Finding A Suitable Position
Short Story-Word Count 61629 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
A fantastic entry for the contest. I wish I had come across it with a sixer left. Hilarious and fulfils the prompt. Extremely entertaining, I love what comes into your creations. Some other quality writing in the contest, though I'm sure this will appeal to many voters. An added bonus with the response letter ... trust you to go the extra mile. :)) "Loosey" looks like such a professional and of great value to either employer.
One nit:
"We hired her (just) on six years ago ..."
I believe this will be a contender for highest placement. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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Hi Mikey
A fantastic entry for the contest. I wish I had come across it with a sixer left. Hilarious and fulfils the prompt. Extremely entertaining, I love what comes into your creations. Some other quality writing in the contest, though I'm sure this will appeal to many voters. An added bonus with the response letter ... trust you to go the extra mile. :)) "Loosey" looks like such a professional and of great value to either employer.
One nit:
"We hired her (just) on six years ago ..."
I believe this will be a contender for highest placement. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
Comment from sammy92
Devilishly clever . . . and I liked the two different voices of each letter (the rambling confidence of the first and the professional crispness, and nastiness, of the second). Hilarious tidbits (the 'religious holidays' are my favorite part) So good!!
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Devilishly clever . . . and I liked the two different voices of each letter (the rambling confidence of the first and the professional crispness, and nastiness, of the second). Hilarious tidbits (the 'religious holidays' are my favorite part) So good!!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This is too damn funny. Clever and witty. These employers can't think straight trying to hold on to their special employee. Great writing keeping it just under the top!!!
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This is too damn funny. Clever and witty. These employers can't think straight trying to hold on to their special employee. Great writing keeping it just under the top!!!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
Comment from dmt1967
I liked both letters as I found them funny and entertaining. I enjoyed reading and reviewing them. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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I liked both letters as I found them funny and entertaining. I enjoyed reading and reviewing them. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
Comment from CR Delport
Oh my, Mikey, this is hilarious. Thank you for bring a smile to my face. I was away for a few days and have lots to catch up on. Good luck.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Oh my, Mikey, this is hilarious. Thank you for bring a smile to my face. I was away for a few days and have lots to catch up on. Good luck.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHA - okay, well, uh, er, um, I think I need not comment a lot on writing technique, since it's quite apparent that this was written by two, rather than one, author (LOL). As to content...uh, again, I think it's best not to go into that here, in a public forum.
LOL!!! All joking aside - this is VERY entertaining. Good luck in the contest.
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HAHAHAHA - okay, well, uh, er, um, I think I need not comment a lot on writing technique, since it's quite apparent that this was written by two, rather than one, author (LOL). As to content...uh, again, I think it's best not to go into that here, in a public forum.
LOL!!! All joking aside - this is VERY entertaining. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
Very cleverly written and full of innuendo! I like the idea of telling a story through letters. Once again, I could hear the individual voices of both employers. Good luck! Caroline
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Very cleverly written and full of innuendo! I like the idea of telling a story through letters. Once again, I could hear the individual voices of both employers. Good luck! Caroline
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was very well done and probably will win the contest. Tons of literary devices used to make it supreme fun. The picture of a slutty Loosey is perfect the image you are trying to portray. I laughed at the name you chose for the dirty old man who did hire her - Nastacio Oldman (thumbs up!).
A very engaging and entertaining piece.
A couple of points:
The reference letter was supposed to be highly complimentary on its face, and negatives had to be inserted with much subtelety. I don't see it applied when starting a reference letter with her prior employer's allegations of embezzlement, or diving into her criminal history, albeit a misdemeanor versus felony. From reading this letter she stands out as a bad girl (lol), which I am sure is very entertaining to Mr. Nastacio (LMAO), but forgetting the object of the contest. It's like using a sledgehammer instead of kid gloves.
This is my critique - but overall it is a superb story, and deserves to be published. Maybe Penthouse magazine? (wink).
Thank you so much for joining and bringing much fun into the equation.
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This was very well done and probably will win the contest. Tons of literary devices used to make it supreme fun. The picture of a slutty Loosey is perfect the image you are trying to portray. I laughed at the name you chose for the dirty old man who did hire her - Nastacio Oldman (thumbs up!).
A very engaging and entertaining piece.
A couple of points:
The reference letter was supposed to be highly complimentary on its face, and negatives had to be inserted with much subtelety. I don't see it applied when starting a reference letter with her prior employer's allegations of embezzlement, or diving into her criminal history, albeit a misdemeanor versus felony. From reading this letter she stands out as a bad girl (lol), which I am sure is very entertaining to Mr. Nastacio (LMAO), but forgetting the object of the contest. It's like using a sledgehammer instead of kid gloves.
This is my critique - but overall it is a superb story, and deserves to be published. Maybe Penthouse magazine? (wink).
Thank you so much for joining and bringing much fun into the equation.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
Comment from sgalletti
This is absolutely hilarious Mikey. Love your sense of humor and creativity with double innuendos. It's pretty easy to read between the lines and understand where Loosey's talents lay. Great names you chose for the characters as well. Both the letter and the response were extremely clever. Best of luck in this contest. Sue
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This is absolutely hilarious Mikey. Love your sense of humor and creativity with double innuendos. It's pretty easy to read between the lines and understand where Loosey's talents lay. Great names you chose for the characters as well. Both the letter and the response were extremely clever. Best of luck in this contest. Sue
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
Comment from pattipac
Mikey, Mikey, what a devilish mind you have. I know, I know, all the better to create humorous pieces such as this. I am sure it will be well received as it leaves little to the imagination.
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Mikey, Mikey, what a devilish mind you have. I know, I know, all the better to create humorous pieces such as this. I am sure it will be well received as it leaves little to the imagination.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
