Ballad of Ferguson, MO.
a story poem about the white cop shooting black unarmed man.14 total reviews
Comment from Craigitar
I read through this several times and have to say, well done! Your research clears the fog away from the events. Very engaging, vivid and thoughtful piece. Solid rhythm, rhyme and imagery. A pleasure to read and a strong contender for the contest. Well worth six stars.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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I read through this several times and have to say, well done! Your research clears the fog away from the events. Very engaging, vivid and thoughtful piece. Solid rhythm, rhyme and imagery. A pleasure to read and a strong contender for the contest. Well worth six stars.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for your superlatives and six stars. Didn't win, but this kind of recognition from a peer is much more rewarding. Rod
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
good touches of alliteration
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
strong verb choices add to the action/drama/emotional intensity
You tell this tragic and controversial story well in good poetic form
Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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solid use of abab rhyming
good touches of alliteration
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
strong verb choices add to the action/drama/emotional intensity
You tell this tragic and controversial story well in good poetic form
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Brook, for sharing my poem and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dr. Nad
This is an excellent Story Poem writing prompt entry. There are multiple trails that sojourners in life have traversed. These young men took divergent paths that ended in confrontation. Your True story allows us to see the story from another perspective and for you to illustrate your poetic skills for a good purpose. May God Bless you
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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This is an excellent Story Poem writing prompt entry. There are multiple trails that sojourners in life have traversed. These young men took divergent paths that ended in confrontation. Your True story allows us to see the story from another perspective and for you to illustrate your poetic skills for a good purpose. May God Bless you
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Dr. Nad, for your very kind praise of my poem and my skills.
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You are very welcome,
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from patcelaw
No matter the anger you feel in a case like this, to burn your city just does not make any sense to me. I lived in So. California during the Watts riots and it didn't make any sense then nor does it nowe. I don't know the answer but violence is not the answer. IMHO
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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No matter the anger you feel in a case like this, to burn your city just does not make any sense to me. I lived in So. California during the Watts riots and it didn't make any sense then nor does it nowe. I don't know the answer but violence is not the answer. IMHO
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you for sharing my poem and your commentary.
Comment from Charlene0513
That is the problem nowadays, anyone that wears a badge or holds great distinction in the higher offices seem to get off as they all bind together to protect their own kind regardless whether he is to blame or not.
Many riots break out with looting or petitions or walking forward for a cause has and probably always will unless and until we get some honest people to protect the innocence of a town, city or even country.
Charlene
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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That is the problem nowadays, anyone that wears a badge or holds great distinction in the higher offices seem to get off as they all bind together to protect their own kind regardless whether he is to blame or not.
Many riots break out with looting or petitions or walking forward for a cause has and probably always will unless and until we get some honest people to protect the innocence of a town, city or even country.
Charlene
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you for sharing my poem.
Comment from Tatarka2
I would give this a 6, but I don't have any left. This was a perfect depiction, in rhyme, of an important event. I thought you did the situation justice in a very lyrical and readable way. I hope this does very well in the contest. It deserves to win, I think.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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I would give this a 6, but I don't have any left. This was a perfect depiction, in rhyme, of an important event. I thought you did the situation justice in a very lyrical and readable way. I hope this does very well in the contest. It deserves to win, I think.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for this heartening endorsement. I truly appreciate your kind words.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a brave and amazing poem on the terrible riots in Ferguson, MO. I would rate you six stars if I had them. Citizens are being held hostage to the race baiters, looters, and anarchists who destroy their own cities. Sharpton has the ear of Obama and Holder who butt in where they should toss this rebel rouser out on his ear. I agree that MLK truly wanted harmony--as do all of us. Thank you for writing this terrific piece.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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This is a brave and amazing poem on the terrible riots in Ferguson, MO. I would rate you six stars if I had them. Citizens are being held hostage to the race baiters, looters, and anarchists who destroy their own cities. Sharpton has the ear of Obama and Holder who butt in where they should toss this rebel rouser out on his ear. I agree that MLK truly wanted harmony--as do all of us. Thank you for writing this terrific piece.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing and the ringing endorsement of my poem.
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Your poem got my vote. Not only for skill to write it, but also for common sense. It's so sadly lacking these days.
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Thank you!
Comment from thomdble
A very courageous, well penned story. The flow was fast paced and easy to read. Thank you for sharing this insightful, fluent accounting of the happenings of that terrible day in Ferguson. I have read this many times since discovering it. You have a gift. Use it.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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A very courageous, well penned story. The flow was fast paced and easy to read. Thank you for sharing this insightful, fluent accounting of the happenings of that terrible day in Ferguson. I have read this many times since discovering it. You have a gift. Use it.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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I am delighted you liked my story well enough to read multiple times. I am also thrilled to receive this six star rating. You've made the many hours of researching/writing all worthwhile. Thank you!
Comment from alf collier
Hi there. This poem is brilliant. I loved the fact it is based on an incredibly topical incident and yet remains impartial to the outcome. A very worthy entry to the contest, I think, alf
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Hi there. This poem is brilliant. I loved the fact it is based on an incredibly topical incident and yet remains impartial to the outcome. A very worthy entry to the contest, I think, alf
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much for this splendid review, alf. I am thrilled you think this topical poem is worthy of six stars.
Comment from Dawny53
An excellent entry. Your rhyme scheme was right on the money, no forcing and I so appreciate that. You kept up a perfect rhythm throughout the entire piece, I never stumbled once. All in all it was a great read, good luck to you in this contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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An excellent entry. Your rhyme scheme was right on the money, no forcing and I so appreciate that. You kept up a perfect rhythm throughout the entire piece, I never stumbled once. All in all it was a great read, good luck to you in this contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Dawny53, for such positive feedback and your best wishes. I am especially pleased you liked the poem's rhythm.
