Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Grizzly Bear"A book of poems on people.
69 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
You have painted quite the picture with this wonderfully crafted little piece you have offered your fans. I myself am a big old teddy bear lol. Thank you for sharing your talents.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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You have painted quite the picture with this wonderfully crafted little piece you have offered your fans. I myself am a big old teddy bear lol. Thank you for sharing your talents.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for being one of those big ol' teddy bears:) and thanks for the review.
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my pleasure!
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad I went back into your portfolio and found this free verse I missed. I always enjoy your poems about a person. I especially liked your lighthearted mood and "grizzly bear" plus contrasting "teddy bear" metaphors. More cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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I am glad I went back into your portfolio and found this free verse I missed. I always enjoy your poems about a person. I especially liked your lighthearted mood and "grizzly bear" plus contrasting "teddy bear" metaphors. More cheers- Joan
Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this old post. You are always so kind to review for 2 cents:)
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The payoff is in the enjoyable read! Hugs and happy weekend- Joan
Comment from Patricia Brooks
Nice. I'd quibble with some punctuation again, but a really fine portrait and example of looking beyond the surface.
Patricia
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Nice. I'd quibble with some punctuation again, but a really fine portrait and example of looking beyond the surface.
Patricia
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thanks Patricia.
Comment from Day Z Chayn
Don't sweat this. I WANTED to read these, simply because one HAS to picture these folks in their respective situations. I'm glad to see the customer left with something. Most importantly, he left you with a BIG impression. It's not the knife he bought. It's the experience of a lifetime on the road he bought with him into your establishment. Freedom in all kinds of weather. Freedom to roam. Freedom to converse. Freedom to stop anywhere.
Blessings,
Shane
PS. I NEVER use artwork, even when suggested to do so. It's a choice, just like this man stopping to see you & saying, "I'd like to purchase a knife. Can you show me them all?" I've been on this site 10 years. If only that man's bike could talk. With the mileage on this man's hands & feet, along with the lines on his face, he'll always have plenty to say.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Don't sweat this. I WANTED to read these, simply because one HAS to picture these folks in their respective situations. I'm glad to see the customer left with something. Most importantly, he left you with a BIG impression. It's not the knife he bought. It's the experience of a lifetime on the road he bought with him into your establishment. Freedom in all kinds of weather. Freedom to roam. Freedom to converse. Freedom to stop anywhere.
Blessings,
Shane
PS. I NEVER use artwork, even when suggested to do so. It's a choice, just like this man stopping to see you & saying, "I'd like to purchase a knife. Can you show me them all?" I've been on this site 10 years. If only that man's bike could talk. With the mileage on this man's hands & feet, along with the lines on his face, he'll always have plenty to say.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you /Shane for reading and reviewing ALL of these. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Teresa,
I don't know how I missed this one, but came back for it when I saw the new one you posted.
It's pretty cool visualizing your character. Very clever subject for a book.
Excellent.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Hi, Teresa,
I don't know how I missed this one, but came back for it when I saw the new one you posted.
It's pretty cool visualizing your character. Very clever subject for a book.
Excellent.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2015
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Thanks for going back to look at and review this one too:)
Comment from dmt1967
This poem definitely paints a picture of one scary guy with a gun in his hand. Sometimes a picture helps, but in this case there is no need as your words says the same. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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This poem definitely paints a picture of one scary guy with a gun in his hand. Sometimes a picture helps, but in this case there is no need as your words says the same. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015
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thanks:)
Comment from Alan K Pease
I think dangerous knives were once distinguished by their length with those 12" or shorter legal. Now the villains or heros it makes little difference, but how well you use it. I am glad he turned out to be a teddy bear. Excellent free verse that holds together well.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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I think dangerous knives were once distinguished by their length with those 12" or shorter legal. Now the villains or heros it makes little difference, but how well you use it. I am glad he turned out to be a teddy bear. Excellent free verse that holds together well.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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thanks:)
Comment from ravenblack
even if they are handling knives and look like they stepped out of a Charles Manson dream, you cannot always judge a book by its cover. I have been more pleasantly surprised by biker-types than by three piece suits. just one suggestion - I think the last line would read better as " a teddy bear in disguise".
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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even if they are handling knives and look like they stepped out of a Charles Manson dream, you cannot always judge a book by its cover. I have been more pleasantly surprised by biker-types than by three piece suits. just one suggestion - I think the last line would read better as " a teddy bear in disguise".
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the review and suggestion for the last line.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Aaaaaah not all as it seems then TAB'. Such a fine poetic truth we see here, as he only needed the pocket knife to skin an apple. A short, fine work to keep such as I interested. February in Nebraska, and your mind going haywire. Eric
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Aaaaaah not all as it seems then TAB'. Such a fine poetic truth we see here, as he only needed the pocket knife to skin an apple. A short, fine work to keep such as I interested. February in Nebraska, and your mind going haywire. Eric
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you Eric:)
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My pleasure
Comment from evesayshi
A story well constructed in a recognizable, lyrical style - we have all shared the experience at some point in our lives, and I smiled at its memory. Thank you for the fun read...
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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A story well constructed in a recognizable, lyrical style - we have all shared the experience at some point in our lives, and I smiled at its memory. Thank you for the fun read...
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you:)
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You are very welcome...
