Jagged Mountain
A metaphor for a difficult,impossible challenge.32 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Our fear of failing has fooled many of us into believing we haven't got what it takes sometimes. Life is an uphill climb at times, but it's quite often the thrill of the climb that makes the final destination of our journey worth reaching.
Wonderfully done, Lois! ~Dean
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Our fear of failing has fooled many of us into believing we haven't got what it takes sometimes. Life is an uphill climb at times, but it's quite often the thrill of the climb that makes the final destination of our journey worth reaching.
Wonderfully done, Lois! ~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this poem a lot. A nice metaphor for the challenges in life. Nothing ventured, nothing gained. It is amazing how we can put things off, isn't it.
Well written and presented.
GMG
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Hi there,
I liked this poem a lot. A nice metaphor for the challenges in life. Nothing ventured, nothing gained. It is amazing how we can put things off, isn't it.
Well written and presented.
GMG
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from gypsymoth
Good use of metaphor. If we could get over those peaks, we'd be at the top of our world. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
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Good use of metaphor. If we could get over those peaks, we'd be at the top of our world. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from scd41
Your free verse is not only motivating it is interesting with last eight lines having sinle words. Of course, this is, as I understand, the beauty of free verse where the stiffling rhyming and meter rules do not apply. Failure is a part of life. Martin Luther King had said 'We must accept finite disappointment, but we must not lose infinite hope'. Best of luck for the contest.
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Your free verse is not only motivating it is interesting with last eight lines having sinle words. Of course, this is, as I understand, the beauty of free verse where the stiffling rhyming and meter rules do not apply. Failure is a part of life. Martin Luther King had said 'We must accept finite disappointment, but we must not lose infinite hope'. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from krys123
LoannaLois; I do like how you written the format of your poem as it near the end you get the feeling of the falling. I am scared of heights myself so I wouldn't take on the adventure of climbing any mountain. The picture you have chosen is righteously representative of your poem and such a beautiful picture it is. But I like about your poem it's like mine if I would've written it, it is very honest and truthful. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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LoannaLois; I do like how you written the format of your poem as it near the end you get the feeling of the falling. I am scared of heights myself so I wouldn't take on the adventure of climbing any mountain. The picture you have chosen is righteously representative of your poem and such a beautiful picture it is. But I like about your poem it's like mine if I would've written it, it is very honest and truthful. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from MelB
Well written using climbing a mountain as a metaphor for something difficult. Fear of failure or falling - sometimes these tough times are the times we grow the most. Don't let fear get the best of you, but also make sure it is the right decision before moving on it.
Best wishes in the contest.
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Well written using climbing a mountain as a metaphor for something difficult. Fear of failure or falling - sometimes these tough times are the times we grow the most. Don't let fear get the best of you, but also make sure it is the right decision before moving on it.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from Brabazon
A poem about attempting a difficult challenge.
Yeah, I saw the poetry in the metaphor of a mountain for a challenge, and in the flow and rhythm of the poem.
Brabazon.
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A poem about attempting a difficult challenge.
Yeah, I saw the poetry in the metaphor of a mountain for a challenge, and in the flow and rhythm of the poem.
Brabazon.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
Comment from Zue65
This poem speaks of surrender and defeat and enjoyed the form like the words are falling down, down to a deep ravine as the words narrow down at the end. i enjoyed reading this poem, an excellent write. Thanks for sharing.
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This poem speaks of surrender and defeat and enjoyed the form like the words are falling down, down to a deep ravine as the words narrow down at the end. i enjoyed reading this poem, an excellent write. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
Comment from Drew Delaney
It is nice to attempt something that is challenging, however, take your time and think it through. Sometimes it is better to sit back and just look up at the mountain rather than begin to climb. You need to be absolutely sure. Drew
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It is nice to attempt something that is challenging, however, take your time and think it through. Sometimes it is better to sit back and just look up at the mountain rather than begin to climb. You need to be absolutely sure. Drew
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
Comment from skye
I love the visual set-up of this poem and the dramatic ending of I will fall....... repeated.
You captured the fear and the power of climbing, of exerting oneself against a goal, and of the reason why it may not happen.
Excellent.
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I love the visual set-up of this poem and the dramatic ending of I will fall....... repeated.
You captured the fear and the power of climbing, of exerting oneself against a goal, and of the reason why it may not happen.
Excellent.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
