Stevie
a tomboy in childhood15 total reviews
Comment from thomdble
Very, very well done. My first girl ' friend' was a Stevie. Whooped me at everything and then ... You did such a wonderful job at the imaging and the words were so very smooth and the read was such a comforting pace. Bless you for sharing and thank you.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Very, very well done. My first girl ' friend' was a Stevie. Whooped me at everything and then ... You did such a wonderful job at the imaging and the words were so very smooth and the read was such a comforting pace. Bless you for sharing and thank you.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing my poem and the very kind praise.
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you have a wonderful talent
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you have a wonderful talent
Comment from Dawny53
I love this entry, and if I had a six left to give it would certainly be here! Very good descriptions all the way through.. very vivid.. some humor mixed in as well, which I appreciate.. good, strong, natural rhymes.. good luck wishes to you for this contest!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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I love this entry, and if I had a six left to give it would certainly be here! Very good descriptions all the way through.. very vivid.. some humor mixed in as well, which I appreciate.. good, strong, natural rhymes.. good luck wishes to you for this contest!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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I am delighted you loved "Stevie" and truly appreciate the wonderful praise and best wishes. Thank you!
Comment from DebbieAz
interesting. keeps moving around with good visuals and energy. i kind of maybe wanted to details about how she changed, but then as it was a 'sudden' change and from the reader's point of view, maybe that is appropriate how you just highlight the fact that she changed and changed names.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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interesting. keeps moving around with good visuals and energy. i kind of maybe wanted to details about how she changed, but then as it was a 'sudden' change and from the reader's point of view, maybe that is appropriate how you just highlight the fact that she changed and changed names.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks for sharing. Stevie went through puberty, something guys like Petedid not understand atthe time.
Comment from strandregs
Slumped on the sands of his mating
pondering virtue of dating
deciding not cool
to add to gene pool
he takes up eclectic cheese grating.
darn it showed up at the top again.sorry.
I liked the easy (mostly) rhymes and flow.
the catterpillar changing to a butterfly.
and the girl kicking your but.
But I bet you are a girl yourself so well done.
I'm a boy and I don't know what you are talking about
shame on me.
and I always talk about myself so don't be offended.
and today's special. Not soliciting. Today only.
the last verse of my last post.
Z.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Slumped on the sands of his mating
pondering virtue of dating
deciding not cool
to add to gene pool
he takes up eclectic cheese grating.
darn it showed up at the top again.sorry.
I liked the easy (mostly) rhymes and flow.
the catterpillar changing to a butterfly.
and the girl kicking your but.
But I bet you are a girl yourself so well done.
I'm a boy and I don't know what you are talking about
shame on me.
and I always talk about myself so don't be offended.
and today's special. Not soliciting. Today only.
the last verse of my last post.
Z.
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Love this poem about your childhood friend, Stevie/Stephanie. It is interesting and very well written, with good rhythm, rhyme and flow. I have seen a few of those miraculous changes that took place when a girl reached a certain age and you began to see lipstick instead of knee bandages. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Love this poem about your childhood friend, Stevie/Stephanie. It is interesting and very well written, with good rhythm, rhyme and flow. I have seen a few of those miraculous changes that took place when a girl reached a certain age and you began to see lipstick instead of knee bandages. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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You understand so well! Thanks for sharing, Jeanie, and foryour kind praise.
