The Rendezvous
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Comment from patcelaw
You did achieve the goal of the prompt, to surprise the reader. I must say I was surprised, Nice job and good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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You did achieve the goal of the prompt, to surprise the reader. I must say I was surprised, Nice job and good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review. Ulla
Comment from scd41
The main condition of writing prompt for the flash fiction contest has been met by your entry satisfactorily. It did shock me on learning at the end that there was no answer from Adrian and the protagonist screamed at the sight of blood when looking for him in the boat house. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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The main condition of writing prompt for the flash fiction contest has been met by your entry satisfactorily. It did shock me on learning at the end that there was no answer from Adrian and the protagonist screamed at the sight of blood when looking for him in the boat house. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot Ulla
Comment from bob cullen
Didn't expect that.
A really good write that held my interest and then stunned me with the unexpected.
I love work like this.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Didn't expect that.
A really good write that held my interest and then stunned me with the unexpected.
I love work like this.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from reconciled
Hey Ulla, are you new here? Nice to meet you? ... I like writers who can write short and sweet... this is a good contest entry...a bit predictable but good...okay... bug love.. Michael
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Hey Ulla, are you new here? Nice to meet you? ... I like writers who can write short and sweet... this is a good contest entry...a bit predictable but good...okay... bug love.. Michael
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Yes, I am new.Joined end December 2014 and enjoying it, learning a lot. Glad you liked it . Ulla
Comment from Crennan87
AMAZING. That twist was wonderful. You took your time and paced yourself, which made the ending that much more dramatic. Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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AMAZING. That twist was wonderful. You took your time and paced yourself, which made the ending that much more dramatic. Wonderful job!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks a lot. I am thrilled that you liked it. Ulla
Comment from Jackreese
The words moved at a fast pace and hooked me from the beginning. I thought it was going to be a lovey dovey type story and than the ending completely changed that.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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The words moved at a fast pace and hooked me from the beginning. I thought it was going to be a lovey dovey type story and than the ending completely changed that.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from Bryana
I'm not very good at writing prose but I found yours well
written. It captured my interest from the beginning, at
first I thought it was going to be a romance story, yes
it started that way but at the end...I believe this girl found
Adrian dead.
Good luck in the contest. Have a nice Sunday
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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I'm not very good at writing prose but I found yours well
written. It captured my interest from the beginning, at
first I thought it was going to be a romance story, yes
it started that way but at the end...I believe this girl found
Adrian dead.
Good luck in the contest. Have a nice Sunday
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Your are right. Adrian is dead. Thanks a lot for your kind review, I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is a start of a novel I hope. You had me so interested. And then boom. The shock of a flash fiction. A Alfred Hitchcock story. Not that I don't like them, but I wanted to hear this love affair going on. Oh, well. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Drew xx
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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This is a start of a novel I hope. You had me so interested. And then boom. The shock of a flash fiction. A Alfred Hitchcock story. Not that I don't like them, but I wanted to hear this love affair going on. Oh, well. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Drew xx
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Hi Drew, Thanks a lot for your kind review. I am toying to turn this into a novel. I am sorry that the love afair might have ended. Ulla
Comment from giraffmang
Hello there,
This was a well crafted and well written piece of flash fiction. You managed to paint quite a picture within the word confinement of the prompt. Nice surprise ending too.
GMG
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Hello there,
This was a well crafted and well written piece of flash fiction. You managed to paint quite a picture within the word confinement of the prompt. Nice surprise ending too.
GMG
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from thee-name
Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Writing was surprisingly.
I woke up to the sun flickering in through the curtains leaving the room bathed in a hazy glow.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Excellent story. Seen no mistakes. Writing was surprisingly.
I woke up to the sun flickering in through the curtains leaving the room bathed in a hazy glow.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. Ulla
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THANK YOU!
