Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Chapter Trece; Part Dos"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Lucille Bellucci
This chapter promises a wider coverage of the ongoing tragedy of the cartel and its brutal activities; reader hopes so, because that makes for engrossing drama threaded throughout the romance between Jim and Soni. One thing, though: saying Isabella is a single mother at first has reader thinking she had no husband, then there is mention of a husband. The term "single mother" usually makes one think there was no husband. Small matter to fix.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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This chapter promises a wider coverage of the ongoing tragedy of the cartel and its brutal activities; reader hopes so, because that makes for engrossing drama threaded throughout the romance between Jim and Soni. One thing, though: saying Isabella is a single mother at first has reader thinking she had no husband, then there is mention of a husband. The term "single mother" usually makes one think there was no husband. Small matter to fix.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Isabella has no husband, he's dead. Thank you for the kind review.
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I know. But at first I thought "single" meant unwed mother.
Comment from Michael Sundaresan
You write very well! This was a pleasure to read. One minor correction: towards the end you write, "Her birthday'is next week." Remove the apostrophe and edit this part.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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You write very well! This was a pleasure to read. One minor correction: towards the end you write, "Her birthday'is next week." Remove the apostrophe and edit this part.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and the catch. That will be corrected.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Barbara,
First, congrats on being named Writer of the Month.
Yes, your heroines are strong, feisty, interesting women!
A great read. Just one suggestion: the English translation of the Spanish phrases in author notes, or in italics in the body of the write might help the reader not to feel 'left out'.
Hope you've had a good week.
Sonali :)
Soni motioned for the dogs to (lie) down but stay alert.
she doesn't speak English(.)" Soni moved
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Hi Barbara,
First, congrats on being named Writer of the Month.
Yes, your heroines are strong, feisty, interesting women!
A great read. Just one suggestion: the English translation of the Spanish phrases in author notes, or in italics in the body of the write might help the reader not to feel 'left out'.
Hope you've had a good week.
Sonali :)
Soni motioned for the dogs to (lie) down but stay alert.
she doesn't speak English(.)" Soni moved
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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I will make those corrections and thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara Wilkey,
It's a nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation. I have been in touch with this story.
Impressive presentation, having equally impressive wording. Smooth and captivating flow with lively imagery.
Interesting Indeed!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Hello Barbara Wilkey,
It's a nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation. I have been in touch with this story.
Impressive presentation, having equally impressive wording. Smooth and captivating flow with lively imagery.
Interesting Indeed!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from linnietwotymez
This was well written. I found no errors whatsoever. Mrs. Wilkey writes like someone who has done it all. The descriptions were not long, but gave me enough to know exactly what she was trying to present. Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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This was well written. I found no errors whatsoever. Mrs. Wilkey writes like someone who has done it all. The descriptions were not long, but gave me enough to know exactly what she was trying to present. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Her birthday'is next week. (??? delete apostrophe)
Interesting and well written chapter, although I'll have to trust you on the Spanish. I have no clue! Hope your having a good week, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Her birthday'is next week. (??? delete apostrophe)
Interesting and well written chapter, although I'll have to trust you on the Spanish. I have no clue! Hope your having a good week, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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I work at a bilingual school in Texas. Spanish is the name of the game, go figure. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of reading another fine chapter. I looked up and realized it was Wednesday and I hadn't read your new post. So I came in a hurry to get my fix. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thanks for the pleasure of reading another fine chapter. I looked up and realized it was Wednesday and I hadn't read your new post. So I came in a hurry to get my fix. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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LOL Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review,
Comment from Donovan
This is a page turner. Now, down to the nitty gritty. I want to talk about a man's head on a turtle...no, I don't. I know that turtles are slow and that may be one way to get ahead, but then again.....(that's lame...I know.) I am glad Soni is a good shot. I don't want to read about some wolf dog...whatever that is.. eating a young mother and her baby...The may be a romance, but I don't think we are there quite yet. I think it is all this guy Jims fault. What is wrong with him anyway. Hanging out in the desert with Sizzling Soni. I think riding horses is not good for your love life, something. And then Saint Soni want to help the girl out and Jim tells her to mind her own beeswax. Where will the all end....where will true love be found. Stay tune to Chapter: Ciento ochenta y siete Part Duos
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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This is a page turner. Now, down to the nitty gritty. I want to talk about a man's head on a turtle...no, I don't. I know that turtles are slow and that may be one way to get ahead, but then again.....(that's lame...I know.) I am glad Soni is a good shot. I don't want to read about some wolf dog...whatever that is.. eating a young mother and her baby...The may be a romance, but I don't think we are there quite yet. I think it is all this guy Jims fault. What is wrong with him anyway. Hanging out in the desert with Sizzling Soni. I think riding horses is not good for your love life, something. And then Saint Soni want to help the girl out and Jim tells her to mind her own beeswax. Where will the all end....where will true love be found. Stay tune to Chapter: Ciento ochenta y siete Part Duos
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. Even your reviews are fun to read.
Comment from Ulla
Very good, liked it a lot and very well paced. You kept me engaged.
The Spanish needs some correction:
Coma te llamas: como te llamas
Estas solo: estas sola. She is a girl so has to the feminine form of solo
No llamar a los...... : No llame a los....... (llamar is infinitive)
and finally Usted y su bebe va a morir....
I am looking forward to read more. Ulla
Ps: I live in Spain and am fluent in Spanish
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Very good, liked it a lot and very well paced. You kept me engaged.
The Spanish needs some correction:
Coma te llamas: como te llamas
Estas solo: estas sola. She is a girl so has to the feminine form of solo
No llamar a los...... : No llame a los....... (llamar is infinitive)
and finally Usted y su bebe va a morir....
I am looking forward to read more. Ulla
Ps: I live in Spain and am fluent in Spanish
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Seagazer
Very well done! The first bilingual story I have read on here. I am curious to see where the story goes from here. I am sorry, I do not have anything to add I think you are writing very well.
Jan
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Very well done! The first bilingual story I have read on here. I am curious to see where the story goes from here. I am sorry, I do not have anything to add I think you are writing very well.
Jan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
