Easy Street
Looking for easy street.7 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Eating peaches and cream/ while budget allows only pork and beans- easy street won't be easy street only as long as the plastic does not melt (credit cards). Nice and easy flow. This reads like a stroll. Good poem.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Eating peaches and cream/ while budget allows only pork and beans- easy street won't be easy street only as long as the plastic does not melt (credit cards). Nice and easy flow. This reads like a stroll. Good poem.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you, ravenblack, for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from adewpearl
just read your author notes - many of my poems have been born the same way, minus the mahjong LOL
strong rhymes
good use of enjambment
good cadence when read aloud - it might just be me, but I found the font difficult to read on that background
Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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just read your author notes - many of my poems have been born the same way, minus the mahjong LOL
strong rhymes
good use of enjambment
good cadence when read aloud - it might just be me, but I found the font difficult to read on that background
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks for reading, Brooke. Yes, a couple people have noted the color problem. I'll fix it soon. Linda
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We're an old bunch with weak eyes LOL
Comment from reconciled
"what motivates each person is difficult to indicate"...yes Dear chasing "the dream" keeps the rat wheel spinning poetry of mice and men, Wonderful poem Thunder....love Nug-
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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"what motivates each person is difficult to indicate"...yes Dear chasing "the dream" keeps the rat wheel spinning poetry of mice and men, Wonderful poem Thunder....love Nug-
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Michael: thank you, honey, for your uplifting review and thinking this piece six star worthy. Hugs back to ya, a little Thunder.
Comment from l.raven
HI Numero Dos, some times sweet girl our muses just take over...LOL...and you don't know what will happened...lets see...easy street...I was never there....hummmm...we were a pork and beans family...LOL...I love this Linda...and always a great picture....soooooooooo very well written...ya know I love ya...Numero Uno...hugs you
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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HI Numero Dos, some times sweet girl our muses just take over...LOL...and you don't know what will happened...lets see...easy street...I was never there....hummmm...we were a pork and beans family...LOL...I love this Linda...and always a great picture....soooooooooo very well written...ya know I love ya...Numero Uno...hugs you
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you my number one friend! I see that you prodded reconciled to read this, too. The shiny six stars are a bit blinding at night time, but a million thanks for those, also. Got the kitchen floor mopped. We had that cold rain while I was sleeping this afternoon. When I woke up, my kitchen floor was wet so I mopped it and it is company ready now! One chore done! Linda
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LOL...ok what's on the list next??? LOL...no !!! Michael came and read you on his own...I think he read you first...what can I say...LOL...so glad we got to talk today...love our conversations...now time to settle down...have to check on the girls...will check on you soon Dos...ya know I love ya...Numero Uno...xxoo
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smiling you...xxoo
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Linda
Interesting and thought provoking poem. You capture the monotony that is life in your first verse, the intrigue and personal decisions we make as individuals and then join our 'tribe'.
Yes, "no mun no fun" ... an Aussie expression (or - no money, not funny) Peaches and cream for the good times an pork and beans when times are lean.
'Easy Street" is a lure which more and more are taking the bait. We want more but don't want to work for it. So many feel entitled, and want much which is beyond their means. A fine line between greed and what is enough to make us secure and satisfied. At least this is how I interpret what your poem is telling us.
I love the metaphor, it is very clever. Enjoyable rhyme and phrasing. The image complements your poem well. One suggestion ... I find the red text is very difficult to see against this background.
Funny how 'something' just pops out and won't rest until complete. This worked very well for you. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Hi Linda
Interesting and thought provoking poem. You capture the monotony that is life in your first verse, the intrigue and personal decisions we make as individuals and then join our 'tribe'.
Yes, "no mun no fun" ... an Aussie expression (or - no money, not funny) Peaches and cream for the good times an pork and beans when times are lean.
'Easy Street" is a lure which more and more are taking the bait. We want more but don't want to work for it. So many feel entitled, and want much which is beyond their means. A fine line between greed and what is enough to make us secure and satisfied. At least this is how I interpret what your poem is telling us.
I love the metaphor, it is very clever. Enjoyable rhyme and phrasing. The image complements your poem well. One suggestion ... I find the red text is very difficult to see against this background.
Funny how 'something' just pops out and won't rest until complete. This worked very well for you. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Lovi: yes, I was wondering about the color scheme. I'll have to retry that. Your interpretation is correct although when the first line popped into my head I had no idea where it was going. I hate to rhyme but they just kept coming . . .At first I attempted a strict syllable count per line but my 'free verse' mind didn't allow it. When I do this, I have been told my poem is "fractured" and got a low rating. Thank you so much, Lovi, for such a dandy review! Linda
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Me too, my free verse mind always wants to take over when I try to rhyme or count syllables. Though I do use random rhyme in free verse. I certainly don't see any 'fractures' in your poem. I think your concept developed very well and with clarity. I'm beginning to nod off, it is 3.30am here. I don't recover as well being up this late. :) take care and keep well. Love and hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved the first two stanzas, as well as the message of this poem. I know what you mean, some pieces just seem to "write themselves," for me as well. I would suggest you might reconsider the last two lines of the third stanza. They just don't seem to fit with the poem, or enhance your message. What about "eating peaches and cream/ not just pork and beans" or something like that? Just a thought, humbly offered.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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I loved the first two stanzas, as well as the message of this poem. I know what you mean, some pieces just seem to "write themselves," for me as well. I would suggest you might reconsider the last two lines of the third stanza. They just don't seem to fit with the poem, or enhance your message. What about "eating peaches and cream/ not just pork and beans" or something like that? Just a thought, humbly offered.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Tatarka2, for reading. livelylinda
Comment from Kingsland
That is the truth. Money is only a tool and not the ultimate answer for happiness for life. Love is the most important thing you will ever know, but I don't believe I'm telling you something that you don't already know. I enjoyed reading this well written poetic voice... John
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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That is the truth. Money is only a tool and not the ultimate answer for happiness for life. Love is the most important thing you will ever know, but I don't believe I'm telling you something that you don't already know. I enjoyed reading this well written poetic voice... John
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you, John. These words shot out of nowhere. If I hung onto it longer, maybe it could have been a better piece. But, here it is anyway. Linda
