Hell Times Three
A true story about my personnel trips to hell5 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This compelling account will immediately endear you to the reader. Sadly, too many will be able to identify with your plight. This is a tragic foreshadowing: "Roy mentioned he wanted to go deer hunting."
You are right. We do not have to wait to we die to find hell or have hell find us.
I send my deep condolences and healing on all levels if you will receive it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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This compelling account will immediately endear you to the reader. Sadly, too many will be able to identify with your plight. This is a tragic foreshadowing: "Roy mentioned he wanted to go deer hunting."
You are right. We do not have to wait to we die to find hell or have hell find us.
I send my deep condolences and healing on all levels if you will receive it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you. Wow, you went back a long way to find that story. I bet the grammar is atrocious in that one. Lol. It was one of the early writings I put on FanStory, and I had forgotten most of the grammar I learned in school. Maybe someday I will go back and edit all those old stories. Thanks again for reading those long ago writings.
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Grammar is not necessary to satisfy people on here. It is more important to vent.
Comment from Ashar001
First of all: In my personal opinion your experiences go even beyond hell. And I admire your courage to keep on breathing in and out.
Concerning the writing: I very much like the alternation between the factual description (weather, cleaning the truck, dates and years) and those beautiful sentences you use to describe your emotions.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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First of all: In my personal opinion your experiences go even beyond hell. And I admire your courage to keep on breathing in and out.
Concerning the writing: I very much like the alternation between the factual description (weather, cleaning the truck, dates and years) and those beautiful sentences you use to describe your emotions.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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It was hard to keep breathing for a while. The last time I truly considered not going on anymore. I mean what was left to live for? Somehow I kept going and am still here today a much older and sadder person. Thank you for your understanding.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
prettybluebirds:
I cannot imagine even losing one child, much less three
in such different ways. It is simply unnatural for a mother
to have to bury her child, no matter what the age. I am
amazed you have been able to maintain your sanity and I admire your strength.
jan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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prettybluebirds:
I cannot imagine even losing one child, much less three
in such different ways. It is simply unnatural for a mother
to have to bury her child, no matter what the age. I am
amazed you have been able to maintain your sanity and I admire your strength.
jan
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your caring. It has been extremely difficult to keep my sanity at times. This is one of the reasons I have started writing. I cried so hard while writing that story it"s a wonder any of the spelling is right. Thank you again.
Comment from giraffmang
Please go back and read the rules of the competition. The sentence is "Hell found me". it is not to be altered or added to. You might want to think about altering your first line as you run the risk of disqualification. people have been disqualified for less.
your story is very emotive and well written but it will not be considered with the current first sentence.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Please go back and read the rules of the competition. The sentence is "Hell found me". it is not to be altered or added to. You might want to think about altering your first line as you run the risk of disqualification. people have been disqualified for less.
your story is very emotive and well written but it will not be considered with the current first sentence.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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thanks for the info
Comment from Sam Mendonca
What a emotional writing post with such deep emotions showing in the writer's wording.
I really don't have words to describe the feeling it left me with other than sad.
Suggestion-
Leave a space between the paragraphs, making the story easier to read. (Smile)
(into the deepest pits of hell.
My son Roy and I had been working on a dairy farm since Roy's father and I had divorced in )
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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What a emotional writing post with such deep emotions showing in the writer's wording.
I really don't have words to describe the feeling it left me with other than sad.
Suggestion-
Leave a space between the paragraphs, making the story easier to read. (Smile)
(into the deepest pits of hell.
My son Roy and I had been working on a dairy farm since Roy's father and I had divorced in )
Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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all help appreciated
