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Comment from wordsfromsue
Karen insisted on supplying the turkey and all the trimmings. Satisfied she could do no more, Jenny settled in to taking her calls
I think 'Jenny' should be Laura. I'm guessing Jenny will be with George at Christmas.
Sorry, my reviews may be a bit flat today. This cough/cold/headache is getting the best of me. :-(
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Karen insisted on supplying the turkey and all the trimmings. Satisfied she could do no more, Jenny settled in to taking her calls
I think 'Jenny' should be Laura. I'm guessing Jenny will be with George at Christmas.
Sorry, my reviews may be a bit flat today. This cough/cold/headache is getting the best of me. :-(
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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This is exactly why I didn't want to publish the book as a paperback before you had a chance to review it, Sue. Your eye for detail is exemplary, and I know you won't bullshit me when something isn't right! Well caught, my friend. Thank you! Alexis xxx
Comment from MelReyn
I enjoyed the kids' reactions to Karen's weight loss. I also liked that they made plans to bring their families together for christmas. This chapter makes me want some turkey and stuffing! ;)
I'm usually stressed when I get behind on reviewing, but this time I'm glad that I don't have to wait for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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I enjoyed the kids' reactions to Karen's weight loss. I also liked that they made plans to bring their families together for christmas. This chapter makes me want some turkey and stuffing! ;)
I'm usually stressed when I get behind on reviewing, but this time I'm glad that I don't have to wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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I actually quite like it when I get behind for that reason. It feels more like a book that you can't put down! Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi there L
She had indeed cooked far too much food the year before, because she needed something to take her mind off the awful reality that his chair at the top of the table would be empty. Not that she'd let on. It had been one of the most heart-breaking meals she'd ever prepared.
(heartbreaking)
I like this reference and her reply. Her weight loss was unnoticed by her son. She has to feel OK by that I'd think. I liked this one
Bear
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Hi there L
She had indeed cooked far too much food the year before, because she needed something to take her mind off the awful reality that his chair at the top of the table would be empty. Not that she'd let on. It had been one of the most heart-breaking meals she'd ever prepared.
(heartbreaking)
I like this reference and her reply. Her weight loss was unnoticed by her son. She has to feel OK by that I'd think. I liked this one
Bear
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Hell spotted! I don't know how many reviews I had before you and nobody picked up on that. Just goes to prove you read every word. Thank you! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. Another great chapter that made me hungry with all that talk of food. I loved the kids reactions. Well done mate, a couple of SPAGS....
" Tony was just (as) shell-shocked as his sister when he walked in"
"Karen nearly pulled Michelle up for pretending she'd known about her weight loss all along, but decided to keep shtum.(????)"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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G'day Alexis. Another great chapter that made me hungry with all that talk of food. I loved the kids reactions. Well done mate, a couple of SPAGS....
" Tony was just (as) shell-shocked as his sister when he walked in"
"Karen nearly pulled Michelle up for pretending she'd known about her weight loss all along, but decided to keep shtum.(????)"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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If that makes you hungry, today's must have you drooling! Yes, a bit like you, but to a much lesser degree, there is lots of this book based on fact, especially with regard to Laura - surprise, surprise! I've now put an explanation for 'schtum, although you alerted me to the fact I'd spelt it wrong. It means 'keep quiet about something. Thank you, mate! Alexis x
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You are right about that mate, I just had some jelly it mate me that hungry. Yum, that tucker sounded good
Comment from rwilliam
'I'm kidding, you moron! Mum's managed to lose over twenty pounds without you even noticing. Some son you are!'-HEE HEE Love this!
She had indeed cooked far too much food the year before, because she needed something to take her mind off the awful reality that his chair at the top of the table would be empty-I do this too! How interesting, I'm not alone.
a traditional Christmas pudding and brandy butter.-YUM! This sounds amazing!! :-D
YAY! This chapter tugged at my heart strings missing the husband/dad, but also uplifting with all the good things happening. I truly enjoyed this!
Great work.:-)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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'I'm kidding, you moron! Mum's managed to lose over twenty pounds without you even noticing. Some son you are!'-HEE HEE Love this!
She had indeed cooked far too much food the year before, because she needed something to take her mind off the awful reality that his chair at the top of the table would be empty-I do this too! How interesting, I'm not alone.
a traditional Christmas pudding and brandy butter.-YUM! This sounds amazing!! :-D
YAY! This chapter tugged at my heart strings missing the husband/dad, but also uplifting with all the good things happening. I truly enjoyed this!
Great work.:-)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Me too, after Gerry, my husband, died. It's the most horrible feeling in the world having an empty chair on such an important day. We all need to be loved! Alexis x
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bully for Karen. I wish I could do that. I could picture the whole scene, the family's reactions and how great she looked in her outfits. WELL DONE! :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Bully for Karen. I wish I could do that. I could picture the whole scene, the family's reactions and how great she looked in her outfits. WELL DONE! :)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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This is exactly what I would like to do if I lost a substantial amount of weight. It reminds me of a film called 'The She Devil' or similar, where an abandoned wife transforms herself after she's been dumped, and makes her ex husband's life hell. Roll on Christmas day! Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
Congratulations to Karen for getting her weight down. Weight loss, for older women, is not an easy goal to achieve.
Editors hate the word 'just', because it adds nothing to the story. It is best eliminated:
nearly dropped the glass of Coke she'd just poured as
nearly dropped the glass of Coke she'd poured as
massive difference, instead of just a gradual reduction over the weeks.
massive difference, instead of a gradual reduction over weeks.
'Let's just say,
'Let's say,
Tony was just as shell-shocked as his sister when he walked
Tony was ALSO shell-shocked when he walked
'Well, let's just look forward to next year
'Well, let's look forward to next year
Being a typical lad, he didn't realise she was joking at first.
Being a typical lad, at first he didn't realise she joked.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Congratulations to Karen for getting her weight down. Weight loss, for older women, is not an easy goal to achieve.
Editors hate the word 'just', because it adds nothing to the story. It is best eliminated:
nearly dropped the glass of Coke she'd just poured as
nearly dropped the glass of Coke she'd poured as
massive difference, instead of just a gradual reduction over the weeks.
massive difference, instead of a gradual reduction over weeks.
'Let's just say,
'Let's say,
Tony was just as shell-shocked as his sister when he walked
Tony was ALSO shell-shocked when he walked
'Well, let's just look forward to next year
'Well, let's look forward to next year
Being a typical lad, he didn't realise she was joking at first.
Being a typical lad, at first he didn't realise she joked.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Great advice as usual. I shall have a look at those as soon as possible. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from Spitfire
Everything is going so well. Good scene with the realistic reaction of Karen's children. Nice touch bringing in a painful recollection to change the pace. Also the reminder the Michael might overhear Laura on the phone to the punters. An interesting name for the clientele.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Everything is going so well. Good scene with the realistic reaction of Karen's children. Nice touch bringing in a painful recollection to change the pace. Also the reminder the Michael might overhear Laura on the phone to the punters. An interesting name for the clientele.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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That's what they're called here. What are customers for sex called in the States called? Don't worry about Karen. Christmas day will bring sweet revenge! Alexis x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love it when that happens, the thrill of someone noticing the weight loss. I am on a diet, so I think I might try the same thing once it begins to show. It's hard work though. Things are going so well for Karen, this chat line has transformed her life. Another excellent chapter, Alexis.
I'm a bit late today reviewing, I had a friends funeral to go to. So coming back to your book, has lightened my day considerably. :) xsx Sandra.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I love it when that happens, the thrill of someone noticing the weight loss. I am on a diet, so I think I might try the same thing once it begins to show. It's hard work though. Things are going so well for Karen, this chat line has transformed her life. Another excellent chapter, Alexis.
I'm a bit late today reviewing, I had a friends funeral to go to. So coming back to your book, has lightened my day considerably. :) xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I'm so glad this cheered you up a little. As you get older, funerals become more frequent, and more depressing because they remind us of our own mortality. That's why I want these women to be an inspiration. Life is too short! Alexis x
Comment from adewpearl
the glass of coke - Coke - without caps it's cola
giggling, gasping - good non-verbal communication
excellent dialogue that sounds natural
good detail of the Christmas treats
Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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the glass of coke - Coke - without caps it's cola
giggling, gasping - good non-verbal communication
excellent dialogue that sounds natural
good detail of the Christmas treats
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Brooke. Your reviews are so helpful and mean a lot to me. Alexis x
