When I was just a boy.
From boy to man.78 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. This is a very well written and presented piece and the image sets it off nicely. It rhymes beautifully and holds a lovely message. I think you have chosen a great contest entry and good luck with it. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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G'day mate. This is a very well written and presented piece and the image sets it off nicely. It rhymes beautifully and holds a lovely message. I think you have chosen a great contest entry and good luck with it. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks Fez for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked the upbeat ending. The sadness of the tormented life of the youth was heartbreaking. Great imagery and the small personal details were great. Well done. Gretchen
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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I liked the upbeat ending. The sadness of the tormented life of the youth was heartbreaking. Great imagery and the small personal details were great. Well done. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks Gretchen I'm glad you empathise and gave such a lovely review,
Comment from emrpoems
In time God brought me Jesus,
my greatest friend and Lord,
my teacher and companion,
in Him my thanks are stored.
Summed it up in this verse
Good use of abcb rhymes
Nice bits of alliteration
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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In time God brought me Jesus,
my greatest friend and Lord,
my teacher and companion,
in Him my thanks are stored.
Summed it up in this verse
Good use of abcb rhymes
Nice bits of alliteration
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks Erica, for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from nomi338
This is so touching. It is very true that the brothers and sisters within your Christian congregation will often take the place of mother, father, sister and brother. You are indeed blessed if you are part of such a congregation.
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This is so touching. It is very true that the brothers and sisters within your Christian congregation will often take the place of mother, father, sister and brother. You are indeed blessed if you are part of such a congregation.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Amen and thanks for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Five for Grace and excellent poem! The Lord is always with us, even when we feel alone in a crowd. We are friends with Jesus. Sorry, your parents weren't there for you. I have adopted many youth as extra kids to mentor and share time with. We go to horse ranches and shopping malls. They like making homemade bread and eating together. Isaiah 58 mission. Maybe, the youth will love others and his family will grow. He can be a light for others including his mom and dad. Great entry for the contest! Jesus must be smiling at your witness to the nations!
God bless! <>< Soli deo Gloria! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Five for Grace and excellent poem! The Lord is always with us, even when we feel alone in a crowd. We are friends with Jesus. Sorry, your parents weren't there for you. I have adopted many youth as extra kids to mentor and share time with. We go to horse ranches and shopping malls. They like making homemade bread and eating together. Isaiah 58 mission. Maybe, the youth will love others and his family will grow. He can be a light for others including his mom and dad. Great entry for the contest! Jesus must be smiling at your witness to the nations!
God bless! <>< Soli deo Gloria! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the wonderful review, empathy and great comments,
Comment from nancyjam
Strong rhyme and meter in this poem of gratitude.
There is always help when we turn to God.
You expressed it beautifully here.
Good luck in the contest. Nancy
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Strong rhyme and meter in this poem of gratitude.
There is always help when we turn to God.
You expressed it beautifully here.
Good luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks Nancy, for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from cupa tea
That's a good poem about growing in general. It has a good flow..its easy to follow and its easy to understand..those are the two points in poetry that makes it work for me...
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That's a good poem about growing in general. It has a good flow..its easy to follow and its easy to understand..those are the two points in poetry that makes it work for me...
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
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Thanks, for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from jim lawler
This is a very nice poem and an easy read. I like it very much. You did a swell job with it and it has a lot of meaning. I didn't spot any typos and it needs no revision. God bless and good luck to you! Jimmy
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This is a very nice poem and an easy read. I like it very much. You did a swell job with it and it has a lot of meaning. I didn't spot any typos and it needs no revision. God bless and good luck to you! Jimmy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
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Thanks Jim, for the wonderful review and great comments,
Comment from Eric1
This is a brilliant entry for this gratitude expressed in a poem competition, beautifully penned and a lovely rhythm and flow will push this to the top, good luck my friend.
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This is a brilliant entry for this gratitude expressed in a poem competition, beautifully penned and a lovely rhythm and flow will push this to the top, good luck my friend.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks Eric, for the wonderful review and such great comments,
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You are welcome Roy
Comment from DSMalott
Your gracious words of hope in the face of such disappointment are wonderful. Your simple, straightforward lines in quatrain form create a sweetly paced and nicely rhymed work.
It is really only Jesus that lifts such subtle scars off of the soul of man.
Thanks for writing
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Your gracious words of hope in the face of such disappointment are wonderful. Your simple, straightforward lines in quatrain form create a sweetly paced and nicely rhymed work.
It is really only Jesus that lifts such subtle scars off of the soul of man.
Thanks for writing
Comment Written 27-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thanks, for the wonderful review and such great comments,
