Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Meeting Part Two"The story about three women who need to make money
11 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
I suppose we'll find out the bad things discovered during her research soon enough. I have such a boring voice, I doubt I'd get many customers!
I'm interested to see how many customers they each get and how much cash rolls in.
Small suggestions:
count me in as the one into dominatrix (replace 'the one into' with 'a')
you have to send them a copy of photo ID (add either 'a' or 'your' before 'photo ID)
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I suppose we'll find out the bad things discovered during her research soon enough. I have such a boring voice, I doubt I'd get many customers!
I'm interested to see how many customers they each get and how much cash rolls in.
Small suggestions:
count me in as the one into dominatrix (replace 'the one into' with 'a')
you have to send them a copy of photo ID (add either 'a' or 'your' before 'photo ID)
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Well caught! I'm glad to say the fun starts soon. Thank you sue, not only for your review, but the wonderful six. Alexis xxx
Comment from Glasstruth
Sounds more interesting as they're getting ready; and I wonder how the first call will go? It'll be a learning process. The mistakes I'm sure will be hilarious. I thought Jenny was quite amusing. You didn't write what was in the documentary. Maybe it's not important. Just wondered what they saw. I admit I've missed a few chapters. The excitement is building. Les
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Sounds more interesting as they're getting ready; and I wonder how the first call will go? It'll be a learning process. The mistakes I'm sure will be hilarious. I thought Jenny was quite amusing. You didn't write what was in the documentary. Maybe it's not important. Just wondered what they saw. I admit I've missed a few chapters. The excitement is building. Les
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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I have to admit to feeling a tad nervous as that chapter looms because trying to get the balance between funny and smutty is a veritable tightrope! Thank you so much for your review, it's always appreciated.
Alexis x
Comment from Spitfire
The girls are treating this just like a professional white-collar job. That's what makes it humorous. You have to admire their organization. I'm waiting for them to start their own business. LOL
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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The girls are treating this just like a professional white-collar job. That's what makes it humorous. You have to admire their organization. I'm waiting for them to start their own business. LOL
Comment Written 30-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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Is there any other way? Lol, I know so much about the subject now, I think even I could do it! Nearly there... Alexis x
Comment from adewpearl
I love what they discover in their "research" about the nature of phone sex LOL
love their role playing, like pretending to be a dominatrix
laughing at the one has to be prompted to say Cock LOL
love the discussion of payment and what sort of company to work for
Brooke
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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I love what they discover in their "research" about the nature of phone sex LOL
love their role playing, like pretending to be a dominatrix
laughing at the one has to be prompted to say Cock LOL
love the discussion of payment and what sort of company to work for
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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There have been parts of this book that have been more fun to write than others. This was certainly one of them! Thank you so much for your encouraging review. Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It takes quite a while to get
it all together, but soon they
will be up and running...
what that women said - woman
the least[,] claim to
pay the most[,] are
Most enjoyable, Alexis.
Margaret
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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It takes quite a while to get
it all together, but soon they
will be up and running...
what that women said - woman
the least[,] claim to
pay the most[,] are
Most enjoyable, Alexis.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Margaret. I always know I can depend on you to catch these silly mistakes. I still have so much to learn! Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis, I am really enjoying this and I am getting nervous for them as well, what a scary world...I found my first ever SPAG..I think from your writing.
"she suggested the other two checked them all out and signed (sign) Or (get signed up) up to one as soon as possible."
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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G'day Alexis, I am really enjoying this and I am getting nervous for them as well, what a scary world...I found my first ever SPAG..I think from your writing.
"she suggested the other two checked them all out and signed (sign) Or (get signed up) up to one as soon as possible."
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Well done for catching that, Fez. That's what Fan Story should be about, coming up with suggestions that might help improve each others work. I think you're a bit like me in that we sometimes hesitate to make suggestions if we don't feel confident in another form of writing, but as you've proved here, it can be really helpful. Thank you! Alexis x
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I do it quite often with poetry but as far as stories go I can't write them so if something jumps out then I suggest it, but if it doesn't I wouldn't have a clue LOL, cheers Fez
Comment from rwilliam
'Now, repeat after me. C...O...C...K-- LOL I love how you wrote this part especially. Having one so shy and embarrassed to just say "the" word. You had me giggling!
The only bad thing is you are such a good writer I'm having a hard time coming up with new ways to say BRAVO! :-)
Excellent chapter. I enjoyed it very much!!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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'Now, repeat after me. C...O...C...K-- LOL I love how you wrote this part especially. Having one so shy and embarrassed to just say "the" word. You had me giggling!
The only bad thing is you are such a good writer I'm having a hard time coming up with new ways to say BRAVO! :-)
Excellent chapter. I enjoyed it very much!!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Now, how did I know you would enjoy this bit? Lol, you have such a great sense if humour, that's why! Thank you, my friend for your continued support. Alexis x
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Desperate times call for desperate measures Alexis. I can't wait to see how they do on their trial run. I couldn't do it.
They are not sure they can. On thing for sure sin and sex sells so they should be able to make some money at it. Let's see what happens. LOL :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Desperate times call for desperate measures Alexis. I can't wait to see how they do on their trial run. I couldn't do it.
They are not sure they can. On thing for sure sin and sex sells so they should be able to make some money at it. Let's see what happens. LOL :<) Nancy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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They will hopefully find it easier than expected, and a lot funnier! Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I really appreciate it. Alexis x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Gosh, it's amazing how easy it to get all that info on line, as I am sure you can. I am wondering how they will manage with just the one phone, when a few'clients' want to come on at the same time? LOL, you have really got me into this story, Alexis. I can't wait to read the chapter when their little business starts. Well done, my friend, another excellent page. :) Sandra.
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Gosh, it's amazing how easy it to get all that info on line, as I am sure you can. I am wondering how they will manage with just the one phone, when a few'clients' want to come on at the same time? LOL, you have really got me into this story, Alexis. I can't wait to read the chapter when their little business starts. Well done, my friend, another excellent page. :) Sandra.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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The research into the subject was much easier than expected but there again, it's so easy to research everything these days because of Google. Aint no secrets anymore! Thank you for keeping up the story and your encouraging reviews, Sandra. You're a star! Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
This was a fascinating chapter. I did not realise there was so much red tape involved in this sort of thing, but it makes sense. I have heard that many of these phone in sex calls are pre-recorded. The money offered for these calls is not a lot, but I suppose if you are broke, it's better than nothing. It wouldn't be good to get laryngitides!
Suggestion: search your word document for the word 'very' and delete it. It's one of those unnecessary words that editors dislike.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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This was a fascinating chapter. I did not realise there was so much red tape involved in this sort of thing, but it makes sense. I have heard that many of these phone in sex calls are pre-recorded. The money offered for these calls is not a lot, but I suppose if you are broke, it's better than nothing. It wouldn't be good to get laryngitides!
Suggestion: search your word document for the word 'very' and delete it. It's one of those unnecessary words that editors dislike.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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I think it's different in the UK, in as much that there are loads of Chat lines and it is rapidly becoming a popular vocation for people who want to work from home. I was so inspired by a documentary on TV a couple of years ago, the idea started to formulate for a book. I'm hoping to have the first draught in the hands of a well known playwright for TV and film, within the next couple of weeks, so every review takes me one step closer to having the confidence to send it off. Thank you so much for helping me achieve that goal! Alexis x
