Jagged Mountain
A metaphor for a difficult,impossible challenge.32 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Just grit your teeth and DO it. The longest journey begins with one step. Stop hesitating and worrying. Get started and you'll gain energy and courage as you go. :)
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Just grit your teeth and DO it. The longest journey begins with one step. Stop hesitating and worrying. Get started and you'll gain energy and courage as you go. :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
Comment from Carole Rosa
Lois, Be positive. Don't take the negative attitude that you will fail or the awful thought that you will fall. The photo is great, but dangerous looking. Maybe you should try rock climbing first!! Ha. But good poem. Carole
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Lois, Be positive. Don't take the negative attitude that you will fail or the awful thought that you will fall. The photo is great, but dangerous looking. Maybe you should try rock climbing first!! Ha. But good poem. Carole
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
Comment from amahra
I can think of no metaphor for overcoming a difficult challenge than a mountain climb. Very nice and well written poem. Great job.
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I can think of no metaphor for overcoming a difficult challenge than a mountain climb. Very nice and well written poem. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
Comment from Delahay
This does sound like someone attempting to talk themselves into facing a difficult challenge. It would seem though that the person is not having much success in this endeavor.
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This does sound like someone attempting to talk themselves into facing a difficult challenge. It would seem though that the person is not having much success in this endeavor.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
Comment from ravenblack
" I will fail and I will fall" does not leave you any options which I think is the point. Whatever it is that you need to do, the consequences of it being done far outweigh necessity. But should you decide to climb, pack a parachute.
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" I will fail and I will fall" does not leave you any options which I think is the point. Whatever it is that you need to do, the consequences of it being done far outweigh necessity. But should you decide to climb, pack a parachute.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
Comment from dmt1967
I liked the repeat of the line 'I will fall.' Also the way it was written gave the picture of someone falling out of the sky. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Well done.
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I liked the repeat of the line 'I will fall.' Also the way it was written gave the picture of someone falling out of the sky. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
Comment from patcelaw
It is good to take you time if a challenge is hard, but once you know you can do it, just go for it, might be you will be surprised that the challenge was not as difficult as you thought. Patricia
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It is good to take you time if a challenge is hard, but once you know you can do it, just go for it, might be you will be surprised that the challenge was not as difficult as you thought. Patricia
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from lalajovanoski
This was a very intriguing read!!! Very captivating, clever, and inspiring
- I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery
This was a very intriguing read!!! Very captivating, clever, and inspiring
I relating to this tremendously,
Very well composed!! Flowed very smooth
great contest entry!!
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This was a very intriguing read!!! Very captivating, clever, and inspiring
- I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery
This was a very intriguing read!!! Very captivating, clever, and inspiring
I relating to this tremendously,
Very well composed!! Flowed very smooth
great contest entry!!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Loanna,
I like your free verse poem, it expresses very well the challenges we face. They can be daunting and scary to take on. But when we do we prove something special to ourselves.
Well done, Good luck in the contest. Mary
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Hi Loanna,
I like your free verse poem, it expresses very well the challenges we face. They can be daunting and scary to take on. But when we do we prove something special to ourselves.
Well done, Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
Comment from Dawny53
Your words describe perfectly the challenges we feel as we try to improve or conquer something, and using the mountain as a metaphor for this defeat we often feel was the perfect choice for this poem. Nice presentation, the blue looks terrific!
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Your words describe perfectly the challenges we feel as we try to improve or conquer something, and using the mountain as a metaphor for this defeat we often feel was the perfect choice for this poem. Nice presentation, the blue looks terrific!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
