Watch Your Mouth
One sided phone conversation19 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! That last line was quite the surprise. Great job of character-development in this dialogue-only story. It certainly was a one-sided, one-opinion-counts personality. A well deserved win! Congratulations!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Lol! That last line was quite the surprise. Great job of character-development in this dialogue-only story. It certainly was a one-sided, one-opinion-counts personality. A well deserved win! Congratulations!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for stopping by, and the lovely review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This was very good and I can see why it won the competition.
Very humorous throughout and well written.
Very nicely composed.
GMG
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Hi there,
This was very good and I can see why it won the competition.
Very humorous throughout and well written.
Very nicely composed.
GMG
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much, I had fun writing it too, xo
Comment from Kingsland
Jeez... Slash my throat and let me bleed out before I have to listen to that person again. Talk about a rant, as a matter of fact that give ranting a good name. I am not at all what you would call that, but spare my ears and make me go deaf before I answer the phone again. This was well written and subject to being in the worst class of bitching I have ever read. Phew... Glad that's over... John
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Jeez... Slash my throat and let me bleed out before I have to listen to that person again. Talk about a rant, as a matter of fact that give ranting a good name. I am not at all what you would call that, but spare my ears and make me go deaf before I answer the phone again. This was well written and subject to being in the worst class of bitching I have ever read. Phew... Glad that's over... John
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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hahha, yes she was a shrew and poor Bobby,thank you for the review, and stick to texting,
Comment from Judy Couch
It's funny. I enjoyed the references to herself as a fine southern lady. I enjoyed the way it ended. I wondered why a fine southern lady would hang out with someone like him for seven years.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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It's funny. I enjoyed the references to herself as a fine southern lady. I enjoyed the way it ended. I wondered why a fine southern lady would hang out with someone like him for seven years.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Im so glad you enjoyed this, read it again, she was like him except she felt using better language made he more dignified.Bless you for this marvelous review.
Comment from Linda Engel
laugh laugh laugh. "bandages" for bondage to cute, too funny, I'm Southern and can appreciate the thought process. Yes read the book before going to see the movie. ( still so funny) good one and good luck
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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laugh laugh laugh. "bandages" for bondage to cute, too funny, I'm Southern and can appreciate the thought process. Yes read the book before going to see the movie. ( still so funny) good one and good luck
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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so happy to have made you laugh, thank u for this flattering review, xo
Comment from jclark
This made me laugh! Very clever contest entry. I loved the tongue in cheek humor and the woman reminded me of something from the old Carol Burnett show. If you don't win this contest, I will be very surprised. You not only met all the criteria, you brought humor and relatability to your work. Best of luck! Sorry that I am out of Six Stars right now or you would have received one from me. Kindly, Judy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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This made me laugh! Very clever contest entry. I loved the tongue in cheek humor and the woman reminded me of something from the old Carol Burnett show. If you don't win this contest, I will be very surprised. You not only met all the criteria, you brought humor and relatability to your work. Best of luck! Sorry that I am out of Six Stars right now or you would have received one from me. Kindly, Judy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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aww thats fine, your bright words did more than light up the page, xo bless u
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I remember when, Lady Chatterly's Lover, was considered to be very 'naughty'. It was banned, by my parents, in our house, too. LOL, it is nothing now to what we see in the libraries and in the TV. Your story was well written and you kept to the rules perfectly. Good lick! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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I remember when, Lady Chatterly's Lover, was considered to be very 'naughty'. It was banned, by my parents, in our house, too. LOL, it is nothing now to what we see in the libraries and in the TV. Your story was well written and you kept to the rules perfectly. Good lick! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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good lick,,, hahahha spag errpr thank you for reviewing.
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LOL!! Trust me to get THAT spelling mistake on this one! Sorry! :)
Comment from Cat of Letters
A witty and well thought out piece. I loved the ending.
Very enjoyable, the characterization comes through in growing strokes.
This is very well written.
I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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A witty and well thought out piece. I loved the ending.
Very enjoyable, the characterization comes through in growing strokes.
This is very well written.
I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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thank u for this flattering review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
"And I know a thing or two about the ways in which people think."--->And I know a thing or two about the "ways in which" people think..." It seems a word or two went missing from the conversation here, Anonymous Author. Or, perhaps it's just me?
"...such filth and foul[,]. Why don't you..." --->Need a period instead of a comma after "foul" here...
"... and you have been as patient as a pastorcollection collecting church donations..." ----> ..."collecting" church donations...", author...
Hah-hah...it would appear that this "damn Christian woman" should try practicing what she's preaching, wouldn't you agree? My Grandpa always believed that people who swear constantly made themselves to look ignorant in the process, like they couldn't think of the proper words to express themselves the ways in which they wanted to. I have to agree with him on that account. It's undignified, to say the very least.
Good story, and the ending was very catching. I did find a few errors which I noted above.
Good luck in your contest. ~Dean
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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"And I know a thing or two about the ways in which people think."--->And I know a thing or two about the "ways in which" people think..." It seems a word or two went missing from the conversation here, Anonymous Author. Or, perhaps it's just me?
"...such filth and foul[,]. Why don't you..." --->Need a period instead of a comma after "foul" here...
"... and you have been as patient as a pastor
Hah-hah...it would appear that this "damn Christian woman" should try practicing what she's preaching, wouldn't you agree? My Grandpa always believed that people who swear constantly made themselves to look ignorant in the process, like they couldn't think of the proper words to express themselves the ways in which they wanted to. I have to agree with him on that account. It's undignified, to say the very least.
Good story, and the ending was very catching. I did find a few errors which I noted above.
Good luck in your contest. ~Dean
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you and as writers we need to use language instead of constant cursing, I will correct the errrors.
Comment from royowen
An hilarious one sided conversation on the phone. Good entry, these aren't easy to do but I think you've done well in this one, I love the quip, "I'm a good Christian woman and I wouldn't go to the movie, unless I'd read the book, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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An hilarious one sided conversation on the phone. Good entry, these aren't easy to do but I think you've done well in this one, I love the quip, "I'm a good Christian woman and I wouldn't go to the movie, unless I'd read the book, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you, glad to have entertained you.
