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When Blood Collides

Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Long Distance Relationship, Part One"
A family's love is tested.

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Comment from I am Cat
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oh wow, I can really relate to this one.. .My daughter is now 21, just finishing her third year in college... and recently engaged. wtf?
yeah, great guy, and he's a recent college graduate... i"m happy for them...
But we have to plan a wedding... It's 14 month away.... WHY do we have to plan it NOW? Why does ever moment we have have to be about that?
really?
I think she's going to drive me to drink.
I swear, if I could get my hands on illegal drugs, I'd be a junkie right about now.lol
She's over 4 hours drive away (thankfully), but currently at home for a few weeks between semesters? (seemed like a good idea at the time)... our once wonderful relationship has turned into a full time challenge of ideas.
REally?
I used to know everything about everything and be an expert in photography, art, poetry.... yeah... not so much anymore. Never mind that i"ve spent my entire life attempting to be really great at artistic endeavors... but I must not have any idea what she wants... or needs her wedding to be.

really?

I totally get this...
Right about now.... I could get in my car and drive! (shall I pick you up?)
You tell it well... I'm heading to the next chapter to see what fate awaits me... evidently you've lived it already! LOL

 Comment Written 20-May-2015


reply by the author on 21-May-2015
    Poor you. I was tickled to be three thousand miles away when Nichole decided to get married and had a future mother-in-law very willing to help. At least, your daughter is waiting until she graduates before taking her vows. Hey, maybe you can talk her into eloping. LOL. It's sort of like a choice between a funeral and cremation.
reply by I am Cat on 21-May-2015
    oh god, i actually already offered them $15,000 to elope! (what's wrong with kids nowadays?) We would have grabbed it and run! LOL
Comment from w.j.debi
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It looks like it is both fun and scary to have your kids grow up and move on. But being a mother you worry no matter what is going on, good and bad. Excellent hook at the end. Ah-oh, what is coming?

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
    being a mother you worry no matter what is going on-- so true. Maybe that's why my daughter decided to never have children. Thanks for catching up.
Comment from fimarie78
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Looking forward to reading part two. This is really easy reading and I am thoroughly enjoying following the mother/daughter relationship. There is a tiny error where you have written exiting instead of exciting- near the end.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
    What an eagle eye. You're the first to catch this. Thanks so much. Part two is a complete turn around. Sigh
Comment from juliesibs
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Wonderfully written. You are able to bring your writing to life and that makes it an awesome read. My grandmother and I were close like you both, she support and encouraged anything I wanted to accomplish.
I only saw one misspelling.
"Mom? I have something (exiting) to tell you." Exciting?
I love the style, I'm off to read Pt. 2.

Julie

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
    Thanks, Julie, for catching the spag. You're one of two who say it. I recall being close to my father more than my mother, but that reversed as I got older. Go figure.
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day Shari. This is another great chapter mate. As soon as I read about the acting I said, oops! That is a tough gig, a bit like writing I guess. I like your easy writing stly and am looking forward to the next chapter. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
    Tough gig is right. Sometimes it's being at the right place at the right time.
Comment from Rosalyne
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Hi, Shari.
You've done a wonderful write showing the bond you shared with your daughter, Nicole. You allowed her to follow her dreams, and pursue a career in acting. Your encouragement to get her degree as a back-up was such wise advice. I've said the same to my kids, my oldest following a similar pathway as a musician.
Bye, my friend!
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
    Making her go through four years of the college was the best decision we made for her. In the end, she realized that too.
Comment from dmt1967
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I like this story and have to read the rest. Children are very trying. I have a daughter who says I emotionally bully her because I push her to excel in everything she does. If I left her alone, she'll accuse me of not caring, you can't win lol. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
    You got that right. You have to find a middle path. How old is your daughter. Girls are harder to raise than guys.
Comment from adewpearl
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You depict this mother/daughter relationship well through your various communications with each other - I like the dynamic of the relationship and the way the messages also keep the reader in the loop of what is going on in her life.
Brooke

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
    Thanks, Brooke. Nicole and Jeff will continue to weave in and out of my story about Mother.
Comment from mermaids
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Love this piece of writing. Your daughter sounds like a nice woman and the story holds my interest. Excellent flow of story and I admire your support of your daughter's desire to be in show business.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
    Thanks, Mermaids. Being on the screen was my dream, but my parents discouraged it. I wanted Nichole to have the chance to find out if she could make it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Dear Shari, ok now you have me wondering what the heck you did. LOL As always your detail and smooth writing makes this a solid read. You kept me interested and indeed have me wanting to read more now...
Excellent post -
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
    Thanks, Moreen. Now that I've introduced her, she'll appear in the story about Mom and me.