BLAZE: Angel from Hell
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Blaze Takes Charge"Blaze is one of Lucifer's demons, a fallen angel.
33 total reviews
Comment from Cajungirl
What a fantastic chapter. I bet those boys will think twice before they harm anyone else. Blaze is such a cleaver demon. A demon guardian of young children, how scary.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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What a fantastic chapter. I bet those boys will think twice before they harm anyone else. Blaze is such a cleaver demon. A demon guardian of young children, how scary.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Vergie. Glad you enjoyed it. When you have time to get to 43 and 44 where she goes into high gear, there's some really nasty stuff there, but the jerk deserves it all. :)
Comment from elgone
You've probably corrected any mistakes by now. Sorry I;m just getting caught up here. I've been revising books. I'm between book eight and nine now, so I took a break.
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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You've probably corrected any mistakes by now. Sorry I;m just getting caught up here. I've been revising books. I'm between book eight and nine now, so I took a break.
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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WOW! You work fassssst! How did you get so many books ready??? I'm really impressed. Thanks for taking some time to read. :)
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I started revising them back in November. I'm up to Book 9 now. The first seven were in fairly good shape. I worked them over after posting here on FS and getting feedback. I was going to self pub them and put them on Amazon but after Fried Windows was picked up I decided to submit them to Pandamoon. are likes the story, thinks it is a potential gold mine if the right people read them.
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A series of ten? You bet it's a gold mine! Just find the fans who will slurp them all up! And I know you can do it with your marketing skills. :)
Comment from Muffins
Of only all bullied children had someone like Blazr with a magic camera to right a wrong done to them.
The emotions, the fear & consequences are described in pinpoint details. Every line spoken represents the truth inner city, urban kids speak , a great chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Of only all bullied children had someone like Blazr with a magic camera to right a wrong done to them.
The emotions, the fear & consequences are described in pinpoint details. Every line spoken represents the truth inner city, urban kids speak , a great chapter.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2015
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Thank you so verrry much for the six stars, Muffins. Glad you liked the chapter. I really appreciate your comments. :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Blaze is learning a lot. I still really like this storyline and can't wait for more to come. You are doing a great job with this. I am wondering who Blaze will end up with, if anybody.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Blaze is learning a lot. I still really like this storyline and can't wait for more to come. You are doing a great job with this. I am wondering who Blaze will end up with, if anybody.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Barbara. New chapters begin tomorrow. I'm done with horror stories for a while. JUst wanted to try something new, but I'm ready to get back to BLaze now. :)
Comment from Fridayauthor
Very good chapter that reads easily with great dialog. Most enjoyable. She certainly takes care of business, doesn't she.
This was a nice little diversion from the main story line that was fun to read.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Very good chapter that reads easily with great dialog. Most enjoyable. She certainly takes care of business, doesn't she.
This was a nice little diversion from the main story line that was fun to read.
Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much. It's not really a diversion, since these girls will figure into the story in important ways. :)
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I finally got BLAZE edited and on Amazon. It's the last book with Lucifer as the Devil, the one where Blaze became an Earth Agent to take the place of Ginger. She turned the senator into a short clown, remember? Anyway, if you do and would like to leave a review,
Comment from Curly Girly
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Ha, this was a good read. It was enjoyable seeing the punks get their just desserts. I liked it when they froze and were pushed over. Wouldn't it be nice if this was always the case in real life?
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thanks a million for the sixer, Nicole. I'm glad you enjoyed the scene. I had fun writing it and wished I could do that for real. So I understand how you feel. :)
Comment from emrpoems
I love how you reintroduce the camera with all its power
Good use of non verbal communication
Good use of natural dialogue
What irony- A demon helping children and punishing the boys for being mischievous
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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I love how you reintroduce the camera with all its power
Good use of non verbal communication
Good use of natural dialogue
What irony- A demon helping children and punishing the boys for being mischievous
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Erica. Blaze was given the responsibility for the girls and she won't let her boss, Theo, down. Maybe at some point the girls will win her over, tho. :)
Comment from judiverse
Way to go, Blaze! She really goes after the punks who attack Julie and Kayla. With her camera work, she convinces the boys that she has the power, and I love it when she says she's a demon from hell and if they bother the kids again, she take them down with her. They've got to believe it. It was amazing that she went so far as to tell the principal the girls wouldn't be attending that school any more. Blaze is beginning to get a clue about children. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Way to go, Blaze! She really goes after the punks who attack Julie and Kayla. With her camera work, she convinces the boys that she has the power, and I love it when she says she's a demon from hell and if they bother the kids again, she take them down with her. They've got to believe it. It was amazing that she went so far as to tell the principal the girls wouldn't be attending that school any more. Blaze is beginning to get a clue about children. Great work. judi
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Judi. Blaze has the job of protecting the girls now, and she always does her job. She is concerned only that Theo needs them in good shape for the dance group. They may grow on her, however. We'll see. :)
Comment from Connie C
I want one of those cameras!! How fun for you to be able to just have that magic camera do anything, including the tormenting of the two teenage bullies. I like how you portray Blaze's perception of children. I keep wishing that maybe at some point she would even have some kind of feelings for these two little girls, but given her status, that is not likely to happen.
Great storytelling, my friend.
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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I want one of those cameras!! How fun for you to be able to just have that magic camera do anything, including the tormenting of the two teenage bullies. I like how you portray Blaze's perception of children. I keep wishing that maybe at some point she would even have some kind of feelings for these two little girls, but given her status, that is not likely to happen.
Great storytelling, my friend.
Connie
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Connie. Blaze just has to protect the girls now, since her bosses need them for the show. But they may grow on her. :)
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Oh, I hope so!
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I finally got BLAZE edited and on Amazon. It's the last book with Lucifer as the Devil, the one where Blaze became an Earth Agent to take the place of Ginger. She turned the senator into a short clown, remember? Anyway, if you do and would like to leave a review,
Comment from rmj09
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The focus Blaze uses the camera. The storyline development Blaze takes Julie and Kayla to their school. Dropping them off she notices two boys picking on the girls. Then one of them trips Kayla who hits the sidewalk and breaks her nose. As one of the boys prepares to kick her, Blaze clicks the camera and freezes the boys who look like they could topple over. She sends Julie into the school, then with the camera heals Kayle, and sends her in the school. Going over and toppling the boys. One breaks their nose and using foul language she kicks him in the groin. When they quit crying she cured them. They asked if she was a witch and she informed them she is a demon. She warns them if they don't leave the girls alone she'll take them to hell. She goes into the school and informs the principle the girls would no longer be going there.
The dialogue is clear and we are seeing the personalities of Julie and Kayla. The narrative shows action the tripping of Kayla and the boy preparing to kick her. The boys running off as track stars when they knew Blaze had powers.
The emotion I felt was joy that she knew the boys were wrong. Disapproval of how the boys treated the girls.
The hook did Blaze give the boys to much information?
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Rita. Yes, she did tell the boys too much, but NO ONE will believe them if they tell the story. So no harm is done. :)
