Comment from miammores

Exceptional

this photo has grabbed my attention, I like the way it's been presented, really nice drawing and colors it really shows how you feel in a very depressive way & how you mourned the loss of a loved one, really enjoyed thank you for sharring'

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015

Thank you for the wonderful review and such kind words <3

Comment from alf collier

Excellent

Hi AnnieGale. a very emotional outpouring of grief that you packaged and presented in great poetic form. This is so very moving, and so reminiscent of the loss one feels in such times. Very poignant, alf

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015

Thank you for your kind review and thoughtful words, God bless

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

you do describe the inner world of deep depression well and I would be lying if I were to say I had never been there myself. that invisible wall, keeping up a fa�§ade of happiness is difficult and damaging. try to find someone you trust to talk it out. just one glitch in your second to last line " hoping to free from its dark stronghold grip" - hoping to be free. also, no apostrophe for its as it is being used as a possessive. and stronghold is not quite the right word as stronghold is a fortress. stranglehold might work better. I sincerely hope that the darkness departs soon. I am sorry for the loss of your sister.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015

Thank you and I appreciate the feedback, I may take you up on your suggestions...I was just writing blindly...when it starts, it just flows and fast...never really have to think about it.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I am sorry for your loss and my thoughts are with you. It is hard when we loose someone close to us. Especially on their birthday or special dates we shared. Great poem and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015

thank you for your kind review and thoughtful words

Comment from donastell20

Exceptional

I had to give this a six, as it was written so beautifully with such feeling that shows what a caring person you are. Your writing is excellent, this rhymes well and flows throughout as well as telling your story.

Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you for the review. Writing helps to put down onto paper what I feel and cannot speak out loud...

Comment from jim lawler

Excellent

Hang in there Anniegale; things will get better; I just lost my daughter a couple of weeks ago and am also grieving. with the passing of time and the way we process our loss we will heal. We have to deal with it and then put it away; try not to dwell on it. let it go. God bless and good luck! Jimmy

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you and I'm so sorry for your loss, I know my dad is taking it hard because you never want that for your children as the parent we always expect to go before them...I feel as though I lost 2 people, a sister and a best friend. Take care and my sincere condolences.

reply by jim lawler on 02-Mar-2015

Comment from miajaffri

Excellent

You have let your emotions come through powerfully with your words
in this poem when you say... I feel empty inside, getting out of bed seems
useless, putting up a thick invisible wall, hoping that it doesn't crumble
and fall. Somehow, we all go through a time like this in our lives. Time
heals and lessens pain. Never taking it away but always lessening.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you for your kind words. This is still very new and raw to me losing my sister and my friend

Comment from krys123

Excellent

AnnieGale; near and notable alliteration's in "deep depressive". The poems imagery is very demonstratively descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout the writing. Your imagination is due to the loss of a person near to you and it creates an inventive and a ingeniously creative resourcefulness in writing this free verse poem.
You deeply and sincerely well and write about your inner feelings that is come by with this loss and dwelling in it shows how deep your loss really is. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you.
Alex

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you for your considerate words, writing helps me express what's in my heart

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

This really brought me such a feel of sadness.. I feel badly for you, and I'm sorry you lost your baby sister.. I know how it hurts, I remember the pain when I lost my older sister, though I can't say I know how you feel, that would be mean and inappropriate.. I will say your writing certainly shows your pain, and I hope writing this helped in some small way..

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you for your thoughtful and caring words, losing a sister and friend is very raw in my heart, don't think I'll ever get over it but I do know that feeling lessens in time and the wonderful things are what matters most

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, AnnieGale,

So sorry for your loss. It's never an easy thing to overcome.

A very heartfelt poem, showing the anguish that only time and faith can help to heal.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015

Thank you so much for your caring and kind review. Writing helps me to express those feelings I couldn't otherwise say