Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This is a well constructed Kyreielle. You have chosen an interesting repeating line. Thank you for the notes to explain. It gives a different meaning for the second read. I do think I like the first version of the old tale better. Either way, you did a great job re-telling it.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thanks for the great review.

Steve

Comment from scd41

Excellent

Your theme of Kyrielle based on folk ballad is touching. Crows are notoriuos for their unpleasant habits and two crows waiting for dining on the dead knight in your poem are no different. Best of luck for the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from pennedup

Exceptional

I really like the feel of this dark poem. You have put forth the medieval feel of the old ballad. I am a great fan of this kind of writing and of CROWS and what they represent both dark and light. They are suppose to be the ones that take your soul to the afterlife so some say. We have a grave yard here and it is beautiful and very old. Many walk it in the summer and many times a crow or two will accompany you on your journey by hopping from tombstone to tombstone. I think it is wonderful where others may find it eerie. Anyway, great poem and I am going to bookcase it.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

It is easy to see how the sight and sound and habits of these birds mean they're associated with all kinds of things.

Steve

reply by pennedup on 05-Mar-2015

They can be taught to talk just like parrots. Woudn't that creep some people out. Forever More!!!!! LOL

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Dickens' novel 'Barnaby Rudge' almost makes a character out of Grip, the raven. He writes a foreword where he reveals that Grip is based on his own experience with a owning ravens.

The book is what inspired Poe to write his famous poem and the real Grip is stuffed and mounted in a museum in Philadelphia.

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Virtual six instead. I've book cased this. Well penned with nice photo and color scheme. Clever use of descriptive wording for impressive imagery, light and airy progression, rhythm and flow for nice read, and wonderful rhyming. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest, Deb

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thanks, Deb - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

haunting just thinking about your last sight being of two crows just waiting to feast on your bones. works perfectly as a kyrielle, allowing that turn at the end, the crows his dismal mourners.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Beautifully written Kyrielle Steve. I love the repeating line you used. I hope it did or does well in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015

Thanks, Teresa.

Nope, no luck in the booth this time.

Steve

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This poem is very good. I like the way the poem sounds when read out loud and the picture of the bird, horse, what animal is that? Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015

Thanks for the kind words - yes, all poems should be read aloud, don't you think. This one deserves a rather old-fashioned English accent.

Steve

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Very nicely written in poetic style according to your author's notes of the ballad. Cadence, rhyming, and content are well done.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015

Thanks so much for the kind review.

Steve

Comment from gypsymoth

Excellent

Thanks for the Author notes. I didn't know a corby was a crow,
thought they may be vultures. Your poem is very well done and to form . Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015

Crows, vultures - their habits are much the same. Don't suppose it makes much difference to the one being eaten!

Thanks for stopping by.

Steve

Comment from donastell20

Excellent

Very well written, rhymes so well, is creative and imaginative as well as tells a story.

I really enjoyed reading this poem which showed great detail.

Thanks.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015

Thanks, Don - glad you enjoyed.

Steve