Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

What an inspiring song, Roy. Beautifully
expressed with wonderful imagery and
spiritual truth.
A lovely up-lifting poem for a Sunday.
Thanks for posting. Nancy

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Nancy, for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I'm surprised you said Jewish, because that is exactly what I was feeling reading it. Nice lyric with a steady beat for a song. Great job.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Amahra, for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

royowen, this is a wonderful work wherein which the narrator presents great images and displays a inspirational spirituality. It certainly has a musical lilt to it and it rolls from the lips upon reading.. jlsavell

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks So much, for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Afternoon, Poet

I enjoyed reading your poem of faith this afternoon. Your well chosen words create vivid imagery and sensory perception. Your abcb rhyme pattern words very well.

May I offer several suggestions for you to consider?

beyond Creation's bounty
beyond [and] the storm-tossed sea,
**having beyond twice in two short lines seems redundant.

the winds[,] His message carries
in thunder's roar He bides. [abides]

-Ray

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Ray, for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I like how you place your vision of the creator beyond the ravages of nature or our personal storms. As light, he rides the lightning but is beyond and above th thunders roar.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks , for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from juliesibs

Excellent

Nice, well written poem. The flow is good and the message is awesome. There is a few punctuation's missed in the second verse, but that is easily fixed. Or it could be intentional, your call. You did a great job, nice read.

Thank you, Julie

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks July for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from Ben Colder

Exceptional

While reading your magnificent poem, song, I was thinking about how James describes our life as, but a vapor all soon to disappear. Amazingly, our God ! Blessings to you.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Ben, our God is so big! Thanks, my friend for this wonderful review and comments, and great stars, your friendships blessings, Roy

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a great hymn that should be put to music. I am glad you noted "chorus," because a congregation or choir should sing this hymn out. This is a great adaptation of Psalm 104. Thank you for sharing and caring.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Sis, for this great review and perceptive comments, and kind words, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This is a very imagery driven work and shows God outside time and space dimensions as the being the key to hope and salvation. Love how you broaden the perspective in each of vs 1 & 2. Very smoothly achieved:
beyond Creation's bounty
beyond the storm-tossed sea,
outside of space and distance
reigns hope in majesty.
Excellent meter and rhyme. I can see how it works as a song.
Fine writing.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Mark for this insightful review and perceptive comments , I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Roy, this is beautifully written with a good message and even before I read your author notes I though it sounded song-like. I love Jewish music - that lovely sad sound that you cannot mistake when you hear it in some great songs by great composers of Jewish origin. Your poem flows beautifully and as usual it is a very lovely faith poem/song. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015

Thanks Dorothy, for this insightful review and perceptive comments , I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.