His body etched..
Signed, sealed, and delivered.86 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
The atonement by biblical description assures us of redemption. I am sorry, but I find the picture too graphic; reading about it in the Scriptures is adequate enough for me to realise His pain and suffering. The works of the living Christ instil faith and knowledge. Powerful message and good use of rhyming. Faye
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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The atonement by biblical description assures us of redemption. I am sorry, but I find the picture too graphic; reading about it in the Scriptures is adequate enough for me to realise His pain and suffering. The works of the living Christ instil faith and knowledge. Powerful message and good use of rhyming. Faye
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Just thanking you Faye, for the marvellous review and great comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from DR DIP
you know Roy , I really do love your writings I love you gift with words and verse but and this is no offence to your dedicated faith but could you just post a few that are not praising GOD or religious related. Please don't take this offensively and I know your dedication to the lord and all that but I would love to see some of your wonderful works pre revelation pre discobvering God just to compare your work it would be interesting to see the different style in your amazing talent
with the greatest respect
your fanstory friend always
dip
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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you know Roy , I really do love your writings I love you gift with words and verse but and this is no offence to your dedicated faith but could you just post a few that are not praising GOD or religious related. Please don't take this offensively and I know your dedication to the lord and all that but I would love to see some of your wonderful works pre revelation pre discobvering God just to compare your work it would be interesting to see the different style in your amazing talent
with the greatest respect
your fanstory friend always
dip
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Just thanking Dip, you for the marvellous review and great comments,no offence taken, blessings, Roy.
Comment from RGstar
Strong image indeed, Roy. Nothing so poignant as this moment, even with respect of all religions.
Your faith, as usual, takes us through the day.
Good rhymes, good projection of your thesis.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Strong image indeed, Roy. Nothing so poignant as this moment, even with respect of all religions.
Your faith, as usual, takes us through the day.
Good rhymes, good projection of your thesis.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Just thanking you RG, for the marvellous review and great comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sasha
This is a beautifully written poem. I believe that Christ existed and agree, thorough documentation has been done to prove this is a fact. I enjoyed your poem very much. It flows so smoothly and the imagery you convey is stunning to say the least.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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This is a beautifully written poem. I believe that Christ existed and agree, thorough documentation has been done to prove this is a fact. I enjoyed your poem very much. It flows so smoothly and the imagery you convey is stunning to say the least.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Just thanking you for the marvellous review and great comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from judiverse
A beautiful statement of Christ's sacrifice. Very strongly worded with the soiled garment and the lashes he bore for humanity's sake. His sacrifice and what it means joins you with Christ. Excellent AABB rhyme, and it flows gracefully. Everything comes together beautifully in this. Definitely worth 6 stars. judi
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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A beautiful statement of Christ's sacrifice. Very strongly worded with the soiled garment and the lashes he bore for humanity's sake. His sacrifice and what it means joins you with Christ. Excellent AABB rhyme, and it flows gracefully. Everything comes together beautifully in this. Definitely worth 6 stars. judi
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thanks Judi for the marvellous words, review and stars, blessings Roy.
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You're so very welcome. judi
Comment from papa55mike
This is absolutely perfect. So beautifully written. I love the author notes backing your point with scripture. You have brightened my day. Many blessings, mike.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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This is absolutely perfect. So beautifully written. I love the author notes backing your point with scripture. You have brightened my day. Many blessings, mike.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thanks Mike for these poignant words, delightful review, and stars, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Ebear
beautiful poem and it sounds like this was an inspired poem and that is why I believe it flowed seamlessly. Jesus Saves us from the devils grave! God Bless.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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beautiful poem and it sounds like this was an inspired poem and that is why I believe it flowed seamlessly. Jesus Saves us from the devils grave! God Bless.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Thanks so much for these delightful words, review and stars, blessings, Roy.
Comment from garrymc5
'etched with Holy care', but when is care 'Holy'? You also have the adjective in Capitals and the quality, care, in lower case. Surely the care is the active verb, the subject, the etching, the dominative adjective in capitals.
Then you have there rhyming word in
care,
our sin to bear, soiled garment wear,
which demeans the subject.
The poem ends '...God guaranteed'.
The problem is that the previous lines do not have a 'promise' or at least not one I can detect. So a rework is need in this stanza.
In the end, the themes excellent, but I am not sure it is yet well expressed.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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'etched with Holy care', but when is care 'Holy'? You also have the adjective in Capitals and the quality, care, in lower case. Surely the care is the active verb, the subject, the etching, the dominative adjective in capitals.
Then you have there rhyming word in
care,
our sin to bear, soiled garment wear,
which demeans the subject.
The poem ends '...God guaranteed'.
The problem is that the previous lines do not have a 'promise' or at least not one I can detect. So a rework is need in this stanza.
In the end, the themes excellent, but I am not sure it is yet well expressed.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Some capitals are always valid, fortunately you don't make the rules. Thanks for dropping in, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I waited so I could give this amazing piece of poetry the 6 it so deserves. Your words are lovely Roy, God sent His only son, Jesus, so that we might live. What a sacrifice that was. And Jesus walked this earth teaching his Father's word, and then was crucified for his goodness. This was a real pleasure to read, my friend. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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I waited so I could give this amazing piece of poetry the 6 it so deserves. Your words are lovely Roy, God sent His only son, Jesus, so that we might live. What a sacrifice that was. And Jesus walked this earth teaching his Father's word, and then was crucified for his goodness. This was a real pleasure to read, my friend. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thank you Sandra, for this most uplifting review and these beautiful comments and stars, you're opinion I covet, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Roy, another very poignant and wonderfully written spiritual poem from you my friend, You never cease to amaze me with your brilliant knowledge of the bible, the flow, rhyming and rhythm of your poem are excellent.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Hi Roy, another very poignant and wonderfully written spiritual poem from you my friend, You never cease to amaze me with your brilliant knowledge of the bible, the flow, rhyming and rhythm of your poem are excellent.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thanks so much Eric, for the excellent review, rating and comments, blessings, Roy.
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As always , my pleasure Roy.
