Criminal Justice
sixty words exactly-short story26 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
This was very nicely written and realised. You can do this now with a 3D printer. Which is complete madness. Truly an entire story in sixty words.
Good luck with it in the competition.
GMG
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This was very nicely written and realised. You can do this now with a 3D printer. Which is complete madness. Truly an entire story in sixty words.
Good luck with it in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a taught story in just sixty words. There is an addressing of social issues with a solution that opens up plenty of room for debate. It is easy to imagine the back story that might go with this. It has my vite.
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This is a taught story in just sixty words. There is an addressing of social issues with a solution that opens up plenty of room for debate. It is easy to imagine the back story that might go with this. It has my vite.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from donaldcolson
Pretty nice work for the format. It seems to approach humor but doesn't quite make it. I think it would be better if it had. do0n
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Pretty nice work for the format. It seems to approach humor but doesn't quite make it. I think it would be better if it had. do0n
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from Dr. Nad
"Criminal Justice" is a very nice 60 word Dash. The whole story unfolds before our eyes and it hits us between the eyes with your twist on the very end. Very Nicely Done. May God Bless You Happy New Year.
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"Criminal Justice" is a very nice 60 word Dash. The whole story unfolds before our eyes and it hits us between the eyes with your twist on the very end. Very Nicely Done. May God Bless You Happy New Year.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from Gloria ....
It's not easy telling a story in 60 words but you've done it. Much is implied with the mention of the deceased parents. The conflict being making an honest living, and that works even better than having the bucks to buy your way out of what should've been a conviction.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
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It's not easy telling a story in 60 words but you've done it. Much is implied with the mention of the deceased parents. The conflict being making an honest living, and that works even better than having the bucks to buy your way out of what should've been a conviction.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from mfowler
A well spent sixty words.
You get straight to the point. He's a scumbag who's bought off the jury or judge. He laughs in the face of his victim's parents. The father kills him with a plastic gun. Justice of sorts, trumps justice by money.
Very well set up. Very well played out.
Best of luck.
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A well spent sixty words.
You get straight to the point. He's a scumbag who's bought off the jury or judge. He laughs in the face of his victim's parents. The father kills him with a plastic gun. Justice of sorts, trumps justice by money.
Very well set up. Very well played out.
Best of luck.
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
