The Voice Inside Her
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Comment from dmt1967
I am glad I read your notes. Now your poem makes sense and shows me the error of my ways. I thought it was about a girl with a split personality. I am glad your friend found her voice and I hope she keeps it. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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I am glad I read your notes. Now your poem makes sense and shows me the error of my ways. I thought it was about a girl with a split personality. I am glad your friend found her voice and I hope she keeps it. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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thanks, dmt
jan
Comment from tfawcus
The repetition in your poem would perhaps work well if it were set to music. I can imagine it as being a good ostinato to a song. I'm glad that the storyline has a happy conclusion at this stage. Finding someone who can truly listen is strong healing medicine.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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The repetition in your poem would perhaps work well if it were set to music. I can imagine it as being a good ostinato to a song. I'm glad that the storyline has a happy conclusion at this stage. Finding someone who can truly listen is strong healing medicine.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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tfawcus - in my head, it is a song, and it does work as a song - I couldn't make it work as anything else - jan
