The Voice Inside Her
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Comment from ravenblack
I do like your repetition of the voice inside her, mainly for the reason that it highlights the part of the equation that was missing for so long, one that probably lead to her voice finally allowed release- " the person beside her/ listened to every word".
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I do like your repetition of the voice inside her, mainly for the reason that it highlights the part of the equation that was missing for so long, one that probably lead to her voice finally allowed release- " the person beside her/ listened to every word".
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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thanks, ravenblack
yes, that term just would not stop ringing in my ears
jan
Comment from Dean Kuch
The "voice inside her" certainly does a great deal of talking now, doesn't it, Rdfrdmom2?
I'm really not sure how to respond to this. It is a forever rambling, scrambling verse, falling helter-skelter down the page like a raging waterfall. It's definitely powerful and extremely unique. The overall presentation was highly creative. I just found myself wondering who the "her" was that the poem was referring to. I read your authors notes, however they do not shed much light about her.
Well done. ~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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The "voice inside her" certainly does a great deal of talking now, doesn't it, Rdfrdmom2?
I'm really not sure how to respond to this. It is a forever rambling, scrambling verse, falling helter-skelter down the page like a raging waterfall. It's definitely powerful and extremely unique. The overall presentation was highly creative. I just found myself wondering who the "her" was that the poem was referring to. I read your authors notes, however they do not shed much light about her.
Well done. ~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Dean:
Due to the confidential nature of my talk with this 21-year-old, I could not shed much light about her; but suffice it to say the reason I could write so deeply about her situation is that I have been where she is
Thank you for this very deep review
jan
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I understand completely. You are very welcome, it was still very well written.
Comment from Ronni
This is a riveting and heart searing poem of a woman struggling to
have her voice heard; and prolonged anguish and pain endured
feeling helpless and doomed. You have captured her battle for
her voice, ever so illustriously and compassionately. Glad to
note this young warrior found her voice at last....and pray she
keeps on voicing it.
Thanks for sharing...
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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This is a riveting and heart searing poem of a woman struggling to
have her voice heard; and prolonged anguish and pain endured
feeling helpless and doomed. You have captured her battle for
her voice, ever so illustriously and compassionately. Glad to
note this young warrior found her voice at last....and pray she
keeps on voicing it.
Thanks for sharing...
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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so far, so good, Ronni
jan
Comment from lalajovanoski
Wowwww!!!!I much enjoyed this fine, well composed, inspiring piece,
I very
Well done!
Very captivating!!
Thanks for sharing!!
this is an interesting poem - I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Wowwww!!!!I much enjoyed this fine, well composed, inspiring piece,
I very
Well done!
Very captivating!!
Thanks for sharing!!
this is an interesting poem - I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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thanks so much, lalajovanoski
jan
Comment from Dawny53
Very nice presentation, good strong lyrics that send a strong and hopeful message to the listener. Do you have music for this piece? I really enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Very nice presentation, good strong lyrics that send a strong and hopeful message to the listener. Do you have music for this piece? I really enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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not yet, Dawny53, but I am hoping to soon
jan
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is very lyrical and the flow throughout is maintained and good. The message is also so relevant - finding your voice. So important in so many ways but perhaps the most important is within the relationships we make. Taking a stand and being heard, acknowledged and appreciated.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Hi there,
This is very lyrical and the flow throughout is maintained and good. The message is also so relevant - finding your voice. So important in so many ways but perhaps the most important is within the relationships we make. Taking a stand and being heard, acknowledged and appreciated.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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giraffmang:
Being heard is one of the most important things in the world
jan
Comment from Drew Delaney
A great poem for someone who can't say what she would like. It's a tragedy when these things occur. For whatever reason, she cannot say what is inside her, I hope she will be free to express herself. Good writing. Drew
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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A great poem for someone who can't say what she would like. It's a tragedy when these things occur. For whatever reason, she cannot say what is inside her, I hope she will be free to express herself. Good writing. Drew
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Drew:
She is beginning to get there, a bit at a time.
jan
Comment from hifein
nice tribute from someone who noticed the change and heard the voice that was always there, but was silent. i like the echo like repetition at the end of each stanza.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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nice tribute from someone who noticed the change and heard the voice that was always there, but was silent. i like the echo like repetition at the end of each stanza.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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thanks, hifein
jan
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Rdfrdmom2
Sounds like your friend has some support when it comes to getting the writing muse going. Nicely said.
Patrick
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Hi Rdfrdmom2
Sounds like your friend has some support when it comes to getting the writing muse going. Nicely said.
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Patrick:
It's actually her talking muse we're getting going
jan
Comment from Alan K Pease
Interesting format that I don't remember seeing before. You use a technique of a song to reenforce the meaning of a predicament that finally resolves itself in a favorable way for your subject. Hope it lasts.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Interesting format that I don't remember seeing before. You use a technique of a song to reenforce the meaning of a predicament that finally resolves itself in a favorable way for your subject. Hope it lasts.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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thanks, again, for this exceptional rating
jan
