Framed
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Calin Locates Meredith"A thriller set in Washington
4 total reviews
Comment from krazee3377
First of all thank you for sharing your piece. I know how much courage it takes to put your work out there for all to see and pick apart. I love honesty and I always learn something about myself, and am still amazed how healing writing can be. Weather fiction or non I believe there is a truth at the heart of every message. As a writer, I use it at theropy and always feel a little more sane when I share. I really enjoyed this piece and can't wait to see where it goes. Good luck and keep sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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First of all thank you for sharing your piece. I know how much courage it takes to put your work out there for all to see and pick apart. I love honesty and I always learn something about myself, and am still amazed how healing writing can be. Weather fiction or non I believe there is a truth at the heart of every message. As a writer, I use it at theropy and always feel a little more sane when I share. I really enjoyed this piece and can't wait to see where it goes. Good luck and keep sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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It's not really courage, it's the desire to improve.
And while some people criticise without real knowledge, there are others here who offer advice that really will bring about improvement in your work.
Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate them.
Comment from Jay Squires
Let me ask a question that may sound stupid, and probably is: Is Tyler the one (at my point of entrance into your story) who didn't have a name in the beginning, nor identity? He was in a house, I believe under a bed, then he made a break for a barn. It seems like his name was Jace or a name starting with "J", but I may be wrong. It doesn't help when you throw in the name Calin and then let many people own that name. Oh, my!]
To me, maam, that doesn't fit within my definition of trust." [Unless it's a particularly Australian thing, there's an apostrophe in "ma'am", replacing the "d"]
This is another good intrigue - ing chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Let me ask a question that may sound stupid, and probably is: Is Tyler the one (at my point of entrance into your story) who didn't have a name in the beginning, nor identity? He was in a house, I believe under a bed, then he made a break for a barn. It seems like his name was Jace or a name starting with "J", but I may be wrong. It doesn't help when you throw in the name Calin and then let many people own that name. Oh, my!]
To me, maam, that doesn't fit within my definition of trust." [Unless it's a particularly Australian thing, there's an apostrophe in "ma'am", replacing the "d"]
This is another good intrigue - ing chapter.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Allow me to explain. Calin Roberts is not actually an individual but rather a role created by Homeland Security filled by several different operatives.
With regard to the early detail your memory is pretty good.
I've made the change to ma'am.
Thank you again for your positivity.
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I understood the Calin "role" but since there were at least three characters who came under that umbrella, I got confused.
Comment from emrpoems
You have developed the plot very well and kept the reader engaged right through.
Good use of dialogue that reads naturally
Characters are well developed
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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You have developed the plot very well and kept the reader engaged right through.
Good use of dialogue that reads naturally
Characters are well developed
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I appreciate your taking time to read my work, especially as it was rather long
Comment from royowen
The plot becomes more tense as it moves along, Tyler has met up with Meredith Parslow now, and tells her that she must be compliant to everything he instructs her to do! The plot thickens, I wonder what role the young woman is playing, or is she an innocent patsy!? Well done, great tension, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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The plot becomes more tense as it moves along, Tyler has met up with Meredith Parslow now, and tells her that she must be compliant to everything he instructs her to do! The plot thickens, I wonder what role the young woman is playing, or is she an innocent patsy!? Well done, great tension, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Roy you always offer great encouragement. Reviews like this provide the reward we writers crave. Thank you again
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Most welcome
