I'm Sorry
Just one of my many imperfections30 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
effective use of repetition/listing to emphasize the speaker's point and show how bad this habit of always apologizing is and good use of illustrative examples
Brooke
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solid use of abcb rhyming
effective use of repetition/listing to emphasize the speaker's point and show how bad this habit of always apologizing is and good use of illustrative examples
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
No one can be wrong all the time. A person needs to be happy with success and only apologize when needed. It sounds like a little self-respect is needed here.
Just take things you think are good when other people do them and not apologize when you do them.
It is an apt piece or artwork for the poem.
The repetition seems to give the idea of shame.
Keep writing
dragonpeot
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No one can be wrong all the time. A person needs to be happy with success and only apologize when needed. It sounds like a little self-respect is needed here.
Just take things you think are good when other people do them and not apologize when you do them.
It is an apt piece or artwork for the poem.
The repetition seems to give the idea of shame.
Keep writing
dragonpeot
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from Belinda
This is an good entry to the contest. There are people like this and not you, I'm sure. They don't have what we call self esteem, and it's really a sorry case. Good luck with the contest.
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This is an good entry to the contest. There are people like this and not you, I'm sure. They don't have what we call self esteem, and it's really a sorry case. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from Walu Feral
This is a very well written little piece with a beautiful flow and rhyme. I also think that it is a great entry into this contest and I wish you all the luck in the world with it. Cheers Fez
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This is a very well written little piece with a beautiful flow and rhyme. I also think that it is a great entry into this contest and I wish you all the luck in the world with it. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
We all know people who are very much like the woman in your well written poem and entry for the I AM NOT PERFECT contest, Poet 'X'. They are constantly apologizing for things they have no business apologizing for. Saying "I'm sorry" on behalf of parents, spouses and friends, when all the while, it's not their responsibility to do so. That responsibility should fall squarely on the shoulders of the one committing the offense.
A well rhymed poem with a smooth, even tempo. You should do very well in the contest.
Good luck.
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We all know people who are very much like the woman in your well written poem and entry for the I AM NOT PERFECT contest, Poet 'X'. They are constantly apologizing for things they have no business apologizing for. Saying "I'm sorry" on behalf of parents, spouses and friends, when all the while, it's not their responsibility to do so. That responsibility should fall squarely on the shoulders of the one committing the offense.
A well rhymed poem with a smooth, even tempo. You should do very well in the contest.
Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from scd41
Saying 'I am sorry' often may appear to be a sign of politeness. But saying it without rhyme or reason could be a sign of lack of self-confidence. You have intelligently chosen this theme for 'I am not perfect' poem entry for the contest. The lines give good idea about such a flawed personality. Best of luck for the contest.
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Saying 'I am sorry' often may appear to be a sign of politeness. But saying it without rhyme or reason could be a sign of lack of self-confidence. You have intelligently chosen this theme for 'I am not perfect' poem entry for the contest. The lines give good idea about such a flawed personality. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from Eric1
This is a really good entry for this 'I am not perfect' competition, this poem describes lots of sensitive people out there who feel inadequate and underrated and always feel the need to say sorry, great free verse and I wish you lots of luck my friend.
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This is a really good entry for this 'I am not perfect' competition, this poem describes lots of sensitive people out there who feel inadequate and underrated and always feel the need to say sorry, great free verse and I wish you lots of luck my friend.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from CR Delport
The thing with something like that is, after a while it becomes a natural reaction. This is very well written. Good luck with the prompt entry.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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The thing with something like that is, after a while it becomes a natural reaction. This is very well written. Good luck with the prompt entry.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
I liked this poem because it is something that I as well as a few people I know can definitely relate to. I think it is the effect of a lot of criticism in childhood or youth. One loses a bit of self-esteem and feels inadequate in certain situations. Thanks for sharing this and best wishes for the contest!
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I liked this poem because it is something that I as well as a few people I know can definitely relate to. I think it is the effect of a lot of criticism in childhood or youth. One loses a bit of self-esteem and feels inadequate in certain situations. Thanks for sharing this and best wishes for the contest!
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
Comment from JPilcher
This is beyond just phenomenal. Now, I've called a handful things on FanStory phenomenal - but I've yet to call them beyond that - until now. Now, your overall presentation (image, background/font color choices) - all very much phenomenal. Your words, beyond amazing. Combined = Beyond phenomenal.
WOW. I'm not sure if it's because I know that person (or even persons) that tend to do this, or if it's maybe that I now finally know why... Maybe a combo of the two?? What I do know though, is that I have a friend that says she does it out of habit - but I never believed that was all there was to it. Something didn't sit right w/ me.
What you did here, is you made something make sense that I could never make sense of - BAM!!! This should be framed & up on so many walls - period. <3
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This is beyond just phenomenal. Now, I've called a handful things on FanStory phenomenal - but I've yet to call them beyond that - until now. Now, your overall presentation (image, background/font color choices) - all very much phenomenal. Your words, beyond amazing. Combined = Beyond phenomenal.
WOW. I'm not sure if it's because I know that person (or even persons) that tend to do this, or if it's maybe that I now finally know why... Maybe a combo of the two?? What I do know though, is that I have a friend that says she does it out of habit - but I never believed that was all there was to it. Something didn't sit right w/ me.
What you did here, is you made something make sense that I could never make sense of - BAM!!! This should be framed & up on so many walls - period. <3
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
