Choosing the light
contest Darkness11 total reviews
Comment from thunderrumble
Insightful piece. I enjoyed your take on a difficult subject.
As for suggestions, as a reader interested in this material, it might be helpful if you could expand a bit on exactly what material helped you and why it worked for you (or your character here as the case may be). The three years of improvement would seem to be the most valuable part of the story.
Again, nice work.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Insightful piece. I enjoyed your take on a difficult subject.
As for suggestions, as a reader interested in this material, it might be helpful if you could expand a bit on exactly what material helped you and why it worked for you (or your character here as the case may be). The three years of improvement would seem to be the most valuable part of the story.
Again, nice work.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks for the great review and helpful suggestions, I appreciate it.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Excellent awareness of depression and darkness. Dr. Caroline Leaf is a good resource too. I would have written in this contest but I was traveling. You said what I would have so I am glad to read your story with a hot cup of tea! Have a joyfilled new year. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Excellent awareness of depression and darkness. Dr. Caroline Leaf is a good resource too. I would have written in this contest but I was traveling. You said what I would have so I am glad to read your story with a hot cup of tea! Have a joyfilled new year. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks for the excellent review and the encouraging comments, I appreciate it.
Comment from kellyolsen
You did a great job at writing this informative piece for your entry, and I was educated about depression. You brought me into your world and helped me to understand a mental illness that I personally have never suffered from. That said, it is a personal essay, not a story, as the prompt called for. If I'm mistaken in my understanding of what the contest was calling for, I apologize. I'd love to read one of your stories; you're obviously a good writer. Nothing really technically wrong, as I can see. Cheers!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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You did a great job at writing this informative piece for your entry, and I was educated about depression. You brought me into your world and helped me to understand a mental illness that I personally have never suffered from. That said, it is a personal essay, not a story, as the prompt called for. If I'm mistaken in my understanding of what the contest was calling for, I apologize. I'd love to read one of your stories; you're obviously a good writer. Nothing really technically wrong, as I can see. Cheers!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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Thanks for your review and comments, I do agree with you about it being a story, I just continued on with the sentence that was suggested.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Good points. I think you may be right. Although, I believe the things that happened to us in our younger years affect our being normal. As to deficiencies, I think its a rip off. Not sure, but I think so. Drew
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Good points. I think you may be right. Although, I believe the things that happened to us in our younger years affect our being normal. As to deficiencies, I think its a rip off. Not sure, but I think so. Drew
Comment Written 19-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Thanks Drew for your review and your comments.
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Choosing the light". You have written an extremely intelligent and interesting essay. You have describe a beautiful attitude to possess. Good luck in the contest. Carole
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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To the author of "Choosing the light". You have written an extremely intelligent and interesting essay. You have describe a beautiful attitude to possess. Good luck in the contest. Carole
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Thanks Carole for the review and excellent comments.
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a very informative essay. You're right that a lot of people suffer from depression and don't know what to do to escape it.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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This is a very informative essay. You're right that a lot of people suffer from depression and don't know what to do to escape it.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Judy for the excellent review.
Comment from adewpearl
it is an illness, that it can trick
illness, is that it can
One of my older sisters has suffered from depression for 55 years, and I know all too well those folks who think a person can just "pull herself together and get over it" - you convey that well
Your saying this is a choice, that you choose to see the light, seems to run counter to your discussing how this is a chemical imbalance and people who suffer from this disease can't just pull themselves out of it? Why aren't these contradictory?
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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it is an illness, that it can trick
illness, is that it can
One of my older sisters has suffered from depression for 55 years, and I know all too well those folks who think a person can just "pull herself together and get over it" - you convey that well
Your saying this is a choice, that you choose to see the light, seems to run counter to your discussing how this is a chemical imbalance and people who suffer from this disease can't just pull themselves out of it? Why aren't these contradictory?
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Yes I see your point. It does take awareness to the problem, and medication, and then a technique for getting better. It is a chemical that is depleted, but can be replaced with the medication, In many cases, it is not needed after a period. Cognitive therapy is also a treatment. Everyone is different. Help is out there and that is the key. Thanks for taking the time to review.
Comment from kateabb
This is such a candid piece. I liked best the parts about the depressed person not wanting anyone to know. so very true.
What would really make this effective is the HOW of letting yourself see the light, not let the depression in. That is the magic so many seek.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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This is such a candid piece. I liked best the parts about the depressed person not wanting anyone to know. so very true.
What would really make this effective is the HOW of letting yourself see the light, not let the depression in. That is the magic so many seek.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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I agree, thanks for your comments and great review.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Writer,
Your story is very well done, like something cooked to perfection. I did notice the first line in the second part of your story starts with Most people who suffer from depression had had (should the first had be have?) Other than that it's great. I enjoyed the read.
Kat
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Hi Writer,
Your story is very well done, like something cooked to perfection. I did notice the first line in the second part of your story starts with Most people who suffer from depression had had (should the first had be have?) Other than that it's great. I enjoyed the read.
Kat
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thanks for the excellent review, and for pointing out the typo. I appreciate it.
Comment from RodG
I like the Speaker's candor as he discusses the causes of depression (even his) and explains how he deals with it. I would like more focus on the "darkness" itself. Does it come all at once? In phases? Does it make the Speaker incapable of action? I have been extremely fortunate in my lifetime, never having suffered the debilitating effects of depression for long. I just wish to know more so I might empathize.
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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I like the Speaker's candor as he discusses the causes of depression (even his) and explains how he deals with it. I would like more focus on the "darkness" itself. Does it come all at once? In phases? Does it make the Speaker incapable of action? I have been extremely fortunate in my lifetime, never having suffered the debilitating effects of depression for long. I just wish to know more so I might empathize.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thanks for your review and your comments.
