Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Very interesting and well written, but either I missed something or Blaze did. That slap seems to came from nowhere. I guess you gave us a little cliff hanger.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015

Thanks, Lance. There's a reason why she slapped him. :)

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Those are some rather intelligent looking young ladies. Great dialogue and scenes in the bar. A big surprise ending. Didn't see that coming though I should have. You lulled us with dancing and romance and chit chat all the while setting us up for a big slap in the face. HA!! Trying to get caught up. The real world is such a bother. mikey

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015

Thanks, Mikey. You are fortunate you can get around in the real world. Everyone takes walking for granted. I lost my sense of balance to the degree I can't walk alone or without a walker. And I need to strap on an oxygen tank to get enough energy to walk out to the car. So, be thankful that you can walk and breathe without thinking about it. Enjoy that real world! :)

reply by michaelcahill on 12-Feb-2015

I'm very thankful and surprised too. The man who died was my age, actually a few months younger. I can't say I lived a healthier lifestyle, but it killed him. He should have came to his senses a few years ago, but he didn't. A shame, but you can't force anyone to help themselves. It took me a lifetime to realize that. I'm the world's great enabler and rescuer. And I guess I received more than my share of the luck of the Irish. :)

Comment from Annette Gulliver

Excellent

Hi Phyllis - oooh...it's getting interesting. What did Eric say to the girls? I think they wanted them to star in a "gentlemens' club" ..perhaps, or something else shady.
Obviously it was something that didn't appeal to the two ladies.

Annette

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015

Thanks so much, Annette. Shady proposition, indeed. They must have taken the girls for loose women in those sexy dresses. :)

reply by Annette Gulliver on 11-Feb-2015

they must have looked the part alright!!

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Phyllis, Blaze slapping Eric caught me off guard a bit, then I was thinking good for her, but I have no clue why. LOL Excellent writing, as always your twist and turns are compelling and keep this post engaging all the way through it.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015

Thank you so much, Maureen. So good to be hearing from you again. :)

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

You really packed a lot into this chapter then left us hanging not knowing why Blaze slapped Eric. I can only assume you let us know in the next chapter. Great work with this one.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015

Thank you, Sasha. You're right, of course. :)

Comment from nasir7148

Poor

It sometime happens. The ladies were not aspecting the immorality from them considering them the brothers. They were delighted by them as a good company like brothers planned to take them along to their houses. Unfortunately, they came to know of these guys aim what they misunderstood the intimacy led to form wrong conclusion from this small stay in the club.

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 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015

Why would you give this chapter only one star? I know you're new here, but... really?

Comment from Fridayauthor

Excellent

Very interesting chapter with a nice description and very good dialog.
You don't hear of Finland very often! I was there last May and loved the country!

I'm interested in where this is going and waiting for the twins to return.

Thanks!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015

Thank you so much. You were in Finland? Lucky! Wish I could have gone there, but we went south into France instead. I missed the fjords and the lovely people. The French were VERY nasty to us everywhere we went. Big mistake. LOL!

Comment from elgone

Excellent

So, why the face slap? Are the boys pimps, recruiting high priced hookers...er uh escorts, for their business associates? Wonder what Gary is going to do in the next scene.

E

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015

Thanks, Elgon. Yes. Next chapter explains. :)

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Why do I get the feeling that they were offering Blaze and Lorna work in Finnish porn? Blaze is going to melt them and their icicles into puddles.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015

Thanks, Ed. Close guess, but not quite that bad. Blaze always has her camera with her, but she wouldn't use it in public unless it were a real emergency. :)

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

Oh oh, Were these guys from a sex trafficking or porno group? Blaze may do them some serious harm. This feels real, having been dragged clubbing several times, (I hated it). A surprise turn of events keeps it interesting.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015

Thanks, Carolyn. I just posted the next chapter, and you'll find you guessed correctly. :)