Are You Serious?
The boss has gone too far this time...30 total reviews
Comment from angelface2
OH my goodness, what a cute story. I'd say her boss had gone too far, but it made a lasting impression on her and maybe she don't hate babies anymore. Well done! Love the picture, too!! :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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OH my goodness, what a cute story. I'd say her boss had gone too far, but it made a lasting impression on her and maybe she don't hate babies anymore. Well done! Love the picture, too!! :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Miss Sally. At least she learned something from it!
Comment from c_lucas
Babies are independent and choose their own time. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Babies are independent and choose their own time. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your great review. I love to hear what other people think.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Can't believe I'm out of six stars. This was real good.
She stood for awhile is too close to she stood for a moment. One should be changed. I loved the story. It should win, I hope. Great job. Drew
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Can't believe I'm out of six stars. This was real good.
She stood for awhile is too close to she stood for a moment. One should be changed. I loved the story. It should win, I hope. Great job. Drew
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Drew. You have uplifted me, and I understand about the 6 stars. It's amazing how quickly they disappear. Your wonderful review was worth more than the stars. I will check out and change the repetition, thanks for pointing it out.
Comment from Ben Colder
What a creep. I have been a busy man in my lifetime or I thought I was, but never too busy to be at all of my children's birth. Don't blame you for quitting that iguana. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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What a creep. I have been a busy man in my lifetime or I thought I was, but never too busy to be at all of my children's birth. Don't blame you for quitting that iguana. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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I think, sometimes, that people let life get away from them as they seek to make more and more money.
Comment from Helena Frances
Sweet picture capturing the beauty and innocence of a baby.
Good story line. You describe the the Boss's character (or lack of) well.
The story flows well, ending with a maternal awareness, and different priorities in life:)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Sweet picture capturing the beauty and innocence of a baby.
Good story line. You describe the the Boss's character (or lack of) well.
The story flows well, ending with a maternal awareness, and different priorities in life:)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. You captured the complete essence of the story. Thanks, again!
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a beautiful story, simply beautiful. Satire? Not in my opinion - I was moved to tears when she looked into that newborn's face (even though it's fiction, and I KNOW babies can't see that early - LOL). Your description was simply elegant, and everything about this story works beautifully - the dialogue between friends, the pacing, the excitement of the birth itself and what the nurse was saying - bravo. Excellent! (and polished - I didn't see a thing I would change).
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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What a beautiful story, simply beautiful. Satire? Not in my opinion - I was moved to tears when she looked into that newborn's face (even though it's fiction, and I KNOW babies can't see that early - LOL). Your description was simply elegant, and everything about this story works beautifully - the dialogue between friends, the pacing, the excitement of the birth itself and what the nurse was saying - bravo. Excellent! (and polished - I didn't see a thing I would change).
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the touching review. It had hints of satire mixed with the wonder of birth, and the making of choices based on what one person wants for themselves. Thanks for the great encouragement!
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You are very welcome. Best of luck!
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I forgot to mention how impressed with your plot I was too - what an idea!!!
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Thank you so much!
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh! Heaven's to Mergatroid, no. Rebecca's boss has sent her to film the delivery of his own child? You gotta' be kidding me! That's crazy. If I had done something like that, my wife would have put me in traction for about a month, LOL.
""This isn't the 3rd floor," Rebecca stated.
"No," Nurse Baker said. "But baby isn't counting floors." -- Touche, Nurse baker, touche, heh-heh.
Okay, I know what you're about to say. The horror guy just gave me a six for a story about childbirth and secretarial pools? (but let's not forget those pools of bodily fluids, shall we? LOL). And you're right, I'm rarely swayed by anything other than prose in the horror/thriller genre to do so. But this...this was hilarious, and damn well written. The ending is what wrenched my six from my greedy grasp.
This was simply a fantastic piece of storytelling from beginning to end. And that ain't no "fluff", neither!
Bravo, and best of luck to you in the contest. :)
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Oh! Heaven's to Mergatroid, no. Rebecca's boss has sent her to film the delivery of his own child? You gotta' be kidding me! That's crazy. If I had done something like that, my wife would have put me in traction for about a month, LOL.
""This isn't the 3rd floor," Rebecca stated.
"No," Nurse Baker said. "But baby isn't counting floors." -- Touche, Nurse baker, touche, heh-heh.
Okay, I know what you're about to say. The horror guy just gave me a six for a story about childbirth and secretarial pools? (but let's not forget those pools of bodily fluids, shall we? LOL). And you're right, I'm rarely swayed by anything other than prose in the horror/thriller genre to do so. But this...this was hilarious, and damn well written. The ending is what wrenched my six from my greedy grasp.
This was simply a fantastic piece of storytelling from beginning to end. And that ain't no "fluff", neither!
Bravo, and best of luck to you in the contest. :)
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Dean. I am greatly honored by your gracious review!!! I stand in awe of your work so to get a 6 is miraculous and appreciated.
I had way too much fun writing this one, and childbirth can often fit right into your horror stories, I assure you.
Rhonda
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Oh, don't I know it! During the birth of our first child twenty years ago, I made the mistake of offering my hand to my darling, dainty wife at the apex of her delivery. Big, big mistake. She literally broke two of my fingers. I was down in the ER while she and our son were in recovery.
So, I know all too well about the horrors of childbirth. OUCH!, Heh-heh...
Good luck in the contest. ;)
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Now that's the best delivery story I have heard. I guess mine figured it was best to steer clear of my hands.
I'm the only person entered into that competition, and they keep extending the time. Perhaps a horror story would be in order to expedite the vote...maybe even the one about the broken fingers. Sorry, but that was priceless.
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Hah, well, I didn't think it was too priceless at the time. But my wife still does, LOL.
I am moderating a horror contest of my own. I think there are still eight days to enter. It's in the member created contests listing. Dr Terry Fying's Crumbling Crypt #2. It has received just four reservations and one entry. Can you believe that?!
People claim they want unique contest ideas g=here, but they really don't. 5-7-5, haiku and senryu rule the roost where contests are concerned. Prose contests here are few and far between, and when someone creates one, very few (if any) enter.
It is very frustrating. ~Dean
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I understand, and I tend to go for the unusual, so I go for ones that end up having to have the time extended. I would take a "stab" at horror, and I have tried before, but I end up scaring myself...
Comment from kriver
Hi
Good descriptive write.
The story has food dialogue too.
I think it is excellent write for a contest.
I didn't see any mistakes in your write.
Good Luck with your entry.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Hi
Good descriptive write.
The story has food dialogue too.
I think it is excellent write for a contest.
I didn't see any mistakes in your write.
Good Luck with your entry.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the sweet review. It's good to heat what other people think.
Comment from jpduck
Oh yes! This is a winner -- or it should be. Beautifully done, clever and imaginative.
One typo:
"You're getting warm." (Insert a blank line after this to mark the new paragraph).
Adrian
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Oh yes! This is a winner -- or it should be. Beautifully done, clever and imaginative.
One typo:
"You're getting warm." (Insert a blank line after this to mark the new paragraph).
Adrian
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Oh, okay, thank for pointing out the typo, and thank you so terribly much for the 6 stars. You are awesome! It's already before the judges, so I don't know if I can change it, but I will try. Again, thank you. You are awesome!
Rhonda
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The contest still has 2 days and 17 hours to run. At present yours is the only entry. I do hope that more join in or it will all be null and void, which would be a great shame.
Adrian
Comment from abbasjoy
This is an interesting story, and actually quite believable. The nerve of some people. Regretfully these days men especially, although women are not exempt, are so overworked in their focus on climbing that ladder of success, they have no time for anything. It's a wonder he even had time to have a baby, never mind three.
What is also funny, but not ha ha funny, is that the secretary would actually do what her boss requested. However, given the work climate these days, and the lack of jobs, perhaps she felt she would be fired if she didn't comply.
His wife is there fighting for her life, and he couldn't leave the job to see her through the birthing of his child?
A very nice touch was introduced with Rebecca's change of heart towards babies, when she immediately bonded with the baby.
I do believe the sight of the mother's situation on the gurney as well as the tiny baby, gave her the true perspective and she just had it, and quit.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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This is an interesting story, and actually quite believable. The nerve of some people. Regretfully these days men especially, although women are not exempt, are so overworked in their focus on climbing that ladder of success, they have no time for anything. It's a wonder he even had time to have a baby, never mind three.
What is also funny, but not ha ha funny, is that the secretary would actually do what her boss requested. However, given the work climate these days, and the lack of jobs, perhaps she felt she would be fired if she didn't comply.
His wife is there fighting for her life, and he couldn't leave the job to see her through the birthing of his child?
A very nice touch was introduced with Rebecca's change of heart towards babies, when she immediately bonded with the baby.
I do believe the sight of the mother's situation on the gurney as well as the tiny baby, gave her the true perspective and she just had it, and quit.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the beautiful and detailed review. Thanks, also, for the 6 stars. That is such an honor!
I think you are right about the job situation and about the competition for high paying jobs makes the employee find themselves the sacrificers. I like to see dynamic characters and to write about the changes they undergo as they grow and find their own strength. Thank you so much for your time and your review!
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You are most welcome.
