BLAZE: Angel from Hell
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Fairy Dancers"Blaze is one of Lucifer's demons, a fallen angel.
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Comment from elgone
Bad situation for inner city kids to be caught in, gangs running footloose and ruining everything people try to do to help kids get out of the cycle of poverty.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Bad situation for inner city kids to be caught in, gangs running footloose and ruining everything people try to do to help kids get out of the cycle of poverty.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thanks for reading. I know how busy you must be. :)
Comment from GracieAnn
Phyllis, you never include superfluous things and have a plan for every character, so I don't ask. LOL. I like the direction that you are taking the story. Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Phyllis, you never include superfluous things and have a plan for every character, so I don't ask. LOL. I like the direction that you are taking the story. Well done, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Thank you for reading, and thanks for having faith that nothing will be without a purpose. :)
Comment from Selina Stambi
Author notes ... smiled. If you included the tykes in the story, then there must be a reason for doing so, right?
I loved the child's disarming conversation. Very true to life.
The introduction of the little girls is a breath of fresh air.
Sonali xx
Flare, which they had named the dance troupe, .. how about ... Flare, the name they had given the dance troupe ..?
Looking up, she looked into the big brown eyes ... how about: ... She looked up, and into the big brown eyes of
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Author notes ... smiled. If you included the tykes in the story, then there must be a reason for doing so, right?
I loved the child's disarming conversation. Very true to life.
The introduction of the little girls is a breath of fresh air.
Sonali xx
Flare, which they had named the dance troupe, .. how about ... Flare, the name they had given the dance troupe ..?
Looking up, she looked into the big brown eyes ... how about: ... She looked up, and into the big brown eyes of
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Sonali. I love your suggestions and will use both. You have such a way with words. :)
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My pleasure, Phyllis. Hugs xx
Comment from Spitfire
Kids -oh you mean children. Love this. Kids are baby goats!
"No, I keep the books."
Julie scanned the office. "I don't see any. Where you keep 'em? Do you have a liberry?"
A parallel situation of how words have so many meanings.
So those are children, huh? I don't see what's so special about them. --ha, ha. Blaze is going to discover the beauty of innocence.
Good cliffhanger.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Kids -oh you mean children. Love this. Kids are baby goats!
"No, I keep the books."
Julie scanned the office. "I don't see any. Where you keep 'em? Do you have a liberry?"
A parallel situation of how words have so many meanings.
So those are children, huh? I don't see what's so special about them. --ha, ha. Blaze is going to discover the beauty of innocence.
Good cliffhanger.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Shari. You're right. She'll learn that kids need protection.
Comment from ravenblack
I think Blaze is going to learn exactly what makes children so special. How could she not with "liberry" and " got stole". After today, I wish my laptop got stole. Hours with tech support to no avail and solves the connectivity problem? My daughter...kids are special.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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I think Blaze is going to learn exactly what makes children so special. How could she not with "liberry" and " got stole". After today, I wish my laptop got stole. Hours with tech support to no avail and solves the connectivity problem? My daughter...kids are special.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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That's so typical of kids today. Computers are like ice cream to them. My hubby, who is in the computer field, gets advice from our daughter! It's hard to keep up with all the new features, but the kids have no problem whatsoever!
Thanks for reading, Ed. When is the January poetry thing?
Comment from rmj09
The focus Blaze discovers what children are. The storyline development Theo brings a group of children to the dance studio. He tells Blaze about the children, later she meets Julia and Kayla. Her statement 'so those are children.'
The dialogue is clear and more is learned about the characters. The narrative shows action Blaze jumps from her seat when she saw the two little people.
The emotion I felt was surprise that Blaze didn't know what children are.
The hook are one of the children going to die and Blaze take over their person.
Keep on writing.
Phyllis, we've had over 15 inches of snow so far, expecting more on Tuesday. *o* Rita
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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The focus Blaze discovers what children are. The storyline development Theo brings a group of children to the dance studio. He tells Blaze about the children, later she meets Julia and Kayla. Her statement 'so those are children.'
The dialogue is clear and more is learned about the characters. The narrative shows action Blaze jumps from her seat when she saw the two little people.
The emotion I felt was surprise that Blaze didn't know what children are.
The hook are one of the children going to die and Blaze take over their person.
Keep on writing.
Phyllis, we've had over 15 inches of snow so far, expecting more on Tuesday. *o* Rita
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Rita. FIFTEEN INCHES??? Where are you? We only had six and it was enough to be pretty but not be a hardship.
Your guess about one of the kids dying is interesting, but she could never take over a child's body. Demons can only possess people who are sinners nearly as evil as the demon. So the most evil demons have the hardest time finding a human that will accept them. Lucifer can only use the most evil and corrupt humans, so he usually goes to Washington, D.C., to find a body to use. :)
Comment from boxergirl
Interesting continuation of the story line, Phyllis. I saw your author notes on the addition of the kids so I will be anxious to see how they will play a part. Your details about the poor condition of the school may play some part in it. 8-)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Interesting continuation of the story line, Phyllis. I saw your author notes on the addition of the kids so I will be anxious to see how they will play a part. Your details about the poor condition of the school may play some part in it. 8-)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much. The girls' school does tie into what the senator promised voters... but then he went back on his word to make a deal with Luke, disguised as some rich gangster, Lucas. That's in chapter 18. CLICK HERE.
Comment from marijmd
This is Blaze first time seeing children? Or I guess talking with them? I have a feeling they will melt her cold heart later on in the story - she will come to see their circumstances and have empathy.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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This is Blaze first time seeing children? Or I guess talking with them? I have a feeling they will melt her cold heart later on in the story - she will come to see their circumstances and have empathy.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thanks for reading, Maria. You're absolutely right. She will see for herself the horrors of their lives, and she has lived in a horrible place herself. She understands and will want to help, but... well, you'll have to think back to what her precious senator said before and after he made shady deal with "Lucas"... who was really Luke in some guy's body.
Comment from Connie C
This chapter, for sure, makes one wonder what will happen next, especially since you mention in your author's notes that Julie and Kayla are important. Cute picture of Julia (Julie), by the way. You also keep us hanging when you end it with Theo calling and sounding concerned. I am always so impressed, Phyllis, with the fact that I never, ever see any kinds of spags in your writing. I do believe you might have told me you had been an English teacher. It certainly shows in your writing.
Good job, as always.
Connie
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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This chapter, for sure, makes one wonder what will happen next, especially since you mention in your author's notes that Julie and Kayla are important. Cute picture of Julia (Julie), by the way. You also keep us hanging when you end it with Theo calling and sounding concerned. I am always so impressed, Phyllis, with the fact that I never, ever see any kinds of spags in your writing. I do believe you might have told me you had been an English teacher. It certainly shows in your writing.
Good job, as always.
Connie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, COnnie. Yes, I taught both math and English, sometimes both. It does help to know the rules. :)
Comment from amahra
This was funny and delightful to read. So Blaze is not so impressed with kids. That's cute. I also like the part where Julia talks about stolen goods being fenced. She's a smart cookie. At her age I knew nothing about fencing stuff.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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This was funny and delightful to read. So Blaze is not so impressed with kids. That's cute. I also like the part where Julia talks about stolen goods being fenced. She's a smart cookie. At her age I knew nothing about fencing stuff.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, amahra. She knows about fencing stolen goods because she lives in a rough, poor area of town.
