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Comment from Joan E.
Wow--you find the most intriguing artworks to complement your poems! I liked your thought-provoking reflections and your alliteration of "s's' plus many echoing sounds that resonated the circus. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Wow--you find the most intriguing artworks to complement your poems! I liked your thought-provoking reflections and your alliteration of "s's' plus many echoing sounds that resonated the circus. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2015
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Hey j....smile. Thank you mucho granday ....the pleasure is always mine when you grace my Kelly with style super sized.god bless you friend....love bug
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And a super-sized Sunday to you too! -Joan
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Michael, This has some wonderful lines in it.
I especially loved:
"parades heartache"
"genie bottled promise "
They just keep me wondering and pondering - really great images.
Edit check:
"all that shit they cant teach you in art school" // can't
Overall great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing,
Mo
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Dear Michael, This has some wonderful lines in it.
I especially loved:
"parades heartache"
"genie bottled promise "
They just keep me wondering and pondering - really great images.
Edit check:
"all that shit they cant teach you in art school" // can't
Overall great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing,
Mo
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Hello Dearest....dream come true...how are you....-smile-...yea, now why would you like that one the best Mo...thats right "they" cant...thats what I said...-wink-...well overall I feel as though I've looked at the menu...and now I leave still hungry....-shouldershrug-...-hands in pockets-....-headshake-....yep...okay see ya Mo...Bug-
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LOL - Michael - can't ( add the apostrophe, yours is missing in "cant" )
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O...O...shit...excuse me...I'm on it Precious. I want you to sleep at night...real close to me...-smile-
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don't make me hurt you Michael!!!
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lol....okay okay...when your ready...geeze...love-
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LOL
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, in the song when it says the circus came to town...and stayed...reminds me of that guy at the church...and the people...and the picture says it...it also reminds me of the government...like a circus...love your poem...written in your own unique words...and a great song...read and listened a few times...well written you...Love you Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Hi Michael, in the song when it says the circus came to town...and stayed...reminds me of that guy at the church...and the people...and the picture says it...it also reminds me of the government...like a circus...love your poem...written in your own unique words...and a great song...read and listened a few times...well written you...Love you Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Hi...Linda...lifes friend and mine...how are you gorgeous...? are you water up nice and soggy, sponge soaked with no room left...? well...you better get another twelve ounces at least. yea, that serial killer who hasn't been caught yet...yes I remmeber. okay thank you dear...love Michael
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well hi friend ....thank you so very much...and you are so welcome...love
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I kiss you on the check...and tuck you in...-smile-
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why would you kiss me on the check ???
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cheek...work with me will ya...lol
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trying too!!! I'll go with the tuck you in part...
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and by the way...yes I am floating....drinking all day...will try meds again in morn...love
Comment from jlsavell
Once again good afternoon Michael.
It is cold and rainy where I am at and I am sure it is where you are too. Hope you are doing well and you are happy. I know I am.
Now to the poem. To me it has always been amazing how you can conjure a poem with exceptional music. You and I have similar taste in Music. Very similar except I like a few more genres than you do. This is one of my favorite renditions of endless parade.
You have managed to expound on its message. A belief clise to your heart and mind. I will bever profess to be as spiritual or as patriotic as you are but your passion is what makes great statements in a high voltage language.. poetry.
We live in a forboding and stark reality today. We often deceive ourselves with false reasoning believing the political strife and oppression and terror served today will be squelched with the right mindset and tools. We holed our political leaders in hopeful faith they will do all in their power to uphold security, peace, and prosperity for lovers of their great nation. It is what we all dream of. Many of us close our eyes to the stark ominous reality of reality. We are beginnning to realize our dreams are dissipating and they are only there when we dream. Life, or our way of life is being threatened and our political stewards are becoming a circus of folly and a tragic comedy of sorts. I am reminded of Descartes but I can't tell you why at thus moment. On another plane of thought.. thIs speaks just as well of the religious pulpeteers whk rain and reign deceitful, hypocritical and self righteous m misguiding the masses with false promises.
You are exceptiobal at potent social commentaries in free verse. As I told one author one time poetry is much like the game of tennis. Have you played? Briefly, many tevhniques are used between two players. The player here being the author and the reader. The author will return each ball with many techniques. He isn't out to win the game necessarily but what he does expect is for the reader to make acceptable returns indicating the game is worth playing. I hope I made the return but remember I am left handed. Lol.
your friend always
JIMI
Jlsavell
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Once again good afternoon Michael.
It is cold and rainy where I am at and I am sure it is where you are too. Hope you are doing well and you are happy. I know I am.
Now to the poem. To me it has always been amazing how you can conjure a poem with exceptional music. You and I have similar taste in Music. Very similar except I like a few more genres than you do. This is one of my favorite renditions of endless parade.
You have managed to expound on its message. A belief clise to your heart and mind. I will bever profess to be as spiritual or as patriotic as you are but your passion is what makes great statements in a high voltage language.. poetry.
We live in a forboding and stark reality today. We often deceive ourselves with false reasoning believing the political strife and oppression and terror served today will be squelched with the right mindset and tools. We holed our political leaders in hopeful faith they will do all in their power to uphold security, peace, and prosperity for lovers of their great nation. It is what we all dream of. Many of us close our eyes to the stark ominous reality of reality. We are beginnning to realize our dreams are dissipating and they are only there when we dream. Life, or our way of life is being threatened and our political stewards are becoming a circus of folly and a tragic comedy of sorts. I am reminded of Descartes but I can't tell you why at thus moment. On another plane of thought.. thIs speaks just as well of the religious pulpeteers whk rain and reign deceitful, hypocritical and self righteous m misguiding the masses with false promises.
You are exceptiobal at potent social commentaries in free verse. As I told one author one time poetry is much like the game of tennis. Have you played? Briefly, many tevhniques are used between two players. The player here being the author and the reader. The author will return each ball with many techniques. He isn't out to win the game necessarily but what he does expect is for the reader to make acceptable returns indicating the game is worth playing. I hope I made the return but remember I am left handed. Lol.
your friend always
JIMI
Jlsavell
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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hi Jimi...-smile-...thank you for being so kind....this is a ahh 'Sundance" film....its odd in that its unusually seen except in real life...-wink-...we the people are offended by POV....lol ...ahh okay....again thank you...yes of course...whenever I think of circus....I remember the Baptists I got to know...and yes them clowns are really sad...-headshake-...alright, roger that...bug out-
Comment from MelissaBickel
There are many great lines within this piece...Loved the 'Well' line and the last full stanza, what an image that conjured up.
Sometimes stilted lines work so well, with the use of different forms of punctuations, but they need to work along with the poem allowing it to flow and not sound so staccato.
Perhaps this was supposed to be read with the tone of mayhem and confusion and I missed the poems significance all together. I apologize if so.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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There are many great lines within this piece...Loved the 'Well' line and the last full stanza, what an image that conjured up.
Sometimes stilted lines work so well, with the use of different forms of punctuations, but they need to work along with the poem allowing it to flow and not sound so staccato.
Perhaps this was supposed to be read with the tone of mayhem and confusion and I missed the poems significance all together. I apologize if so.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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milissa ....smile haven't seen you since my last half asset ,comforting to find you on guard.. Noticed you haven't reviewed my Pulitzer nominee yet...must of missed that one huh?.... Bug- off
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Pulitzer? I've learned from my many years of writing ego or vanity tends to get in the way of constructive criticism. Even the best of the best poets have been helped along the way. My thoughts are just that thoughts. They weren't meant to slight you or belittle you. If you've reached the pinnacle of all there is to know about poetry then kudos to you. Poetry isn't almost about those five star ratings and empty words of praise, it's about reaching beyond your comfort zone, listening, evolving, accepting...then perhaps something more. I'll not bother to review your poetry anymore, it'll save you the time to tell me to bug off.
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yes Pulitzer...have you been nominated yet...hm hmm...Melissa, I am the mountain...let Mohamid come to me.
Your really going to have to get board the train...I cant keep slowing down just to talk you...c'mon...all aboard!....lol...5 stars...pffft...I'm afraid it takes the gold star to peak my ectasy...and as well you know, I have reached far beyond both yours and my own...comfort zones....and have now moved into erogenous...bugging the bigger Love...-wink-
