Charlie The Cat
A story from a cat's point of view33 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
You have really gotten inside the mind of the cat. Your first person narrative gives even more than you're asked for in the prompt, in that you fill us in on the lives and relationships of the whole cat family. And that's OK as it added reality to the persona you portray. You reveal a symbiotic relationship between cat and owners, one that seems to be very loving. I enjoyed the episodes about Houdini and the reflection on the name Charlie Chaplin that seems to bother Charlie so much. A fun read with great entertainment. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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You have really gotten inside the mind of the cat. Your first person narrative gives even more than you're asked for in the prompt, in that you fill us in on the lives and relationships of the whole cat family. And that's OK as it added reality to the persona you portray. You reveal a symbiotic relationship between cat and owners, one that seems to be very loving. I enjoyed the episodes about Houdini and the reflection on the name Charlie Chaplin that seems to bother Charlie so much. A fun read with great entertainment. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot for your kind review. Ulla
Comment from Spitfire
Charlie has some annoying habits--jumping up on the table, trying to escape, annoying them early in the morning. He definitely knows how to manipulate the owners. LOL
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Charlie has some annoying habits--jumping up on the table, trying to escape, annoying them early in the morning. He definitely knows how to manipulate the owners. LOL
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot. UllaThanks
Comment from Zinnia48
I'd like to give my appreciation to Charlie Chaplin for taking the time to so thoroughly review his life for us. He's very erudite for any creature. Good luck, Charlie! Caroline
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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I'd like to give my appreciation to Charlie Chaplin for taking the time to so thoroughly review his life for us. He's very erudite for any creature. Good luck, Charlie! Caroline
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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thanks a lot. Ulla
Comment from Wabigoon
Ulla-
This was fun to read and I certainly understand it having three cats of my own. I would suggest you take a look at and maybe correspond with Cat of Letters, I think that's her user name, who is doing something of the same sort of thing -- a story told from the cat's point of view.
You have some typos, here's one: "Also, around here there is hardly any of those machines with four wheels,"
I think you mean "are" any. I saw about three of them. Nothing major, just there.
Good luck.
Thanks
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Ulla-
This was fun to read and I certainly understand it having three cats of my own. I would suggest you take a look at and maybe correspond with Cat of Letters, I think that's her user name, who is doing something of the same sort of thing -- a story told from the cat's point of view.
You have some typos, here's one: "Also, around here there is hardly any of those machines with four wheels,"
I think you mean "are" any. I saw about three of them. Nothing major, just there.
Good luck.
Thanks
Wabigoon
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot and I have made the correction. I am already corresponding with Cat of Letters which is very helpful. Thanks again. Ulla
Comment from c_lucas
Cats have an independent nature and are use to having their own way. This is very well written with a interesting flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Cats have an independent nature and are use to having their own way. This is very well written with a interesting flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
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I (I'm) quiet like that
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review. I ment ,quite, so I made a spelling mistake. Will ammend it right away Cheers Ulla
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You're welcome, Ulla. Charlie
Comment from DebbieAz
sweet story. but how can a brother be a twin if they don't have the same genetics? I would like to hear some specifics on the houdini-esque escapes. I loved the imagery of the process of waking the humans, and the general voice of the cat. nice job
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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sweet story. but how can a brother be a twin if they don't have the same genetics? I would like to hear some specifics on the houdini-esque escapes. I loved the imagery of the process of waking the humans, and the general voice of the cat. nice job
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot for your review. Twins can be made of one egg or two eggs. Tecnically two egg twins are not genetic twins but maybe conceived at the same time by two different fathers.They are still called twins though.In humans it is more likely the same father, but just two different eggs being fertilised.
To expand on the Houdini image would have made the story far too long. Thanks again. Ulla
Comment from Jennpenn
You follow the prompt closely. I can't say there is any ONE thing that stands out about how special 'ole Charlie is though. It's hard to write as though you are the family pet, lol, but it HAS been done magnificently in recent fiction. Have you ever read "The Art of Racing in the Rain?" Amazing story written from the pet dog's POV. I think a lot of its success has to do with pacing.
Another thing: I think that if you are going to give Charlie knowledge that pets (and some people) wouldn't ordinarily know--like who Charlie Chaplin was, and what he looked like--you should also have them know all about the mundane things in life--like what a car is, rather than that "machine with four wheels." Just a thought....
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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You follow the prompt closely. I can't say there is any ONE thing that stands out about how special 'ole Charlie is though. It's hard to write as though you are the family pet, lol, but it HAS been done magnificently in recent fiction. Have you ever read "The Art of Racing in the Rain?" Amazing story written from the pet dog's POV. I think a lot of its success has to do with pacing.
Another thing: I think that if you are going to give Charlie knowledge that pets (and some people) wouldn't ordinarily know--like who Charlie Chaplin was, and what he looked like--you should also have them know all about the mundane things in life--like what a car is, rather than that "machine with four wheels." Just a thought....
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, food for thoughts. Ulla
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, re: your notes - pshaw - it IS good - very entertaining, especially to anyone who has ever been owned by a cat. (LOL)
One nit - you missed a word here: "...I behave as one much younger (than) my age."
I think this is a charming entry for the contest! Good luck. :)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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First, re: your notes - pshaw - it IS good - very entertaining, especially to anyone who has ever been owned by a cat. (LOL)
One nit - you missed a word here: "...I behave as one much younger (than) my age."
I think this is a charming entry for the contest! Good luck. :)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot for your kind review. Ulla
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You're very welcome.
Comment from jpduck
Hi Charlie,
It sounds as if you have your humans very firmly under control. Well done!
Insert a blank line after the following to mark the new paragraph:
'Can you imagine that!'
'cheek to call me Charlie Chaplin!'
Adrian
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Hi Charlie,
It sounds as if you have your humans very firmly under control. Well done!
Insert a blank line after the following to mark the new paragraph:
'Can you imagine that!'
'cheek to call me Charlie Chaplin!'
Adrian
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot. Good comments. Ulla
Comment from royowen
One of our friends once remarked he thought that when he died, he like to come back as a cat, and live at our house! This is very much a true story of how a cat lives, life is pretty good, my wife, being a teacher, while marking, or preparing lessons, had cats perched on her marking or lesson preparations, well done, nicely scribed, a good entry in this comp. Good luck, blessings, Roy. Spag:- quiet handsome-quite I think. 2. Much younger ( ) age, than I think.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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One of our friends once remarked he thought that when he died, he like to come back as a cat, and live at our house! This is very much a true story of how a cat lives, life is pretty good, my wife, being a teacher, while marking, or preparing lessons, had cats perched on her marking or lesson preparations, well done, nicely scribed, a good entry in this comp. Good luck, blessings, Roy. Spag:- quiet handsome-quite I think. 2. Much younger ( ) age, than I think.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much for your kind review. Will go correct now. Ulla
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Most welcome.
