Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

A well written poem, about making a quilt. I have friends who make these and they are so creative and beautiful. they can be made personal for family heirlooms too.

I am sure she will be very pleased with your poem.

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks so much for the read and review Mary. I haven't the eyes or the patience to quilt, but I was happy to be able to help my sister get the message across that the quilt was for using and living, not to be tucked away somewhere for safekeeping. - Wendy

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are creative, descriptive and fun! The artwork compliments the theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks for the read and review. I had fun with this one. - Wendy

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

I say this poem fills the bill my friend. If the child doesn't get attached to it on her own having it with her where ever she goes will make it comforting like a well loved Teddy Bear. Who was it? Lioness on Charlie Brown that had the snuggle quilt or blanket? LOL Well Done Rose. Nancy

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks so much Nancy for the kind words. I enjoyed picturing Charlotte's travels through my own childhood eyes. I never had a blankie, but I had a much abused stuffed Bozo the Clown that was my constant companion. He suffered through many a tea party and around the world on the swing set. I do hope that Charlotte's Mommy doesn't "treasure" it so much that it becomes decor. - Wendy

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Rose,

What a charming poem you created to go with your sister's quilt. I'm sure the sentiments you expressed were those running through her mind as she stitched. Very nicely done.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks for taking the time to read and review my words. My sister was very pleased (but she loves me) so I gave it a test run here. I'm glad you think it is a go. - Wendy

Comment from Leineco

Exceptional

I thought this poem was so enchanting! What a great way of envisaging what wonders are to come for a newborn child. To spin hopes and dreams out of whole cloth :-)

But then I read your author notes. . .and I was blown away! Like your sister, I too make specialty, hand made embroidered baby blankets for special friends. Like your sister, I was always afraid they were too pretty to actually be used (in most cases the parents did exactly what your sister feared. . .they hung them on the wall, not wanting to risk damaging them). I wish I had had your poem handy to attach to them :-) It's the perfect accompaniment for such a gift, expressing exactly what I hoped the parents would understand. Wonderful write!!

(6 stars) = EXCEPTIONAL. I would buy this book. Excellent all around writing - both content and construction captivated me thoroughly.

(In fact, with your permission I just may print this out and save it for the next time I am moved to create a personalized blanket :-)

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

I would be honored to have my poem accompany any of your quilted creations. I am also particularly honored by your gift of a six after reading your take on the reviewing system. As I entered this site a few years ago, I was more inclined to be honest in star strewing. Ah, the hate mail! These days I just shy away from really awful pieces( figuring there is so little hope there) and sometimes giving fours if I can succinctly define my reasons for doing so. Some of the time, I reluctantly give a five when I can't quite pinpoint my disappointment. But, I am inspired by your words and will do my best to assuage hurt feelings while assigning the true star quality of a piece. Thanks for the read and review. - Wendy

reply by Leineco on 15-Jan-2015

I have to admit, Wendy, I haven't had the guts to hand out any 3 stars yet (like you, I tend to just slide past them, I've been slammed pretty hard in the past for "being hateful", even though I thought I was diplomatically offering mentoring). I've been tempted twice to give a 1 star. . .but thought better of it - in truth I only consider the 6,5,4,3 as viable options. . .any thing else is an invitation for serious backlash.

Anyway, I'm real happy with the clarification I devised for myself between the 5 & 6 star ratings. The difference between 4 & 5 though. . .that's still working out to be harder than I expected. Especially, when the problem isn't so much technical as style/gut reaction driven. Nonetheless, I'm hoping I can stick to my guns a little longer this time and figure out how to address the intangibles :-) LOL

I really loved the poem. . .and I really am printing it out later today :-)

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

This should do it! The way you have woven the tales of childhood into your sister's quilt is just delightful but as nothing compared with the final lines:
"...each year shows
great spots of joy, huge happy stains
where childhood's memory remains". These lines are the real clincher! Shades of that ageless classic, 'The Velveteen Rabbit'.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Hi Tony, As always, I value your thoughts and impressions immensely. I thank you for taking the time to read and review the piece. I particularly appreciate your pointing out the part that spoke the loudest to you. It helps me become a better writer. - Wendy

Comment from zanya

Excellent

And what a beautiful result ! Filled to the brim 'where life unfolds and dreams are spilt' - wonderful imagery - it almost comes alive lol huge happy stains /where childhood's memory remains'.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thank you zanya for your kind words and for taking the time to read and review my poem. I also appreciate your notation of specific lines that called to you. It helps me to be a better writer. - Wendy

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

This is a great little poem to accompany a great little tale as told in the author's notes.

Well written and flowing. good word choice and language used. Great imagery and instruction.

Nicely done and I hope the quilt was used suitably.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my work. The gift will be given at the end of the month at a baby shower. I just took the poem for a little test drive to see if it worked. Thanks for letting me know your thoughts. - Wendy

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Excellent poem written in perfect meter supported by great rhymes.
You have joined together a charming array of childhood imagery and sentiments about the quilt to create a coherent and charming poem suited to the purpose described.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Good morning Mr. Mark and thank you for the read, review and kind words. I wanted to get some input before I put it in the box and I am now convinced that it will be well received. Congrats on your story too. - Wendy

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Rosehill - You have done what your sister asked you to do and written a really lovely poem to accompany the quilt she made. The quilt was meant to be used, not put on the shelf protected and unused because it was too lovely. Your poem says exactly what should happen to that quilt and it's written in good rhyming couplets. Such a good idea. That poem will be read by that child when she grows and the quilt, with its 'huge happy stains' will still be going strong. A joy to read. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015

Thanks Dorothy. I did want a test drive for the piece. I didn't want to be pushy, but hoped for cushy dreams for the little one. I appreciate your kind words. - Wendy