Tears of Innocence
Naani4 total reviews
Comment from mumsyone
from the eyes of ignorance,
scales of prejudice and hate
are washed away
by the tears of innocence
The message in your naani poem is so true, and it is a well structured naani. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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from the eyes of ignorance,
scales of prejudice and hate
are washed away
by the tears of innocence
The message in your naani poem is so true, and it is a well structured naani. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Mumsy - and congratulations on your win - your piece was unstoppable.
Steve
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Thanks, Steve, for the congratulations. I really liked yours (although I didn't know it was yours).
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is stunningly presented and is in excellent naani form of 25 words in 4 lines
I like the pairing of innocence/ignorance
excellent use of enjambment to make this one continuous thought
insightful observations with strong emotional appeal and the kind of commentary on the human condition that I look for in the naani
Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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your poem is stunningly presented and is in excellent naani form of 25 words in 4 lines
I like the pairing of innocence/ignorance
excellent use of enjambment to make this one continuous thought
insightful observations with strong emotional appeal and the kind of commentary on the human condition that I look for in the naani
Brooke
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Brooke.
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
Very thought provoking words and artwork.
It looks like she is letting her tears flow and opening her emotions for all to see so people can see what they are doing is wrong. These tears may bring her and others to actions to solve the problem that caused the tears.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Very thought provoking words and artwork.
It looks like she is letting her tears flow and opening her emotions for all to see so people can see what they are doing is wrong. These tears may bring her and others to actions to solve the problem that caused the tears.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thnk you!
Steve
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I have to view this poem in terms of the individual. It doesn't apply to a group setting otherwise we would have very few atrocities carried out.
This is obviously just my interpretation on the piece which is beautifully written and very affecting. It should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Hi there,
I have to view this poem in terms of the individual. It doesn't apply to a group setting otherwise we would have very few atrocities carried out.
This is obviously just my interpretation on the piece which is beautifully written and very affecting. It should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thank you!
Steve
