Criminal Justice
sixty words exactly-short story26 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
A chilling tale of a cold-hearted murderer and a vigilante determined to get justice for his daughter - and so the child's mom loses both her daughter and her husband. No winners here. A strong flash fiction story. Brooke
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A chilling tale of a cold-hearted murderer and a vigilante determined to get justice for his daughter - and so the child's mom loses both her daughter and her husband. No winners here. A strong flash fiction story. Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from Michaelk
Nicely done. When I first read 'acrylic gun' I thought, 'Is he going to do some roofing?' then I realized my mistake. I'm sure there are many courtrooms that could use this type of real justice.
Excellent job of conveying a full and detailed story in only sixty words.
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Nicely done. When I first read 'acrylic gun' I thought, 'Is he going to do some roofing?' then I realized my mistake. I'm sure there are many courtrooms that could use this type of real justice.
Excellent job of conveying a full and detailed story in only sixty words.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of the sixty word dash contest entry, "Criminal Justice", You have chosen a perfect cartoon piece for your story. Too many people get away with murder these days. Good luck in the contest. Carole
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To the author of the sixty word dash contest entry, "Criminal Justice", You have chosen a perfect cartoon piece for your story. Too many people get away with murder these days. Good luck in the contest. Carole
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from rjuselius
this is a compelling piece of literary art dear anon! the mood is set from the very start and follows throughout the whole work. you can really guess the ending but you have written it so well that it does not matter.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
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this is a compelling piece of literary art dear anon! the mood is set from the very start and follows throughout the whole work. you can really guess the ending but you have written it so well that it does not matter.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
People should not be so cocky - or, as they say,pride goeth before a
fall and I suspect Norman had one heck of a fall when Frank was done.
It's amazing how few words one needs to tell a story when he is
succinct in doing so.
good luck in the contest
jan
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People should not be so cocky - or, as they say,pride goeth before a
fall and I suspect Norman had one heck of a fall when Frank was done.
It's amazing how few words one needs to tell a story when he is
succinct in doing so.
good luck in the contest
jan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from bob cullen
This is so good. It tells a complete story and it delivers my form of justice.
This is a complete story, it has a beginning, an ending and a credible plot. And all in sixty words.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is so good. It tells a complete story and it delivers my form of justice.
This is a complete story, it has a beginning, an ending and a credible plot. And all in sixty words.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from mshirachot
Wow! Surprise ending there for Norman! This little story is full to the brim with what makes for murder mystery movie material!
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Marsha
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Wow! Surprise ending there for Norman! This little story is full to the brim with what makes for murder mystery movie material!
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Marsha
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from forestport12
Wow. This is the first one that I'm guessing will strike a chord and garner votes. I thought your thought process in this was intelligent and the storyline nicely crafted along with a superb picture.
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Wow. This is the first one that I'm guessing will strike a chord and garner votes. I thought your thought process in this was intelligent and the storyline nicely crafted along with a superb picture.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from daeneam
Many lives are wasted whenever money talks. Here in the Philippines, there are so many criminals who get away because they have money. If the victim is lucky, criminals will be put behind bars, but with special treatment.
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Many lives are wasted whenever money talks. Here in the Philippines, there are so many criminals who get away because they have money. If the victim is lucky, criminals will be put behind bars, but with special treatment.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Did I detect a nod to Norman Bates here -- the crazy, whacked-out psychotic caretaker of the Bates Motel in director Alfred Hitchcock's film, Psycho -- in this, Anonymous Author? In fact, I had to go back an reread it once more because my muddled mind subliminally inserted "Bates" for "Barnes", LOL.
It would seem we're about to have a new psycho running amok named Norman now.
Well done, and it's scary because it could conceivably happen!
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. :}
~Dean
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Did I detect a nod to Norman Bates here -- the crazy, whacked-out psychotic caretaker of the Bates Motel in director Alfred Hitchcock's film, Psycho -- in this, Anonymous Author? In fact, I had to go back an reread it once more because my muddled mind subliminally inserted "Bates" for "Barnes", LOL.
It would seem we're about to have a new psycho running amok named Norman now.
Well done, and it's scary because it could conceivably happen!
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. :}
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
