BLAZE: Angel from Hell
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Brothers from Finland"Blaze is one of Lucifer's demons, a fallen angel.
37 total reviews
Comment from jpduck
I thought the basic idea and the setting were great. Sadly, 'Nothing interesting. We're just here on a recruiting mission, to hire some new people for the company.' instantly gave away the ending, which spoiled the slight element of enigma which you gave to the latter.
A couple of observations:
'Yes, from Finland. But our work brought us here' (I can't see any reason for the 'But' here).
'approved of his chiseled features' ('chiseled' is so seriously over used; almost anything else would be better in my opinion).
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
   |
I thought the basic idea and the setting were great. Sadly, 'Nothing interesting. We're just here on a recruiting mission, to hire some new people for the company.' instantly gave away the ending, which spoiled the slight element of enigma which you gave to the latter.
A couple of observations:
'Yes, from Finland. But our work brought us here' (I can't see any reason for the 'But' here).
'approved of his chiseled features' ('chiseled' is so seriously over used; almost anything else would be better in my opinion).
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
-
Thank you for your input. :)
Comment from Enchanted2write
What a fasnating story. Such beautiful word. I am curious to know why you had the brothers invite the girls so quickly to their native home? That would be the one thing that I would change. Give the girls enough time to get to know the brothers.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
|
What a fasnating story. Such beautiful word. I am curious to know why you had the brothers invite the girls so quickly to their native home? That would be the one thing that I would change. Give the girls enough time to get to know the brothers.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
-
Thank you for reading. The men are up to no good. They want to hire the girls as prostitutes!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, These two picked the wrong girls for their 'enterprising well paid' business! Now let Blaze loose on them! LOL Shrivelled 'bits' for the pair of them, would be good! LOL. I wonder what Gary will have to say to them, now he has seen Blaze slap one of them round the face, hard! Hope the next chapter isn't too long coming, Phyllis!!! xsx Sandra.
I'm off to hospital tomorrow, hope they can do something to repair the damage they have caused to my knee. Can't put up with it much longer. xx
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
 |
LOL, These two picked the wrong girls for their 'enterprising well paid' business! Now let Blaze loose on them! LOL Shrivelled 'bits' for the pair of them, would be good! LOL. I wonder what Gary will have to say to them, now he has seen Blaze slap one of them round the face, hard! Hope the next chapter isn't too long coming, Phyllis!!! xsx Sandra.
I'm off to hospital tomorrow, hope they can do something to repair the damage they have caused to my knee. Can't put up with it much longer. xx
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
-
Thank you so much for the six stars and for cheering Blaze on. You're having surgery? Oh, my! How long will you be in the hospital? I'll be thinking of you with a prayer or two. :)
-
Thank you, Phyllis, I will be in and out in one day, he is going to do key hole surgery after another x-ray, if it needs another big op, I will be booked in for another day. The new knee they put in, is wobbling and crunching so much, it is bloody painful. I'll let you know how it goes. :) xxxx
Comment from country ranch writer
ouch! The guys better run out of the country or they will wish they had after the girls get through with them. Wow what a thing to happen.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
|
ouch! The guys better run out of the country or they will wish they had after the girls get through with them. Wow what a thing to happen.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
-
Thank you so very much for the six stars! Yes, they picked the wrong too ladies for their shady "business!" :)
-
wow I wouldn't wan to be in their shoes
Comment from Jay Squires
the brothers to be charming and fascinating with a wonderful sense of humor. [I don't know... I'll leave the grammar of it up to you. BROTHERS should take SENSES of HUMOR. Yes? NO? Or, do they share it? Which would mean they couldn't both use it at the same time. (Hey, you gotta expect this when you post so late and I'm being rushed by the news coming on in twenty minutes.)
What a fascinating ending for this chapter. What is it, prostitution? Funny.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
|
the brothers to be charming and fascinating with a wonderful sense of humor. [I don't know... I'll leave the grammar of it up to you. BROTHERS should take SENSES of HUMOR. Yes? NO? Or, do they share it? Which would mean they couldn't both use it at the same time. (Hey, you gotta expect this when you post so late and I'm being rushed by the news coming on in twenty minutes.)
What a fascinating ending for this chapter. What is it, prostitution? Funny.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
-
Thanks, Jay. Sense works since they share it. Yes, they run high-priced call girl service. :)
Comment from royowen
Why indeed would Blaze slap Eric, with Gary just moving ito view, it seems a bit odd to me, particularly since they've just been offered well paying, or is some other proposition they've been offered. The evening started so well with Lorna being rid of Seb, and Blaze with a big wad of money to spend! Well done, Phyllis, good, exciting stuff, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
|
Why indeed would Blaze slap Eric, with Gary just moving ito view, it seems a bit odd to me, particularly since they've just been offered well paying, or is some other proposition they've been offered. The evening started so well with Lorna being rid of Seb, and Blaze with a big wad of money to spend! Well done, Phyllis, good, exciting stuff, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
-
Thanks, Roy. Give it some thought and figure out the NATURE of these high-paying jobs with few hours. Got it yet? :)
-
It wouldnt have anything with receiving money for favours, I think i got it in one!Roy
-
Yep, you got it. :)
Comment from GracieAnn
Phyllis, this is an action packed segment with an interesting cliff hanger making the reader wonder what Eric said. Solid dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
|
Phyllis, this is an action packed segment with an interesting cliff hanger making the reader wonder what Eric said. Solid dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
-
Thanks, GracieAnn. I'll bet you can guess what he said. :)
