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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Beside"
poems inspired by Psalm 23

31 total reviews 
Comment from Joy Graham
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I have a soft spot for the Minute Poem. You captured the difficult rhythm and meter perfectly. Great rhyme choices. Interesting near rhyme at the end with sure / more. This is a great entry in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-May-2015


reply by the author on 28-May-2015
    Hi Joy,
    Good to hear from you. Looks like you have opened a book for sending poems to Brooke. What a wonderful idea.

    Thank you for the kind words about this poem, its meter and rhyme. I have been trying all sorts of forms since we took out Sonnets and Other Forms class. This was my first Minute Poem. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
reply by Joy Graham on 28-May-2015
    Yes, please add a poem or message. So many beautifyl messages for her already. She has touched so many lives.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
    Will do.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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Hello good friend and thank you for the wonderful retelling of the powerful story of salvation, hope and of joy. You poem was perfect and I am sure the angels are rejoicing as they hear it read in heaven. Loyd

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you for the generous six stars! I am so happy to hear you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for the encouraging comments.
reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 30-Mar-2015
    My pleasure, Loyd
Comment from Ridley Williams
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Hi Debi,
I enjoyed how you took the Biblical story and portrayed it in poetic verse.
Your minute poem brings the message of hope and healing in a solid delivery.
Best of luck with this splendid entry.
Have a wonderful Sunday,, Bill

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
    Thank you for the kind comments and best wishes, Bill. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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This is a lovely entry for the Minute Poem contest. Perfect meter and perfect aabb rhyme scheme. You tell the bible story so well in so few words. Lovely picture to accompany. Thank you for the author notes which reflect what you have written. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you for the wonderful review. You say such encouraging things about the writing. I appreciate you stopping by.
Comment from skye
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how quenching water that He gives
forever lives.
For I am sure,
I'll thirst no more."

What a beautiful form for this powerful message. He is truly the water of life....
Excellent.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you for the insight review and the kind comments.
Comment from Joan E.
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I admired your spiritual Minute Poem--I think its the first of its kind I've read. Thank you for adding the inspirational scripture. I very much enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you for the kind comments and good wishes, Joan. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Mastery
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Hi, Deb. Long time between posts, I see. This one was worth the wait in my estimation and rates six stars if I had any left. sorry. I liked the entire piece....especially this stanza:

"how quenching water that He gives
forever lives.
For I am sure,
I'll thirst no more."

Good write, my friend. Bob

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
    Thank you, Bob.
    Yeah, I've been pretty busy so I only drop by once in a while. One more poem to go to even get a rating and we are a quarter of the way through the year. It's all good though. Hope your book is seeking well.
reply by Mastery on 28-Mar-2015
    Hi, deb. Yes, the book is doing great on both amazon and Barnes and Noble. If you decide to buy one, I'll autograph it for you. LOL X Bob
Comment from Zue65
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There are really many beautiful and insightful stories in the Bible where Jesus touch the lives of unbelievers and people today must learn from our Lord, the kind of love He has shown to all irrespective of their beliefs. God bless poet.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you for the gracious words and your insightful comments. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from The Death
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Hi, Debi.

You have nicely narrated the biblical reference in this poem. It's like a little story. I like the spiritual overtones your words carry. Good use of enjambment as well.

I know the contest requires only the strict syllable count, so I'm not focusing on the bump in iambic meter, which occurs in the second line. I like the ending very much. You've used this form effectively. Nice presentation, too. Good luck!

Regards,
Anupam

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
    Thank you for catching that bump in meter. I meant to follow the rules for a regular minute poem, contet or not, but I admit, iambic meter still throws me. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate it.
Comment from flamingstar
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What a perfect minute poem, flowing effortlessly from line to line and telling a compelling story with a powerful last line. Great imagery as well. Good luck!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    What nice comments about the writing. Thank you for such an encouraging review and the good luck wishes. I appreciate it!