Grandpa Polly's Oak Tree Nest
Bird's Nest haiku/senryu suite8 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
A bit of spice in the bird life. Maybe the spice will continue even better now that the nest is empty. Best wishes with your entry.
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A bit of spice in the bird life. Maybe the spice will continue even better now that the nest is empty. Best wishes with your entry.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from skye
So many images with your haiku/senryu, and all are very well formed.
I love the shake that tale, empty nest, fledglings. Each one creates a little more beauty about these birds who create life.
Well done.
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So many images with your haiku/senryu, and all are very well formed.
I love the shake that tale, empty nest, fledglings. Each one creates a little more beauty about these birds who create life.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from Domino 2
Thanks for entering, 'mystery writer', though as the sponsor, of course I know your identity.
Fun and excellent imagery throughout.
Clever use of, 'yapping' to infer parrots can imitate speech or sounds.
My only nit-pick is, 'this' looks forced in the end of the line, and would read better if it started the 3rd line, IMO.
Good luck and best wishes.
You're doing very well so far in the voting.
Cheers, Ray
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Thanks for entering, 'mystery writer', though as the sponsor, of course I know your identity.
Fun and excellent imagery throughout.
Clever use of, 'yapping' to infer parrots can imitate speech or sounds.
My only nit-pick is, 'this' looks forced in the end of the line, and would read better if it started the 3rd line, IMO.
Good luck and best wishes.
You're doing very well so far in the voting.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the poem. Life begins again. The area once loved by your Grandpa will be loved by another generation. First the animals, then the people. Great work.
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I love the poem. Life begins again. The area once loved by your Grandpa will be loved by another generation. First the animals, then the people. Great work.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from Ulla
Excellent. I liked it a lot just imagining the sadness of the abandoned nest. But then again that is nature. I do not know a lot about poetry but I liked it. Good luck in the contest. Ulla
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Excellent. I liked it a lot just imagining the sadness of the abandoned nest. But then again that is nature. I do not know a lot about poetry but I liked it. Good luck in the contest. Ulla
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day mate, from time to time one of these little pieces just seems to say a whole lot in just a few words like you just have, well done I loved it. Good luck in the contest, cheers Fez
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Hahahaha! G'day mate, from time to time one of these little pieces just seems to say a whole lot in just a few words like you just have, well done I loved it. Good luck in the contest, cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have certainly followed the rules of this contest, and come up with a really lovely Bird' Nest Haiku. From birth to the eventual flying the nest to fly south. excellent. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
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You have certainly followed the rules of this contest, and come up with a really lovely Bird' Nest Haiku. From birth to the eventual flying the nest to fly south. excellent. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
Comment from TAB_that's me
Starting and ending this series of haikus the same works well here. Very good contender - good luck to you.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Starting and ending this series of haikus the same works well here. Very good contender - good luck to you.
~~~~Teresa~~~~
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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So nice to hear. Heavy competition. I appreciate the kind words. :)
