Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an excellent haiku suite. I particularly like the freshness of the first haiku with the April shower on the tin roof "pinging" in the rain. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015

thank you for the kind review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I really like the strong appeal to the sense of sound with all that pinging and buzzing and strikes of thunder :-)
good alliteration in summer sizzle sacred
good assonance of long I sounds in inside hive
This is just delightful with its lighthearted mood and excellent sensory appeal :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from donaldcolson

Excellent

A great job in following the format but the structure also pushes in the direction of some awkward combinations e.g. engages summer sizzle. don

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Busy bees keep right on laboring no matter the weather. I love the sound of rain on a tin roof. No problems sleeping to the rhythm. I wish you well with a fine entry that meets all the rules of this great contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Oh, very well done, Dallas. I love the images of Spring and nature coming to life. Each suite merges well with the others. My favorite:

'the roll of thunder
engages summer sizzle
sacred drumming...'

That last line, as you might guess, especially appealed to me. Good luck with your excellent contest entry!

Bev

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

Thank you, Bev.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I relished the way you engaged many of our senses in this trio of haiku. Your addition of alliteration intensified the description also. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

Thanks, fro reviewing. I gambled on the last line in number three. Many may not remember the song "Taste of honey"

reply by Joan E. on 20-Jan-2015

Being of a certain age, I remember the song well! Again, good luck in the competition with your splendid haiku suite. Cheers- Joan

Comment from MSJVClarke

Good

This was a good poem. The syllable count appears to be correct as, is your verse count. However, I did not get the connection to the title or I did not see that last verse fitting.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

Musical compositions...and I gambled on" taste of honey". It was a song, probably too many years ago for some to recognize. It equals a double entendre. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

These are very good Dallas. Each one
gives the reader a clear picture then
hits them with a clever satori for pure enjoyment.
I wish you the best in the contest. Nancy

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

Thanks, Nancy. Think I may have blown it with Taste of honey. song is too old to be recognized.

reply by nancyjam on 20-Jan-2015

Not for me! ( lol )

reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015

thank you for the kind review.