Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Sunday Morning"The story about three women who need to make money
18 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
Good chapter. Nice fill in details regarding the previous period of their lives.
I don't know if it's a correction or not, but 'remortgage' is one word, when I looked it up at
www.dictionary.com
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Good chapter. Nice fill in details regarding the previous period of their lives.
I don't know if it's a correction or not, but 'remortgage' is one word, when I looked it up at
www.dictionary.com
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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How nice to get this review, Sue. My spell check insisted on re mortgage, but I agree with you, so I've made it remortgaged again. Even as I've written it here, it's underlined it in red! Grrrrrrr Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis, this is another well written and very entertaining chapter mate. Just imagine how she felt with the vet on the other end of the phone, Hahahahaha! That's a scream. Now then we got to see what Laura is thinking, how cool is that. Bring it on girl! A couple of minor SPAGS...
" It was like having three wayward teenagers living under the same roof--(oops)but I only give (gave) birth to two of them!'
"The painkiller Jenny give (gave) her that morning made her drowsy,"
" 'We'll be fine,' Karen told her. 'I'll carry he" (remove the 3x ' )"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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G'day Alexis, this is another well written and very entertaining chapter mate. Just imagine how she felt with the vet on the other end of the phone, Hahahahaha! That's a scream. Now then we got to see what Laura is thinking, how cool is that. Bring it on girl! A couple of minor SPAGS...
" It was like having three wayward teenagers living under the same roof--(oops)but I only give (gave) birth to two of them!'
"The painkiller Jenny give (gave) her that morning made her drowsy,"
" 'We'll be fine,' Karen told her. 'I'll carry he" (remove the 3x ' )"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Sooooo good to hear from you. I thought I'd put you off reviewing with that incredibly long post I put up a few days ago. Can't believe you picked up on those two mistakes so easily when all the reviewers before you didn't pick up any. That's what good reviewers are about. Thank you! Alexis x
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It's all good mate. We have moved house and I have to wait for an internet conection. I am using a prepaid and it takes 10 mins to load one page, so it takes me 20 mins to write one review. Hopefully it will be conected soon. Cheers Fez
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I have the same problem when I go back to France, so know the problem! x
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Alexis. Great job here. Felt very natural all the way through. Lines like this make a big difference, you will find, the more you use them:
"Karen filled the kettle and flicked the switch to make some fresh tea. 'But why would he think that?'" (Reason? You are putting the reader in the room...little things like this are BIG things...no secret to it. LOL..great job... Bob
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Hi, Alexis. Great job here. Felt very natural all the way through. Lines like this make a big difference, you will find, the more you use them:
"Karen filled the kettle and flicked the switch to make some fresh tea. 'But why would he think that?'" (Reason? You are putting the reader in the room...little things like this are BIG things...no secret to it. LOL..great job... Bob
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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I have taken your advice very seriously, Master! Pleasing you makes me feel so much more confident--thank you! Alexis x
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wink :) Bob
Comment from scongrove
Good chapter ... this is the type of book I would pick from the book store to read. I like the humor between the characters you put into your writing. Sounds believable when the girls carry on conversations. How did you come up with this story? Great work!
Shana :)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Good chapter ... this is the type of book I would pick from the book store to read. I like the humor between the characters you put into your writing. Sounds believable when the girls carry on conversations. How did you come up with this story? Great work!
Shana :)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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That is music to my ears. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from emrpoems
Life is a game of chance. What may work at a particular time may not work at another. What may work for one person may not work for another and so on.
Sometimes you just have to go with your gut feeling. Hope this works for you
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Life is a game of chance. What may work at a particular time may not work at another. What may work for one person may not work for another and so on.
Sometimes you just have to go with your gut feeling. Hope this works for you
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Laura will find out if she's done the right thing nearer Christmas. In the meantime, she's keeping her fingers crossed. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello there Sweet L. This chapter is superb. I liked this line 'God, you lucky cow!' Jenny declared. 'I was lucky if my ex gave me a penny over and above his half of the mortgage. You are such a "WORD-SMITH
I hope your Valentines Day is filled with love, warmth, kisses and joy
Bear
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Hello there Sweet L. This chapter is superb. I liked this line 'God, you lucky cow!' Jenny declared. 'I was lucky if my ex gave me a penny over and above his half of the mortgage. You are such a "WORD-SMITH
I hope your Valentines Day is filled with love, warmth, kisses and joy
Bear
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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I'm so glad you're still enjoying it, Bear. Lot's of fun ahead, I promise! Alexis xxx
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent dialogue - you convey well the way friends can inadvertently hurt each other's feelings by speaking without thinking
Even I understand the humor of saying something to a caller... My daughter calls me at the same time ever afternoon, but I make a point of saying hello in my polite dispassionate tone because once or twice it was a business call, or someone from church, etc - the last thing I want them to hear is "Hi, cutie pie" in a lovey tone LOL
More good realism in the discussion of how hard it can be to pay the bills... Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Excellent dialogue - you convey well the way friends can inadvertently hurt each other's feelings by speaking without thinking
Even I understand the humor of saying something to a caller... My daughter calls me at the same time ever afternoon, but I make a point of saying hello in my polite dispassionate tone because once or twice it was a business call, or someone from church, etc - the last thing I want them to hear is "Hi, cutie pie" in a lovey tone LOL
More good realism in the discussion of how hard it can be to pay the bills... Brooke
Comment Written 13-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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LOL Yes, that is something that happens soon in the book. At least 'cutie pie' isn't as bad as 'Hello big boy, Karen's preferred start to every conversation. Cringe! Alexis x
Comment from Spitfire
Laura made a risky decision, but it does sound as if Jack is putting feelings out. I guess she figures that in a year's time she can quit her dirty talk job. :-)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Laura made a risky decision, but it does sound as if Jack is putting feelings out. I guess she figures that in a year's time she can quit her dirty talk job. :-)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Neither of them have a clue because they were both married for such a long time to their late partners. Only time will tell. Alexis x
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love and three kisses! She may scare him off, but it's better to know. I like how she handled Mr. Stewart... very plausible excuse. I wonder how much money the women really COULD make in this biz. DId you research it?
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Love and three kisses! She may scare him off, but it's better to know. I like how she handled Mr. Stewart... very plausible excuse. I wonder how much money the women really COULD make in this biz. DId you research it?
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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If she scares him off, he's not worth the effort. Laura needs a man who can deliver on the romance stakes. Only time will tell if he's got what it takes. Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Alexis - another great post for your story. Laura's card will put a smile on his face. Nice well rounded chapter with some little twists and turns to keep the reader going. I enjoyed this one too.
Thanks for sharing,
Love
Maureen
xx
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Dear Alexis - another great post for your story. Laura's card will put a smile on his face. Nice well rounded chapter with some little twists and turns to keep the reader going. I enjoyed this one too.
Thanks for sharing,
Love
Maureen
xx
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Maybe, maybe not. He might not be romantic enough for Laura after her late husband, but there again, he might be perfect. Only time will tell! Alexis x
