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Comment from Dawny53
I appreciate your patriotic endeavor here.. enjoyed the video very much.. a really great added touch! There were parts of this poem that I was a little unclear on, but your enthusiasm won me right over!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I appreciate your patriotic endeavor here.. enjoyed the video very much.. a really great added touch! There were parts of this poem that I was a little unclear on, but your enthusiasm won me right over!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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enthusiastic determination kept Washingtons men pushing through frozen snow on frost bitten feet....Maam!...-salute-...I and your Country thank you bottum heart mean it!...bug-
Comment from Pili Pubul
Well my patriotic friend , as always you did it in your inimitable way
a poetic powerful message ... Fireeeeee..... Hope not.. Love how you express your emotions, even if I don't completly understand it.. Love . Pili
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Well my patriotic friend , as always you did it in your inimitable way
a poetic powerful message ... Fireeeeee..... Hope not.. Love how you express your emotions, even if I don't completly understand it.. Love . Pili
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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O say can you see by the dawns early light how much I love you Maam.!...Maam yes maam!.....-smile- Hello love dove coo coo...haha very happy to see you...I thought you maybe didn't love me anymore...I've had to talk to people and stuff....you should know...-headshake-....I'm just a mess...bugging you with love!
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Silly boy, my feelings don't change like weather... But not motivated, it will comeback when I get stronger... Nothing to worry now but took to much steroids and oxygen , My lungs are great... Just tired... Love u , silly
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silly is as silly does Pili....you always said life was like a box of crap....but you cant live without it....I love you-
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Hehehe, I said that???? I don't remember, love u
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, you are so right...this is truly one of your best...did know man scream warning...I guess not...because it still goes on...love the way up stand up for the world...love your devotion to the land God has given us...and I love your author notes...great video...you truly do have a way with making words speak Michael...a gift...this one speaks loud...a great write...love you Michael...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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HI Michael, you are so right...this is truly one of your best...did know man scream warning...I guess not...because it still goes on...love the way up stand up for the world...love your devotion to the land God has given us...and I love your author notes...great video...you truly do have a way with making words speak Michael...a gift...this one speaks loud...a great write...love you Michael...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hi Linda....-smile- ah yes I'm proud of this...loved the song...the way the bass player plays the star spangled banner so gentle....and then Mr. Mathews starts screaming fire...all along the watchtowers ...eyes left! ...haha ...but not really...-wink- I thank you and love you too...Bug-
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I know!!! the entire poem is wonderful...you hit a home run with this one...smiling big...love your bug...xxoo
Comment from Joan E.
How clever to insert the artwork in the middle of your poem and adding the pledge in your notes! I liked your use of tercets for your warning. You're right about pride and complacency being dangerous. Here's to your wake-up call! -Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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How clever to insert the artwork in the middle of your poem and adding the pledge in your notes! I liked your use of tercets for your warning. You're right about pride and complacency being dangerous. Here's to your wake-up call! -Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Woooo Wooooo Yes maam Dudley does do-right sometimes. yes yes clever...just like that thrown and throne deal...I had to roll with...-wink- sshhhhhh....Teacher...-wink- bugging the big love!
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Keep rolling, my friend! Smiles and happy Sunday- Joan
Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that you constructed this piece well, reconciled and that your choice of words was well thought out. The video and the picture was also a nice touch. I couldn't find any faults, an excellent job...Jacob
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I thought that you constructed this piece well, reconciled and that your choice of words was well thought out. The video and the picture was also a nice touch. I couldn't find any faults, an excellent job...Jacob
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hello Jacob...-smile- appreciate ya sir...I'm a God loving American, patriot to the red , white and blue principles for which she stands heart pored out proud...still...she waves as the bombs burst in air...proof, solid that our hope was still there. -salute- ..bug-
Comment from Ulla
Wow, I like it. I can't say I am new to poetry but I am not very familiar either. Sometimes I have downright difficulty to understand what is being said. I am being honest about it. I liked yours though, and I think I understand it. Well done. Ulla
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Wow, I like it. I can't say I am new to poetry but I am not very familiar either. Sometimes I have downright difficulty to understand what is being said. I am being honest about it. I liked yours though, and I think I understand it. Well done. Ulla
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hi Ulla....wow...like Uma Thurman thing going on there huh...-smile-...yes well if new to poetry, you've come to the pinnacle of expression...the right place,...welcome....-smile- ahhh bugging the big love!
Comment from Kingsland
I don't quite get you over all meaning in this piece of poetry. But poetically it is well written and voiced and flows along its thoughts very freely. I liked the poetic feel to this verse. Even if I didn't quite comprehend it totality of meaning... John
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I don't quite get you over all meaning in this piece of poetry. But poetically it is well written and voiced and flows along its thoughts very freely. I liked the poetic feel to this verse. Even if I didn't quite comprehend it totality of meaning... John
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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well that's why we have drills John...keep us sharp when the alarm screams fffffFIRE! haha..Hello friend...its about America...land that I love...-smile-...and a Paul Revere shout out...to wake up. thank you my American Brother...bug the big love-
Comment from leigholiver
excellent poem, the picture just made it all the more for me.
excellent use of words. will definitely be looking out for more of your work from now on. well done
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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excellent poem, the picture just made it all the more for me.
excellent use of words. will definitely be looking out for more of your work from now on. well done
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hello...-smile- why I thank you for saying so...and pleased you enjoyed visit. come again and bug the big love with me...michael
Comment from Nephrys Darkwater
While I may not fully understand what you are saying, this is a wonderful piece. It has a great flow and rhythm that had me imagining that I am listening to you reading this piece at a café poetry reading, and upon your ending, you received many finger snaps in applause.
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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While I may not fully understand what you are saying, this is a wonderful piece. It has a great flow and rhythm that had me imagining that I am listening to you reading this piece at a café poetry reading, and upon your ending, you received many finger snaps in applause.
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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does it pay a lot...? are you sure that's not fingers rustling through cash your hearing...? Poetry reading...hmm...how much do they pay...? Please call me...tomorrow, I'll sit in my other chair and you can talk to my agent...-headshake- ...call me...chow-
Comment from jlsavell
Hi Michael,
How are you? First of all thank you for allowing me to read your work.
It is very evident this work has been inspired by the recent geo political events felt across the globe. It is disheartening, as anyone who participates in our heated discussions on the forum will attest to.
Never before in history has so many catastrophic events come together to make the "writing on the wall" glow with fire. I am reminded of Belshazzer and his might fortress. He ignored the warnings right before his eyes; but more than that, his folley in desecrating God's vessels sealed his fate.
Just as the mighty Roman Empire failed due to the socio- political structure and its inattention to the subtle but potent changes .. this mighty Empire met its fate. We might go further and speak of all the great empires who have fallen due to the same issues. From Babylon to Medo-Persian-to Egyptian- Greek- Roman, to more recent Anglo-Saxon beginning with WW1. And here we sit today where mankind's love of lawlessness and the abdication of character, conscience and courage by some of the world's renown leaders have created a volitile soup of annihilation.
A place where greed and apathy, political correctness, has blinded our responsibilty toward the security of our future. And once again history dictates and repeats itself but on a more far reaching level. The United States of America as well as Europe will meet its fate just as one of the greatest empires ever recorded in ancient history.
Your poem integrates potent hints of Biblical references to ignite our senses and employs the words of a song written so long ago as a stark metaphor of what is to transpire. The Watchtower.. its connotations are far reaching and we know from Biblical history the use of Watchtower built by magnificent empires. Their purpose to see threats from afar and to insure the safe keeping of the empires treasures.
I like the way you employ poetic devices such as understatement and overstatement and verbal irony in this work. As we know overstatement is usually employed by over exaggeration. In poetry it is a dynamic tool because if employed perfectly it services the truth. You have done this well.
I shall say no more. An exceptional work.
Your friend.. jlsavell.. Jimi
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hi Michael,
How are you? First of all thank you for allowing me to read your work.
It is very evident this work has been inspired by the recent geo political events felt across the globe. It is disheartening, as anyone who participates in our heated discussions on the forum will attest to.
Never before in history has so many catastrophic events come together to make the "writing on the wall" glow with fire. I am reminded of Belshazzer and his might fortress. He ignored the warnings right before his eyes; but more than that, his folley in desecrating God's vessels sealed his fate.
Just as the mighty Roman Empire failed due to the socio- political structure and its inattention to the subtle but potent changes .. this mighty Empire met its fate. We might go further and speak of all the great empires who have fallen due to the same issues. From Babylon to Medo-Persian-to Egyptian- Greek- Roman, to more recent Anglo-Saxon beginning with WW1. And here we sit today where mankind's love of lawlessness and the abdication of character, conscience and courage by some of the world's renown leaders have created a volitile soup of annihilation.
A place where greed and apathy, political correctness, has blinded our responsibilty toward the security of our future. And once again history dictates and repeats itself but on a more far reaching level. The United States of America as well as Europe will meet its fate just as one of the greatest empires ever recorded in ancient history.
Your poem integrates potent hints of Biblical references to ignite our senses and employs the words of a song written so long ago as a stark metaphor of what is to transpire. The Watchtower.. its connotations are far reaching and we know from Biblical history the use of Watchtower built by magnificent empires. Their purpose to see threats from afar and to insure the safe keeping of the empires treasures.
I like the way you employ poetic devices such as understatement and overstatement and verbal irony in this work. As we know overstatement is usually employed by over exaggeration. In poetry it is a dynamic tool because if employed perfectly it services the truth. You have done this well.
I shall say no more. An exceptional work.
Your friend.. jlsavell.. Jimi
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hello Jimi...yes you are my friend...-smile- thank you...
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Hello Jimi...yes you are my friend...-smile- thank you... I dont ...see that , think that way...that "we" America will meet terrible fate repeated by history's mistakes....but a gradual realization, exploding into an outrage of one...controled and precise, changing tomorrows course. Yes maam, "we" are doing things and allowing things to be done ....that are very detrimental to Her health...and I would we wake up. love Michael
