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Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Shut heart."Mostly romance.
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Comment from Bryana
Your poem has touched my heart and soul
my friend. Beautiful gift to give someone. To
share and ease the pain. What can be more
beautiful. Your words show the kindness of your
heart.
I meant to tell you CONGRATULATIONS! For the
fifth place in the site. You deserve it.
Your poem has touched my heart and soul
my friend. Beautiful gift to give someone. To
share and ease the pain. What can be more
beautiful. Your words show the kindness of your
heart.
I meant to tell you CONGRATULATIONS! For the
fifth place in the site. You deserve it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from Black Wren
Hold my hand
(lets) try (let's)
to find
your way
to inner
peace,
Another wonderful poem with emotional depth.
You write these types wo very well, great job!
Hold my hand
(lets) try (let's)
to find
your way
to inner
peace,
Another wonderful poem with emotional depth.
You write these types wo very well, great job!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from Aleksandramarie
Yea I was just about to bake you some brownies and show up at your doorstep with a box of Kleenex and a bottle of wine......
Glad this isn't biographical... the last 4 or 5 have been in the pits, good but in the pits,
glad to hear you are just stretching.....ahhhh,
thanks, mspotter nice one
Yea I was just about to bake you some brownies and show up at your doorstep with a box of Kleenex and a bottle of wine......
Glad this isn't biographical... the last 4 or 5 have been in the pits, good but in the pits,
glad to hear you are just stretching.....ahhhh,
thanks, mspotter nice one
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from Mastery
Wow..Nice Halloween touch in the color, there Pili, I like the unique manner in which you consruct your poems. The jagged stanzas are very different to me. "
Rest with me under the generous branches of the chestnut tree." I love that line...Good job...Bob
Wow..Nice Halloween touch in the color, there Pili, I like the unique manner in which you consruct your poems. The jagged stanzas are very different to me. "
Rest with me under the generous branches of the chestnut tree." I love that line...Good job...Bob
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from suneagle
Hi, Pili. Nice poem, but it needs a few revisions.
Why has
your being
shut so tight... (shut so tight...? [It's a question.])
lets try (let's [It's a contraction of 'let us'.])
perhaps
you can
attain
to feel alive
once more.
(The word "attain" doesn't sit well in there. I suggest:
perhaps
you can
begin
to feel alive
once more. )
Hi, Pili. Nice poem, but it needs a few revisions.
Why has
your being
shut so tight... (shut so tight...? [It's a question.])
lets try (let's [It's a contraction of 'let us'.])
perhaps
you can
attain
to feel alive
once more.
(The word "attain" doesn't sit well in there. I suggest:
perhaps
you can
begin
to feel alive
once more. )
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from desb
And that's the love we all search for. Another wonderful write Pili. It flowed straight to my heart and the images you created were just so caring and loving. A beautiful poem that I know I'd love to be told.
Great work
Des
And that's the love we all search for. Another wonderful write Pili. It flowed straight to my heart and the images you created were just so caring and loving. A beautiful poem that I know I'd love to be told.
Great work
Des
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from thehappypoet
Nice stuff! Never read so sympathetic of a poem before. the ending rhyme was great. the chestnut tree line was really pretty. Good write!
Happy:)Poet
Nice stuff! Never read so sympathetic of a poem before. the ending rhyme was great. the chestnut tree line was really pretty. Good write!
Happy:)Poet
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from rob_the_magnificent
This is a great poem and I like the artwork you chose. One very minor point, probably just a typing error, but in "if it's to grievous" should be "too" in this case.
Like I said, very minor. Great job.
This is a great poem and I like the artwork you chose. One very minor point, probably just a typing error, but in "if it's to grievous" should be "too" in this case.
Like I said, very minor. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from Spellsweeper
I didn't find any thing sensational about this poem. Maybe its just I read so many love poems. Theres nothing really wrong with it. Its hard to critique the position of puntuations on a poem. I will read more thopugh. Radarr
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I didn't find any thing sensational about this poem. Maybe its just I read so many love poems. Theres nothing really wrong with it. Its hard to critique the position of puntuations on a poem. I will read more thopugh. Radarr
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2005
Comment from CYRANOGATOR
Now that is the right direction to head. Solution! Resolve! We must strive to find those thing fight with them tooth and nail. Gain which is ours to have and to hold. So much meaning in these wedding vows that we spoke. Yet never heard or held on to. Way to go
Wally III
Now that is the right direction to head. Solution! Resolve! We must strive to find those thing fight with them tooth and nail. Gain which is ours to have and to hold. So much meaning in these wedding vows that we spoke. Yet never heard or held on to. Way to go
Wally III
Comment Written 26-Sep-2005