Final Words
Acrostic abbaa cddcc15 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
The message in this poem is so important to remember, if we have something that needs to be said to a loved one, say it before it is too late and you never have another chance to say what needs to be said. Always tell a loved one before they leave your side that you love them and then if something happens to take the loved one away, there won't be regrets.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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The message in this poem is so important to remember, if we have something that needs to be said to a loved one, say it before it is too late and you never have another chance to say what needs to be said. Always tell a loved one before they leave your side that you love them and then if something happens to take the loved one away, there won't be regrets.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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So very true, my friend. I kid my wife for insisting on "I love you" every time we part, but oh how I will one day be thankful that we both said it! Well said. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Selina Stambi
Spirits run free, but they've no hands to hold ... so desolate and sad.
Winter's chill embraces, but I'm not cold
Only these few last breaths to sigh me home ... bleak, but impactful. Author notes: yes, I agree.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Spirits run free, but they've no hands to hold ... so desolate and sad.
Winter's chill embraces, but I'm not cold
Only these few last breaths to sigh me home ... bleak, but impactful. Author notes: yes, I agree.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much. Yes, rather bleak. :) But if it moves anyone to act sooner than worth it. I got thrashed and rightfully so. Hahaha! mikey
Comment from Charlene0513
Dark foreboding words of disdain and despair
to cast off to their lover when they are at death's
door and want or need any comfort or peace from
them; a life of misery when they were together.
Charlene
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Dark foreboding words of disdain and despair
to cast off to their lover when they are at death's
door and want or need any comfort or peace from
them; a life of misery when they were together.
Charlene
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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A very insightful take. So often an attempt to reconcile things at the last minute. It doesn't work that way. Thanks for the thoughtful comments, mikey
Comment from Acquired Taste
Excellent phrase: few last breaths to sigh me home -
Terrific two stanza - Artwork is wonderful and somehow warrants additional discussion as it relates - at least for me. Good wishes for the contest. AT=/
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Excellent phrase: few last breaths to sigh me home -
Terrific two stanza - Artwork is wonderful and somehow warrants additional discussion as it relates - at least for me. Good wishes for the contest. AT=/
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
Exceptional in every way. Restricted to two stanzas you step out of the box with a rhymed acrostic. Excellent meaningful content.
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Exceptional in every way. Restricted to two stanzas you step out of the box with a rhymed acrostic. Excellent meaningful content.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from BeasPeas
Interesting. Pride seems to keep people from revealing true feelings, but words are useless when spoken too late. I agree with your assessment to speak those words now. Nice content and flow to your acrostic.
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Interesting. Pride seems to keep people from revealing true feelings, but words are useless when spoken too late. I agree with your assessment to speak those words now. Nice content and flow to your acrostic.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from kellyolsen
This is a beautifull written poem that is raw and sombre. I've been a funeral director for many years and have heard this sentiment too many times, and have seen the situation all too often when old aquaintances tell everyone at a funeral that they were so close to the deceased, when they never took any time to be a friend when they were living. I don't know why this is. If one doesn't pay the attention to someone in their living years, don't bother them in death. Great job with this rhyming acrostic. Good luck.
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This is a beautifull written poem that is raw and sombre. I've been a funeral director for many years and have heard this sentiment too many times, and have seen the situation all too often when old aquaintances tell everyone at a funeral that they were so close to the deceased, when they never took any time to be a friend when they were living. I don't know why this is. If one doesn't pay the attention to someone in their living years, don't bother them in death. Great job with this rhyming acrostic. Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a short, two-stanza poem with good advice and a poignant theme. I particularly like this line: "...these last two breaths to sigh me home." Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a short, two-stanza poem with good advice and a poignant theme. I particularly like this line: "...these last two breaths to sigh me home." Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from penmythoughts
Very powerful artwork and formatting, unquestionably a worthwhile work and the rhyme scheme is unique,subtle sarcasm is appreciable.The author's notes are helpful as well, nice closure.
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Very powerful artwork and formatting, unquestionably a worthwhile work and the rhyme scheme is unique,subtle sarcasm is appreciable.The author's notes are helpful as well, nice closure.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
Comment from royowen
I know who this mystery poet is, great acrostic, final words, brilliantly worded, and it flows beautifully, the rhyming is befitting of the uneven nature of the poem, but a great mystical feel to personified in the artwork, attractive entry. Blessings, Roy.
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I know who this mystery poet is, great acrostic, final words, brilliantly worded, and it flows beautifully, the rhyming is befitting of the uneven nature of the poem, but a great mystical feel to personified in the artwork, attractive entry. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
