Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Time to log on. Part Four"The story about three women who need to make money
16 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
Thoroughly enjoyable! Your writing of the three of them acting out the requested scenarios makes it so vivid in my mind.
This is really, really good.
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thoroughly enjoyable! Your writing of the three of them acting out the requested scenarios makes it so vivid in my mind.
This is really, really good.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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If you enjoyed this, then I think the next few chapters should bring a smile to your face. Although you have to get through a couple of 'glue' chapters, there's a lot of fun ahead! Alexis xxx
Comment from Curly Girly
This was another interesting chapter.
You wrote:
He didn't hesitate before he answered.
Suggest:
Without hesitation, he answered,
Ahhhh....' He groaned, before abruptly ending the call.
Ahhhh....' He groaned, before the call ended.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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This was another interesting chapter.
You wrote:
He didn't hesitate before he answered.
Suggest:
Without hesitation, he answered,
Ahhhh....' He groaned, before abruptly ending the call.
Ahhhh....' He groaned, before the call ended.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2015
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Thank you again for these marathon, unrewarded reviews. It makes all this hard work worthwhile. Alexis
Comment from Glasstruth
The conversation is getting more involved, and so far it seems to be going too smoothly, thought it'd have a few bumps in it. Imagine it's a false pretense. Every business has to have some rough spots, but it's still early in the game. The orgasm was funny. The writing is very polished. Will have to read on. It's getting exciting. Les
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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The conversation is getting more involved, and so far it seems to be going too smoothly, thought it'd have a few bumps in it. Imagine it's a false pretense. Every business has to have some rough spots, but it's still early in the game. The orgasm was funny. The writing is very polished. Will have to read on. It's getting exciting. Les
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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I did think of giving them a few bumps but decided it might erode their confidence so much, it might put them off the idea all together - and then I wouldn't have a book to write! Joking apart, you make a very good point. I shall slip in a few 'bumps' along the way. I'm so glad you're enjoying it. Alexis x
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis, that was a great chapter mate. You write so well and so very clearly that I could actually see and hear the action as I read it. I am really enjoying this story, I'm a big fan. No SPAG. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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G'day Alexis, that was a great chapter mate. You write so well and so very clearly that I could actually see and hear the action as I read it. I am really enjoying this story, I'm a big fan. No SPAG. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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You couldn't compliment me more. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
OH MY Lu. This is good stuff. I am a bit of a voyeur and watching far outweighs listening. It is wonderful to see how easily you each slipped into character. Nicely done. If I come over can I watch? :) JK
Bear
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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OH MY Lu. This is good stuff. I am a bit of a voyeur and watching far outweighs listening. It is wonderful to see how easily you each slipped into character. Nicely done. If I come over can I watch? :) JK
Bear
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Your imagination is far too good, Bear! I know all of these girls so well because there is a little bit of me in each of them! As to watching? I'll ask the girls! xxx
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hehehehehehe
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Alexis. You are such a prolific writer, I regret I don't have the time to follow each of your postings. I feel lucky that I can get one chapter posted once every 7 to 10 days. LOL
Anyway, the story is continuing very well. You keep things very interesting always. "As it turned out, she had nothing to worry about, because the guy just wanted her to undress for him, telling him the details as she did. Jenny immediately jumped into action by standing opposite her and doing an imaginary striptease"
Bravo! I sincerely should have saved a six for you, and I shall next week coming, because I realize that each of your chapters are superior writing.
Take care, Alexis. Bob
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Hi, Alexis. You are such a prolific writer, I regret I don't have the time to follow each of your postings. I feel lucky that I can get one chapter posted once every 7 to 10 days. LOL
Anyway, the story is continuing very well. You keep things very interesting always. "As it turned out, she had nothing to worry about, because the guy just wanted her to undress for him, telling him the details as she did. Jenny immediately jumped into action by standing opposite her and doing an imaginary striptease"
Bravo! I sincerely should have saved a six for you, and I shall next week coming, because I realize that each of your chapters are superior writing.
Take care, Alexis. Bob
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Not so much prolific, more ahead of the game, because I had 75,000 words written before Christmas. This is the hard bit - making it all link together and make sense! Your reviews mean so much to me, thank you, my friend. Alexis x
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You are most welcome, Alexis. If you plan on publishing this, keep in mind that 100,000 words are about average a publisher wants these days...perhaps 125, 000 at the outside. :) Bob
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Yes, 100,000 is my aim because I only had the bare bones with the 75,000 when I started posting on FS. Amazing what reviews do to spart your imagina xtion and elaborate on things you glanced over before!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a clever idea for a story. I don't know how I missed this one, but I'll have to start reading it. I like your style.. so direct and easy to read. :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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What a clever idea for a story. I don't know how I missed this one, but I'll have to start reading it. I like your style.. so direct and easy to read. :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Phyllis! how wonderful to hear from you. I'm sure you would enjoy the humour behind this story. It's time for us mature ladies to stand up and be counted for our efforts! Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from Cat of Letters
I am annoyed to have written a review for this only to have it wiped out because I was unable to send it due to some, seemingly, unscheduled system maintenance. Unless this was a glitch, very, very inconsiderate, on the part of the management, not to advertise these things an hour or two ahead of time and announce a temporary stop post.
That is my rant to Tom, as I understand reviews are read.
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Alexis.
I am sorry. I read your synopsis, and I love the idea behind your novel and your characters. I also think posting the synopsis is a brilliant idea.
I like your characters, and the sensitivity of Laura in the previous chapter is touching and characterizes her well.
I had written a lot more on this. Until the glitch swallowed it.
Suffice to say you have a fan.
Zahir wonders if the barn cats could start a business purring on line to pensioners who are forced to live in pet free premises.
Cheers,
Alison,
Cat Servant to Zahir
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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I am annoyed to have written a review for this only to have it wiped out because I was unable to send it due to some, seemingly, unscheduled system maintenance. Unless this was a glitch, very, very inconsiderate, on the part of the management, not to advertise these things an hour or two ahead of time and announce a temporary stop post.
That is my rant to Tom, as I understand reviews are read.
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Alexis.
I am sorry. I read your synopsis, and I love the idea behind your novel and your characters. I also think posting the synopsis is a brilliant idea.
I like your characters, and the sensitivity of Laura in the previous chapter is touching and characterizes her well.
I had written a lot more on this. Until the glitch swallowed it.
Suffice to say you have a fan.
Zahir wonders if the barn cats could start a business purring on line to pensioners who are forced to live in pet free premises.
Cheers,
Alison,
Cat Servant to Zahir
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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Lol, Zahir is welcome to come along any time he likes! Once again my thanks for your thoughts, encouragement, and reviews. We writers always need affirmation that we're doing okay, so I really appreciate it. Talk soon. Alexis x
Comment from MelB
Oh my, these girls are really getting into this now. Goes to show you, men will pay for anything. At least they are finding clever ways to make the sounds effects. Are they running this phone line 24 hours a day?
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Oh my, these girls are really getting into this now. Goes to show you, men will pay for anything. At least they are finding clever ways to make the sounds effects. Are they running this phone line 24 hours a day?
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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The lines are open 24 hours a day, but the girls are all working from Jenny's house, so late night calls are restricted to the weekend because Jenny works four days a week. I hope you're enjoying their efforts so far. Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
I don't think i could fake an orgasm in front of my girlfriends without spitting my wine across the room and choking with laughter. Hee hee
'We're here, Big boy. - hahahaha
Fourteen minutes!' she announced triumphantly. 'Now that's what I call a group effort!'--This is just too much! I LOVE how she's concerned about how much time has lapsed. Smart girl!
By one-thirty, they were all mentally drained. -I WOULD be too! Sheesh...men! LOL
Now they'd found out how easy it could be, the thought of doing it alone didn't worry any of them so much.- Yes, they could do it alone but where's the fun in that. I'm enjoying the girls night 'out'. LOL
Well done on ANOTHER FUN chapter!! I got a laugh out of your author notes. :-D
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I don't think i could fake an orgasm in front of my girlfriends without spitting my wine across the room and choking with laughter. Hee hee
'We're here, Big boy. - hahahaha
Fourteen minutes!' she announced triumphantly. 'Now that's what I call a group effort!'--This is just too much! I LOVE how she's concerned about how much time has lapsed. Smart girl!
By one-thirty, they were all mentally drained. -I WOULD be too! Sheesh...men! LOL
Now they'd found out how easy it could be, the thought of doing it alone didn't worry any of them so much.- Yes, they could do it alone but where's the fun in that. I'm enjoying the girls night 'out'. LOL
Well done on ANOTHER FUN chapter!! I got a laugh out of your author notes. :-D
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I actually watched this very experienced sex phone 'madam' teach a youngster to fake a great orgasm for a punter - hilarious! I think 'When Harry met Sally' has a lot to answer for that one! Sooooo glad you're enjoying it. Alexis x
