The Glory of Creation
From my lighter, gentler muse...62 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
I think we see, the balloon's pricked
Endeavour all pride to evict
Good grace and favour to above
Raise to heaven on wings of dove
To bask in glory not yet earned
All puffed and pumped with our heads turned
Who grants this talent, lends the pen?
Salute those gifts from Him - Amen
Or something like that. Another wonderful poem from you. I really felt this one deeply. Respect and honour the talents, however small, we have been given and remember where we are and where they came from.
A very effective and indeed emotive poem.
That final piece of art work / animation is beautiful and powerful as well.
Thank you for this Dean.
The little poem at the top is just for you, my friend. I feel the change.
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I think we see, the balloon's pricked
Endeavour all pride to evict
Good grace and favour to above
Raise to heaven on wings of dove
To bask in glory not yet earned
All puffed and pumped with our heads turned
Who grants this talent, lends the pen?
Salute those gifts from Him - Amen
Or something like that. Another wonderful poem from you. I really felt this one deeply. Respect and honour the talents, however small, we have been given and remember where we are and where they came from.
A very effective and indeed emotive poem.
That final piece of art work / animation is beautiful and powerful as well.
Thank you for this Dean.
The little poem at the top is just for you, my friend. I feel the change.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Deano.
Maybe 4th line, for better flow - 'with-IN-spir-A-tion-EV-ery-WHERE'
No more suggs, as I don't want to irritate, and you're taking Brooke's meter class anyway.
I'm not sure last line is relative to all poets' writes, but it's a nice message to those of Faith.
Top examples of what may inspire us, and the list is endless. I really think the basic motivation is to SEE and not just look.
Oh, hang on, I just split one of my fingernails whilst typing - now, there's a an original theme for a macho guy like me. ;-)
Excellent read, my friend.
Cheers, Ray.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Hi, Deano.
Maybe 4th line, for better flow - 'with-IN-spir-A-tion-EV-ery-WHERE'
No more suggs, as I don't want to irritate, and you're taking Brooke's meter class anyway.
I'm not sure last line is relative to all poets' writes, but it's a nice message to those of Faith.
Top examples of what may inspire us, and the list is endless. I really think the basic motivation is to SEE and not just look.
Oh, hang on, I just split one of my fingernails whilst typing - now, there's a an original theme for a macho guy like me. ;-)
Excellent read, my friend.
Cheers, Ray.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Ha-ha-ha, thank, Rayman. I suppose you're right about that last line, unless you're a believer like myself who chooses to believe. If so, then I have no other choice, and I write what I feel.
I really liked what you said..."SEE, and not just look." You're dead on there. Sounds like inspiration for a future poem to me, LOL. See what I mean?
Thanks for the g-r-r-r-r-e-a-t review, buddy. Much obliged! ~DeanO ;}
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Thanks for the 'g-r-r-r-r-e-a-t' reply, Deano. :-)
Ray
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Anytime. :)
