"OUT OF THE BLUE"
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "~The Awakening~ part 5"A book of short stories.
16 total reviews
Comment from Michaelk
The worst part about reading this chapter is I kept telling myself, 'He can make it, he can escape.' But I was only fooling myself. Kudos to you for writing this in such a way that I feel like I'm right on the battlefield, rooting for Richard to come through. Also excellent job to take such a maligned character and make him not only believable but also someone that you cheer for, that you want to win.
I found myself wanting to rip apart that coward Henry for this injustice. Once again good writing to evoke such emotions.
Simply excellent.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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The worst part about reading this chapter is I kept telling myself, 'He can make it, he can escape.' But I was only fooling myself. Kudos to you for writing this in such a way that I feel like I'm right on the battlefield, rooting for Richard to come through. Also excellent job to take such a maligned character and make him not only believable but also someone that you cheer for, that you want to win.
I found myself wanting to rip apart that coward Henry for this injustice. Once again good writing to evoke such emotions.
Simply excellent.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Thank you Michaelk, for your kind review.
Yes when I did the background work it became obvious to me that the traditional view that we had been taught at school of Richard being a demented cripple was way off the mark. He was neither demented nor a cripple.
It seems so unfair when you have King Henry VII who by all accounts was a terrible character escaping the accusations and Richard taking the blame.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed. I appreciate you taking the time.
:) Mel.
Comment from juliesibs
This is awesome. The history is spot on and telling of the tale is wonderful. I am a history buff and your rendition of this is awesome.
Thanks for a great read. Julie
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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This is awesome. The history is spot on and telling of the tale is wonderful. I am a history buff and your rendition of this is awesome.
Thanks for a great read. Julie
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you Julie, for your kind review and reading my story.
I appreciate and am pleased that you enjoyed ~The Awakening~.
:) Mel.
Comment from emrpoems
Well written chapter. I can see that you did a lot of research on Richard 111 and appreciate your effort to bring this to the readers
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Well written chapter. I can see that you did a lot of research on Richard 111 and appreciate your effort to bring this to the readers
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you emprpoems, for your kind review and taking the time.
I must admit I found the research fascinating we have learned a lot about Richard III in recent years. Although there is still a lot to learn. If only he COULD talk. LOL.
:) Mel.
Comment from giraffmang
Another well written chapter bringing some history to the masses in an accessible manner. An interesting and intriguing way of conveying the time period.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Another well written chapter bringing some history to the masses in an accessible manner. An interesting and intriguing way of conveying the time period.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you giraffmang, for your kind review and communicating your thoughts about the writing.
Most appreciated.
:) Mel.
Comment from Dopeless Hopefiend
I find history so interesting, and this was such an enjoyable way to visit it. Well done here. The red font threw me off a bit at first, but my eyes adjusted, and it was well worth it.
Great job. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading!
-D.H
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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I find history so interesting, and this was such an enjoyable way to visit it. Well done here. The red font threw me off a bit at first, but my eyes adjusted, and it was well worth it.
Great job. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading!
-D.H
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you Dopeless, for your kind review.
I chose the brick color instead of red, for that reason.
I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my writing.
Much appreciated.
:) Mel.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are doing a wonderful job describing this time period. To be honest, I know very little about it. I was a horrible history student, but you are putting in a way that I can understand it. Thank you.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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You are doing a wonderful job describing this time period. To be honest, I know very little about it. I was a horrible history student, but you are putting in a way that I can understand it. Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you Barbara, for your kind review.
Richard III has been cast in the past as an evil hunchback that murdered the two princes in the tower.
The books that I list, show a very different person. I became intrigued by his story and have done a considerable amount of research. There is much more to the story that space forbids the inclusion of.
I appreciated as always you taking the time.
:) Mel.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Nice ending lines.
WITHN TIME FOR DISCOURSE TO SOOTHE MY TRAGIC SOUL- TIME- TIME- THIS I HAVE IN ABUNDANCE, AN ETERNITY, OF-TIME.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Excellent chapter. Nice ending lines.
WITHN TIME FOR DISCOURSE TO SOOTHE MY TRAGIC SOUL- TIME- TIME- THIS I HAVE IN ABUNDANCE, AN ETERNITY, OF-TIME.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you thee-name, for your kind review. Much appreciated.
:) Mel.
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Ekim777
I like your turn of phrase; I'm sure Shakespeare would have thought like-wise but I don't warm to your interpretation of respectability laden on Richard. Killing was synonymous with gaining ground and meeting with success. But intrinsically, Richard was physically deformed, mentally perverted and generally a monster in regal clothing. He simply held life cheap, including his own. He symbolized the dark shadow of deformity behind his vanity and arrogance. Interestingly enough fell at his feet. ()I believe he had a club foot. I like his death rattle; "A horse, a horse; my kingdom for a horse. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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I like your turn of phrase; I'm sure Shakespeare would have thought like-wise but I don't warm to your interpretation of respectability laden on Richard. Killing was synonymous with gaining ground and meeting with success. But intrinsically, Richard was physically deformed, mentally perverted and generally a monster in regal clothing. He simply held life cheap, including his own. He symbolized the dark shadow of deformity behind his vanity and arrogance. Interestingly enough fell at his feet. ()I believe he had a club foot. I like his death rattle; "A horse, a horse; my kingdom for a horse. -Ekim777
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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First of all thank you for reading my story.
His skeleton was recovered in 2012 and showed him to be only mildly disabled. 'ALL' you have quoted is political spin and most untrue. You quote from Shakespheare's play written more than a hundred years after Richard's death.
I have researched into his background and find him to be nothing like he is made out to be. We are all entitled to our opinions but if you were to read one of the latest books about him, then I think you would be surprised.
I started off with opinions simular to yours.
In battle he was courageous and sold his life dearly, even the Tudors admitted that. This reminds me of a few words by Winston Churchill:- 'Courage is the first of all human qualities because it is the quality that guarantees all others.'
Regards Mel.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
a well written chapter, Mel, holding the
interest throughout -- needing a little
tweaking here and there:
squire George - Cap S for Squire
dance of it's own - its
He has pledged that he will if able[,](to) make donations
This has shocked me to the core[,](;) my preconceptions have changed in a similar fashion - HERE you're joining two sentences, thus a semi-colan needs to replace the comma
Margaret
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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a well written chapter, Mel, holding the
interest throughout -- needing a little
tweaking here and there:
squire George - Cap S for Squire
dance of it's own - its
He has pledged that he will if able[,](to) make donations
This has shocked me to the core[,](;) my preconceptions have changed in a similar fashion - HERE you're joining two sentences, thus a semi-colan needs to replace the comma
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you Margaret, for your kind review and your help.
Much appreciated as always.
:) Mel.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 2 of the book "OUT OF THE BLUE" ~The Final Battle~
"~The Awakening~ part 5" This is another excellent chapter you have created here about King Richard 111. Well done again.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Chapter 2 of the book "OUT OF THE BLUE" ~The Final Battle~
"~The Awakening~ part 5" This is another excellent chapter you have created here about King Richard 111. Well done again.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you chasnnov, for taking the time to review my story.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Much appreciated.
:) Mel.
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You are most welcome, Mel.
