Grace is What We Need
Can't we all just get along?50 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
Shards of hate hurled hard, [I hope you don't mind a small suggestion, Karen. This is such a fine poem on a cogent theme. But as I read that line I wonder about the use of the word "hard". Anything "hurled" is thrown with gusto. I was worried about a problem with a needed rhyme, but that isn't the case here. To me the tempo is fine with the "hard" removed, but "are" could be added to give it another syllable. I hope you don't think I'm "re-writing" your poem. It's too good to do that.
Anyway, just my two cent's worth. Whoa! In this case a buck! Maybe more.
Good writing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Shards of hate hurled hard, [I hope you don't mind a small suggestion, Karen. This is such a fine poem on a cogent theme. But as I read that line I wonder about the use of the word "hard". Anything "hurled" is thrown with gusto. I was worried about a problem with a needed rhyme, but that isn't the case here. To me the tempo is fine with the "hard" removed, but "are" could be added to give it another syllable. I hope you don't think I'm "re-writing" your poem. It's too good to do that.
Anyway, just my two cent's worth. Whoa! In this case a buck! Maybe more.
Good writing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much, Jay. I appreciate your two cents worth! I will definitely take another look. :-)
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I LIKED the poem.
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I liked the changes. 8-)
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Karen. First of all, let me say your artwork used is striking. very tranquil looking.
Your poem matches it so very well also. Nivce job from start to finish:
"if love is our belief.
Judging's not our job,
grace is what we need.
Bravo, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Hi, Karen. First of all, let me say your artwork used is striking. very tranquil looking.
Your poem matches it so very well also. Nivce job from start to finish:
"if love is our belief.
Judging's not our job,
grace is what we need.
Bravo, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much, Bob. :-)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, boxergirl, you're so right, your poem is causing me to feel sorrowful for all of us - what's WRONG with people? I'm Christian, so I follow the teachings of Jesus Christ as much as I can too, but let's face it - even atheists (never mind other religions) should realize we are all one species, all flesh and blood - we all eventually die - whether you believe in an afterlife or not, you'd think that those who don't would still figure they should make this life as pleasant as possible for every one of us...??? Craziness!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Ah, boxergirl, you're so right, your poem is causing me to feel sorrowful for all of us - what's WRONG with people? I'm Christian, so I follow the teachings of Jesus Christ as much as I can too, but let's face it - even atheists (never mind other religions) should realize we are all one species, all flesh and blood - we all eventually die - whether you believe in an afterlife or not, you'd think that those who don't would still figure they should make this life as pleasant as possible for every one of us...??? Craziness!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Dawn. I appreciate your comments. Glad to know we are sisters in Christ. :-)
Comment from amahra
Very beautiful art work you chose. Good thought provoking message with good word choice and steady rhythmic flow. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Very beautiful art work you chose. Good thought provoking message with good word choice and steady rhythmic flow. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much. :-)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Good advice. Hate does no one any good and we should try our best to avoid it. Poem flowed nicely and provided a clear message. Write on.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Good advice. Hate does no one any good and we should try our best to avoid it. Poem flowed nicely and provided a clear message. Write on.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you for reviewing. :-)
Comment from Glasstruth
I believe if you're not hurting anyone than why should it matter? Read your author notes, and all I can say is that people are truly crazy. Great alliteration and nice rhyming too. Well crafted and thought out. Les
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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I believe if you're not hurting anyone than why should it matter? Read your author notes, and all I can say is that people are truly crazy. Great alliteration and nice rhyming too. Well crafted and thought out. Les
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your review, Les. :-)
Comment from patcelaw
It is never right to kill because of what we believe to be wrong. The judgment should be left to the final judge. Blessings Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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It is never right to kill because of what we believe to be wrong. The judgment should be left to the final judge. Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Patricia. :-)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm tired of it too, and I think you said it all very well in this poem. Just one little glitch:
Both sides so sure, the
other one is wrong. << Remove the comma, since this sentence has an invisible but implied THAT, and you never put a comma before THAT or before it might have been used.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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I'm tired of it too, and I think you said it all very well in this poem. Just one little glitch:
Both sides so sure, the
other one is wrong. << Remove the comma, since this sentence has an invisible but implied THAT, and you never put a comma before THAT or before it might have been used.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much, Phyllis. I will fix my glitch. 8-)
Comment from thomdble
Yes indeed. Hate spawns hate spawns hate. Jesus is love and I grew up with the impression this was a Christian nation. But there I go ... As you can tell I truly took your wonderful words to heart and I think words like this should be on the airwaves instead of the H. word. Thank you
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Yes indeed. Hate spawns hate spawns hate. Jesus is love and I grew up with the impression this was a Christian nation. But there I go ... As you can tell I truly took your wonderful words to heart and I think words like this should be on the airwaves instead of the H. word. Thank you
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your review. 8-)
Comment from risktaker
Right-On. I agree. Message well-expressed. God made us all, God is the judge. God knew what we all would do before we were born. Who am I to say who God WILL NO LOVE? People letting Satan have their heart and their mind, "cause we can't be haters if love is our belief." " Jesus died for one and all."
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Right-On. I agree. Message well-expressed. God made us all, God is the judge. God knew what we all would do before we were born. Who am I to say who God WILL NO LOVE? People letting Satan have their heart and their mind, "cause we can't be haters if love is our belief." " Jesus died for one and all."
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for your review and kind comments. 8-)
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