL IMPACT (couldn't resist.) Tho' this certainly fits the genre it has a "human factor," which I compliment you on. I find much in this genre that I can usually not relate to, but this was great! Interesting as well, that this project is underway! What could be better than an "out of this world" romance story! I truly enjoyed! Blessings! Ooooh! SO glad she was pregnant! :) ~ Pat :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Wonderful! I do not usually choose this genre to read but this was such a pleasant surprise. It was great that you put all of these together, so I could get, TOTAL IMPACT (couldn't resist.) Tho' this certainly fits the genre it has a "human factor," which I compliment you on. I find much in this genre that I can usually not relate to, but this was great! Interesting as well, that this project is underway! What could be better than an "out of this world" romance story! I truly enjoyed! Blessings! Ooooh! SO glad she was pregnant! :) ~ Pat :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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You know, shocking as this may sound, I rarely write romance, and even when I do, it is never central to the story. Hardly ever do I move into sci-fi or fantasy, but the true life Mars One Mission totally fascinated me, that 24 people were willingly signing up for a guaranteed death on Mars. I tried to imagine the hundreds of family and friends who would be impacted by this decision and it still baffles me. The story evolved as I was thinking about goodbyes.
Thank you for your very generous feedback.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I am so glad that you included the entire story. I read the last chapter and fell in love with it at that time. Now with the whole story in place, it all makes sense. What a wonderful bittersweet story of exploration. At heat, all human beings (and perhaps a few Martians) love adventure.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I am so glad that you included the entire story. I read the last chapter and fell in love with it at that time. Now with the whole story in place, it all makes sense. What a wonderful bittersweet story of exploration. At heat, all human beings (and perhaps a few Martians) love adventure.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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People kept picking up parts of the story and asked questions that were answered in other parts. It is over 8K words and by FS standards, few people 'suffer' through such long reads, but putting it all together helped those that enjoyed the story. Thanks for being one of those members.
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I truly am, and that's one of the limitations of this site. I write incredibly long books, usually over 100,000 words so I feel this site offers me practice at becoming more succinct, but it is hard to write longer passages because people don't want to read it. Keep it up, though, I will read.
Comment from kriver
Hi Echo,
I think this is a very good write.
It held my interest all the way through.
I am not into romance stories either.
I think it was an interesting well thought out write. A very good story line. Good smooth dialogue and word flow. I am glad you posted all 4 parts together. For me, it made it easier to read all the way through. I think maybe you should consider developing the story further.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Hi Echo,
I think this is a very good write.
It held my interest all the way through.
I am not into romance stories either.
I think it was an interesting well thought out write. A very good story line. Good smooth dialogue and word flow. I am glad you posted all 4 parts together. For me, it made it easier to read all the way through. I think maybe you should consider developing the story further.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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So I'm told. In that there are 24 people--for real--going to Mars in yen tears, there's a real possibility to tell their story. Thanks for your interest and support. Bless you for the stars!
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Hi Echo
Personally that is not a place I want to go. It is an empty place. There is nothing there but dirt and rocks. I guess it would be a good place if you wanted to cook yourself in the sun for a Mar's sun tan. But I think it is kinda far just to go see a pile of rocks and a beach without water. One good thing though, the beach there wouldn't be crowded. Hopefully, there isn't some kind of surprise being with very large teeth that thinks humans would make a tasty snack.
Best Regards,
K River
Comment from c_lucas
Technically, you have written a novelette. Roswell will always be part of our history and impregnate wordsmith's minds. I applaud your masterful work. Very good job of writing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Technically, you have written a novelette. Roswell will always be part of our history and impregnate wordsmith's minds. I applaud your masterful work. Very good job of writing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thank you. The reality of the Mars One Mission fascinated me and this came barrelling out of my consciousness as a result.
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You're welcome, Ingrid. Charlie
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Ingrid,
Yeah, love a happy ending for sure... I would love to say you took me to the moon and back, but in fact you have taken me much further... my eyes are set for Mars.
Truly loved the way you weaved your magic to tie-up all the loose ends... the letter from Mark had me watching a scene, both of future and memory in the same breath.
Loved this story, it was one that I wished didn't have an ending... or maybe it hasn't? Maybe I'll know the true ending in ten years or so?
Thank you for your well written story and the beautiful mind that created it, always a pleasure to be entertained by you in such a magic way... I saved this six for the entirety of a story that was written the way it flowed... seamlessly.
With our thoughts we create,
the possibilities to a greater understanding,
James vx's
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Hi Ingrid,
Yeah, love a happy ending for sure... I would love to say you took me to the moon and back, but in fact you have taken me much further... my eyes are set for Mars.
Truly loved the way you weaved your magic to tie-up all the loose ends... the letter from Mark had me watching a scene, both of future and memory in the same breath.
Loved this story, it was one that I wished didn't have an ending... or maybe it hasn't? Maybe I'll know the true ending in ten years or so?
Thank you for your well written story and the beautiful mind that created it, always a pleasure to be entertained by you in such a magic way... I saved this six for the entirety of a story that was written the way it flowed... seamlessly.
With our thoughts we create,
the possibilities to a greater understanding,
James vx's
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much for the six. It's a wild concept that so many people are willing to give up their families and lives on Earth with a guaranteed death on Mars. I suppose in ten years the whole thing could be scrubbed, but this is what came out of my rambling thoughts. Love the stars.
Comment from Sis Cat
I applaud you giving readers the option to read your story in one sitting. The sections flow well together with a natural progression of story. It is also a good strategy to split a long story apart and serialize this. You should publish this exceptional example of science fiction. Thank you for daring.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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I applaud you giving readers the option to read your story in one sitting. The sections flow well together with a natural progression of story. It is also a good strategy to split a long story apart and serialize this. You should publish this exceptional example of science fiction. Thank you for daring.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Daring is the right word as both sci-fi and romance are generally two genres I avoid. Thanks for hanging in. Wow, over 8,000 words!
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This is a great achievement. 8,000 words. : )
Comment from Cumbrianlass
merits more. The potential has only just been tapped in my opinion. That it ties into an actual upcoming event makes it all the more exciting and lends credibility to the plot.
Don't shelve this one.
Your friend from down the road.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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merits more. The potential has only just been tapped in my opinion. That it ties into an actual upcoming event makes it all the more exciting and lends credibility to the plot.
Don't shelve this one.
Your friend from down the road.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
this glitter of light is filling my room with star power. Thanks so much.
