Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
I'm running behind on reviewing. Both Marilyn and I have been quite ill with bronchitis, but I think we are almost well now so I'm back on schedule.
This was a nice transition chapter. I lived in rattlesnake country for ten years and even killed some beauties, but eat one? Its not on my menu, although many people compare it to tender roast chicken.
I am amazed that Jim didn't identify himself when his associates picked up the bad guys. Soni still seems overconfident to continue back with Jim, with so little information about him.She does have survival skis as she recognizes the need for shelter and high ground as a mountain storm sweeps I. I once got caught buy a mountain hail storm. They certainly show up suddenly.
From my experience with mountain lions, I doubt one would follow humans for as wrong as an hour. They are always a danger to livestock, but threaten humans only when they are corned or have young cubs. I suggest you read more about their habits,
I didn't note any SPAG. You still are a good storyteller, so love and Irish Hugs are on your way again.
Roger
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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Hi Barbara:)
I'm running behind on reviewing. Both Marilyn and I have been quite ill with bronchitis, but I think we are almost well now so I'm back on schedule.
This was a nice transition chapter. I lived in rattlesnake country for ten years and even killed some beauties, but eat one? Its not on my menu, although many people compare it to tender roast chicken.
I am amazed that Jim didn't identify himself when his associates picked up the bad guys. Soni still seems overconfident to continue back with Jim, with so little information about him.She does have survival skis as she recognizes the need for shelter and high ground as a mountain storm sweeps I. I once got caught buy a mountain hail storm. They certainly show up suddenly.
From my experience with mountain lions, I doubt one would follow humans for as wrong as an hour. They are always a danger to livestock, but threaten humans only when they are corned or have young cubs. I suggest you read more about their habits,
I didn't note any SPAG. You still are a good storyteller, so love and Irish Hugs are on your way again.
Roger
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2015
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My prayers are with you and your wife's speedy recovering.
Comment from jaeladarling
I've missed some chapters. :( Luckily, the story is so good that I got sucked right back in! :) Sounds like we've got a few things going on. Hope they can make it to the shack! Looking forward to the next chapter.
A few nits for your consideration:
"Besides rattlesnake's a delicacy." (Comma after "Besides")
"He says he from New York City." ("He says he's from New York City." Wasn't sure if you did that on purpose or not, since it's dialogue.)
"The horse hind legs kicked" ("horse's")
"Would you check our cordinates?" ("coordinates")
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I've missed some chapters. :( Luckily, the story is so good that I got sucked right back in! :) Sounds like we've got a few things going on. Hope they can make it to the shack! Looking forward to the next chapter.
A few nits for your consideration:
"Besides rattlesnake's a delicacy." (Comma after "Besides")
"He says he from New York City." ("He says he's from New York City." Wasn't sure if you did that on purpose or not, since it's dialogue.)
"The horse hind legs kicked" ("horse's")
"Would you check our cordinates?" ("coordinates")
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you for catching those. I am shocked nobody else did, they are obvious. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Bryana
I'm sorry I haven't read previous chapters,
but I will when I have the time.
I like this chapter very much, the interaction
between the animals is very special and I love
animals except snakes.
You are an excellent writer dear Barbara and I
don-t want to miss your writing.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I'm sorry I haven't read previous chapters,
but I will when I have the time.
I like this chapter very much, the interaction
between the animals is very special and I love
animals except snakes.
You are an excellent writer dear Barbara and I
don-t want to miss your writing.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Yeah, I'd like to know what's going on too - is that mountain lion going to attack before they can reach safety? Barbara, there are some wonderfully uncommon, knowledgeable details in this chapter that honestly bring this so alive! For example, the part about the compass, and I loved the innuendo about marines - true! (Like cops off-duty...no such thing. *grin*)
Flawless!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Yeah, I'd like to know what's going on too - is that mountain lion going to attack before they can reach safety? Barbara, there are some wonderfully uncommon, knowledgeable details in this chapter that honestly bring this so alive! For example, the part about the compass, and I loved the innuendo about marines - true! (Like cops off-duty...no such thing. *grin*)
Flawless!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from MusingsOfMWH
There's no love lost between me and rattlesnakes, so I'm glad Soni shot one. It's interesting how you use animals as characters in your story. I liked the interaction between Midnight and Butkus. I saw an actual situation like that once a long time ago when I was visiting friends in a rural zone just south of Salem. I was amazed that although the horse had a massive size advantage, my friend's dog got him to move. I've never seen a cougar here in the Willamette Valley, but every once in a while there are media reports they've gone after cattle out in the country.
Animals or humans, your characters are intriguing, and I enjoy reading your work. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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There's no love lost between me and rattlesnakes, so I'm glad Soni shot one. It's interesting how you use animals as characters in your story. I liked the interaction between Midnight and Butkus. I saw an actual situation like that once a long time ago when I was visiting friends in a rural zone just south of Salem. I was amazed that although the horse had a massive size advantage, my friend's dog got him to move. I've never seen a cougar here in the Willamette Valley, but every once in a while there are media reports they've gone after cattle out in the country.
Animals or humans, your characters are intriguing, and I enjoy reading your work. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Tellis
I am really enjoying this story and am always happy to see a new chapter posted. I like dogs and horses but I've only ever rode two three times in my life. There's nothing wrong with a western romance. If you've never read a Zane Grey novel you should they are almost all heavy with classical romance. He's my favorite western author even before Louis L'Amour. No spags noted.
Tellis
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I am really enjoying this story and am always happy to see a new chapter posted. I like dogs and horses but I've only ever rode two three times in my life. There's nothing wrong with a western romance. If you've never read a Zane Grey novel you should they are almost all heavy with classical romance. He's my favorite western author even before Louis L'Amour. No spags noted.
Tellis
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the encouragement. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of another fine chapter of constant conflict that keeps me tuned in and wanting more. You've managed to make not knowing about who Jim really is a big part of the story, Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the pleasure of another fine chapter of constant conflict that keeps me tuned in and wanting more. You've managed to make not knowing about who Jim really is a big part of the story, Great job. :-)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Genya
Another great chapter to this story which I have loved from the beginning. Great characters, strong plot and always something exciting happening. This really is one of my favourites. Love it. Genya
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Another great chapter to this story which I have loved from the beginning. Great characters, strong plot and always something exciting happening. This really is one of my favourites. Love it. Genya
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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A appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Great cliff-hanger of an ending, Barbara. One image was startling for me when Soni answered his ringing cell phone. Up until then, the setting could have been fifty years ago. Not a bad thing... just intersting. The difference is in man's technology, but not the land.
As always, a treat to read.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Great cliff-hanger of an ending, Barbara. One image was startling for me when Soni answered his ringing cell phone. Up until then, the setting could have been fifty years ago. Not a bad thing... just intersting. The difference is in man's technology, but not the land.
As always, a treat to read.
:) Bev
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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I appreciate the kind review.Than
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Ekim777
You have an easy flow to your writing but it is cluttered by ordinary people. Where is the mystique of the wilderness? And is that really a mountain lion? It resembles a young female lioness. Like I said homo sapiens rules the roost and talk too loudly. Nothing like the fathomless silence on the bush. In Africa, on a crystal night, you can hear the grunt and cough of the pride , five miles away. -Ekim777.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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You have an easy flow to your writing but it is cluttered by ordinary people. Where is the mystique of the wilderness? And is that really a mountain lion? It resembles a young female lioness. Like I said homo sapiens rules the roost and talk too loudly. Nothing like the fathomless silence on the bush. In Africa, on a crystal night, you can hear the grunt and cough of the pride , five miles away. -Ekim777.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, mountain lions/cougars do resemble female lions.
