Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Simply Jean"A book of poems on people.
63 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This sounds like a profile for a dating website. Any man would be a fool to pass up such a plain and simple Jean.
Cover-alls on bone chilling day is a cute line and I love the unrefined sugar line as well. Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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This sounds like a profile for a dating website. Any man would be a fool to pass up such a plain and simple Jean.
Cover-alls on bone chilling day is a cute line and I love the unrefined sugar line as well. Patricia
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you Patricia:)
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment
great alliteration in rough-cut rawness of a life-long laborer
I like the eclectic characteristics and the way you juxtapose them
vivid descriptive detail
a lovely poetic portrait
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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excellent use of enjambment
great alliteration in rough-cut rawness of a life-long laborer
I like the eclectic characteristics and the way you juxtapose them
vivid descriptive detail
a lovely poetic portrait
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thanks so much Brooke:)
Comment from MSJVClarke
A very nice poem. You expressed the simplicity of inner beauty and confidence. It was well-written and your structure was good. A good title.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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A very nice poem. You expressed the simplicity of inner beauty and confidence. It was well-written and your structure was good. A good title.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the great review:)
Comment from c_lucas
In her community, "Jean," will do. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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In her community, "Jean," will do. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you Charlie:)
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You're welcome, Teresa. Charlie
Comment from Dawny53
Nice work, Teresa.. I think this is my favorite poem from you..really good descriptive image of this woman..I could picture her perfectly in my minds eye, and the fact that you offer the reader a chance at their own interpretation of her made me want to try even harder to do so! Hope that made sense!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Nice work, Teresa.. I think this is my favorite poem from you..really good descriptive image of this woman..I could picture her perfectly in my minds eye, and the fact that you offer the reader a chance at their own interpretation of her made me want to try even harder to do so! Hope that made sense!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thank you Dawn for ~ I'm glad you liked it and could picture Jean in your mind.
Comment from Bobbi22
Simply Jean sounds like a good down-to-earth woman, being cut from hillbilly cloth and all. Rough around the edges, but sweet like sugar. Very well written.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Simply Jean sounds like a good down-to-earth woman, being cut from hillbilly cloth and all. Rough around the edges, but sweet like sugar. Very well written.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Yep, exactly. thanks for the great review:)
Comment from ravenblack
Not the brightest candle in the chandelier- excellent! Though not the brightest, she holds that special, elevated place lifted high in humble regality.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Not the brightest candle in the chandelier- excellent! Though not the brightest, she holds that special, elevated place lifted high in humble regality.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you:)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Teresa - a nice story about Jean. She sounds lovely - well honed! I love your lines 'she's not the brightest candle in the chandelier, but her eyes twinkle when she smiles' - I like that and I'll remember it. Good use of simile in 'more like unrefined sugar. An enjoyable read. Jean sounds nice. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Hi Teresa - a nice story about Jean. She sounds lovely - well honed! I love your lines 'she's not the brightest candle in the chandelier, but her eyes twinkle when she smiles' - I like that and I'll remember it. Good use of simile in 'more like unrefined sugar. An enjoyable read. Jean sounds nice. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you Dorothy:)
Comment from leigholiver
good piece of writing, had me interested from start to finish, which in its self is a unique trait to have. well done. good use of words
keep up the good work
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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good piece of writing, had me interested from start to finish, which in its self is a unique trait to have. well done. good use of words
keep up the good work
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, Teresa. Your descriptions of "Jean" provide strong imagery for the reader. She has been a hard worker all of her life, but still enjoys the finer things like glass figurines. Not the brightest candle in the chandelier but wise in more important ways, I imagine. I can visualize the twinkle in her eyes.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Great job, Teresa. Your descriptions of "Jean" provide strong imagery for the reader. She has been a hard worker all of her life, but still enjoys the finer things like glass figurines. Not the brightest candle in the chandelier but wise in more important ways, I imagine. I can visualize the twinkle in her eyes.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much:)
